Life In A Chamber
Description of the beginning of life32 total reviews
Comment from sage17611
That chamber is so warm, moist, soft and protective, no worries in there. I really like the picture, the poem is very nicely displayed. The flow is good, with a nice message about a fetus time in the womb. Good job, I really enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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That chamber is so warm, moist, soft and protective, no worries in there. I really like the picture, the poem is very nicely displayed. The flow is good, with a nice message about a fetus time in the womb. Good job, I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Thank you I appreciate
Comment from Kaydoe
A lovely poem expressing the thoughts of the unborn experiencing life in the womb.
I think it is good for people to get a perspective of the ones who are unable to speak. Thanks for giving them a voice, well done.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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A lovely poem expressing the thoughts of the unborn experiencing life in the womb.
I think it is good for people to get a perspective of the ones who are unable to speak. Thanks for giving them a voice, well done.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Comment from zanya
NOt often we take time to imagine life inside the womb - a sacred , secretive home to our earliest beginnings where we are safe and protected from harm- some interesting images 'I can feel the forces of nature coming my way'.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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NOt often we take time to imagine life inside the womb - a sacred , secretive home to our earliest beginnings where we are safe and protected from harm- some interesting images 'I can feel the forces of nature coming my way'.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Comment from marion
Hi
The presentation of Life in a Chamber is stunning. The topic original. I do feel however, and it's the reason I dropped a star) is there is repeat in some of the lines. If you are going to sue the words toes and thumb, then use them only once. Not again in the next line. It is the same as the lines ... ... I knew my way around 'my chamber' and in the next line you again say 'my chamber'. I hope I have been of some help. I think a little more work would make this a six star poem.
sleeping (space) kicking
numbered, (space) i cannot hide
Marion.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Hi
The presentation of Life in a Chamber is stunning. The topic original. I do feel however, and it's the reason I dropped a star) is there is repeat in some of the lines. If you are going to sue the words toes and thumb, then use them only once. Not again in the next line. It is the same as the lines ... ... I knew my way around 'my chamber' and in the next line you again say 'my chamber'. I hope I have been of some help. I think a little more work would make this a six star poem.
sleeping (space) kicking
numbered, (space) i cannot hide
Marion.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Comment from MizKat
Hi SH,
You really did a great job in writing this poem about a baby being in his mother's belly getting ready to be born. I really enjoyed reading how he/she was thinking. Telling about the baby is wonderful and also is enjoyable to read.
MizKat
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Hi SH,
You really did a great job in writing this poem about a baby being in his mother's belly getting ready to be born. I really enjoyed reading how he/she was thinking. Telling about the baby is wonderful and also is enjoyable to read.
MizKat
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Thank you I appreciate your review
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I like to read your work. MizKat
Comment from DonandVicki
A stunning poetic verse and the photography that you chose to accompany your poem is breathtaking. Very well composed and a joy to read.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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A stunning poetic verse and the photography that you chose to accompany your poem is breathtaking. Very well composed and a joy to read.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Comment from tony bronk
It's as if you remember everything from being there in the beginning. It is quite incredible! I enjoyed the evolution of your poem very much. It is very creative. Excellent write! Tony
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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It's as if you remember everything from being there in the beginning. It is quite incredible! I enjoyed the evolution of your poem very much. It is very creative. Excellent write! Tony
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you Tony I appreciate your review
Comment from Naham Mills
Wow. Im speechless. This really hits home for me. Nice work. Grammatically flawless and structurally sound in that it flows really well between paragraphs and i like the themes you explore. Powerful introduction. Loved the beginning so so so very much!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Wow. Im speechless. This really hits home for me. Nice work. Grammatically flawless and structurally sound in that it flows really well between paragraphs and i like the themes you explore. Powerful introduction. Loved the beginning so so so very much!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you, your review has inspired me .
Comment from Joyce Long
Your little poem of life in a chamber is very different. Change in a life does leave some stress. My grandson is graduating from high school and he certainly has mixed emotions. We need to take just one step at a time. Very well written.
Joyce 04-28-16
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Your little poem of life in a chamber is very different. Change in a life does leave some stress. My grandson is graduating from high school and he certainly has mixed emotions. We need to take just one step at a time. Very well written.
Joyce 04-28-16
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you. You found a way to relate to this poem , I appreciate
Comment from djeckert
this is a well done little write ,from a different perspective. Very good take and imagery that flows nicely. God surely Blesses!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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this is a well done little write ,from a different perspective. Very good take and imagery that flows nicely. God surely Blesses!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your review
