Life In A Chamber
Description of the beginning of life32 total reviews
Comment from Cybertron1986
Nice rhythm and voice. I liked the occasional humor which included the "passing of gas." :) As the reader, I was reflecting on those moments you mentioned. Quite a momentous event which I'm only able to recall through stories. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Nice rhythm and voice. I liked the occasional humor which included the "passing of gas." :) As the reader, I was reflecting on those moments you mentioned. Quite a momentous event which I'm only able to recall through stories. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you I appreciate your beautiful comment.
Comment from Anne Johnston
"Every day, I felt safe with love to keep warm
Sleeping, eating, kicking was my daily norm
Truth be told, my life began at conception
And sometimes I kicked to get some attention"
A great verse written from the perspective of the unborn child. Good rhyming and easy to read.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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"Every day, I felt safe with love to keep warm
Sleeping, eating, kicking was my daily norm
Truth be told, my life began at conception
And sometimes I kicked to get some attention"
A great verse written from the perspective of the unborn child. Good rhyming and easy to read.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you I appreciate your beautiful comment.
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You are very welcome
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Thank you
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You are welcome
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Thank you Anne
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You are welcome
Comment from Pantygynt
A foetal autobiography no less! This is a splendid idea and really most creative (no pun intended as although we have the benefits of ultrasound scanning for some reason we have no real memories of that secure time in the 'chamber' - at least i don't which was one reason why I enjoyed this revival. it filled a gap.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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A foetal autobiography no less! This is a splendid idea and really most creative (no pun intended as although we have the benefits of ultrasound scanning for some reason we have no real memories of that secure time in the 'chamber' - at least i don't which was one reason why I enjoyed this revival. it filled a gap.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Thank you I appreciate your candid review
Comment from Sanku
An unusual idea for a poem. Its the the first time I am reading something from the point of a foetus.
I liked the poem and the way you have brought about the baby's thoughts
thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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An unusual idea for a poem. Its the the first time I am reading something from the point of a foetus.
I liked the poem and the way you have brought about the baby's thoughts
thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Thank you I appreciate
Comment from Anntonette
This is a sweet poem, nurtured and natured. Love the theme of it all, and that it is you cannot stay in your comfort zone forever, sometimes change is good and the outside world is waiting for you. Thanks for sharing
- Anntonette
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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This is a sweet poem, nurtured and natured. Love the theme of it all, and that it is you cannot stay in your comfort zone forever, sometimes change is good and the outside world is waiting for you. Thanks for sharing
- Anntonette
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Thank you I appreciate
Comment from meeshu
This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage. Well done, Jonadab. I really like this, sort of natures checklist. I wish you well in all your future endeavors.......................meeshu
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage. Well done, Jonadab. I really like this, sort of natures checklist. I wish you well in all your future endeavors.......................meeshu
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Thank you I appreciate
Comment from Ginger Banks
Very beautiful; it's creative, and fun in such a way as to inspire me to assess and review it using the words - poignant and intriguing, as well. An incredible imagery from a baby's point of view, while living inside the deep dark chamber of their mother. Such a blessed poem, I enjoyed reading it. A poem for all of us to read and rediscover, with new eyes, the awesome wonderfulness of life - human creation and birth.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Very beautiful; it's creative, and fun in such a way as to inspire me to assess and review it using the words - poignant and intriguing, as well. An incredible imagery from a baby's point of view, while living inside the deep dark chamber of their mother. Such a blessed poem, I enjoyed reading it. A poem for all of us to read and rediscover, with new eyes, the awesome wonderfulness of life - human creation and birth.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Thank you for your outstanding review , i appreciate
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You're truly welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem. I like the POV of the child inside the chamber [womb]. Your lines flow smoothly with a good story to tell. Good job on the rhyme. Your picture is perfect.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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I enjoyed your poem. I like the POV of the child inside the chamber [womb]. Your lines flow smoothly with a good story to tell. Good job on the rhyme. Your picture is perfect.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 05-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much
Comment from candyfink
I like the poem..... but I think you need to make the font bigger so that the words pop out more........the words are being overshadowed by the picture.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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I like the poem..... but I think you need to make the font bigger so that the words pop out more........the words are being overshadowed by the picture.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Thank you , i appreciate your honest review
Comment from pmait
I am surprised you remember. I don't. In the realm of imagination, though, I expect you are close to the truth--that the child within the womb, without language or logic, still feels what you have put into words for him (or her). The uneven pattern of rhyme and slant rhyme adds to the attractiveness of your work.
reply by the author on 05-May-2016
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I am surprised you remember. I don't. In the realm of imagination, though, I expect you are close to the truth--that the child within the womb, without language or logic, still feels what you have put into words for him (or her). The uneven pattern of rhyme and slant rhyme adds to the attractiveness of your work.
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 05-May-2016
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Thank you so much I cherish your review
