Life In A Chamber
Description of the beginning of life32 total reviews
Comment from jusylee72
Wonderful description of the beginning of life. Your words definitely kept me reading. I could see the picture in my mind of this beautiful soul emerging. Thank you for your words.
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Wonderful description of the beginning of life. Your words definitely kept me reading. I could see the picture in my mind of this beautiful soul emerging. Thank you for your words.
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you ,I am inspired
Comment from maryvellef
It's a nice poem, descriptive of the life inside the womb. The lines are well- written except for one or two that sounds stilted to my ear. I think that one that ends with hair and the last one that repeats the word "chamber". This is just subjective. Others might find those ok so you just see if you feel good changing them. It is still a vey good work. I love the line " I felt like I was expelled."
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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It's a nice poem, descriptive of the life inside the womb. The lines are well- written except for one or two that sounds stilted to my ear. I think that one that ends with hair and the last one that repeats the word "chamber". This is just subjective. Others might find those ok so you just see if you feel good changing them. It is still a vey good work. I love the line " I felt like I was expelled."
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you I really appreciate your positive criticism, it will move me to do better next time , Thank you once again:)
