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Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "My Son's Letter _ a short memoir "Story telling poems
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Comment from tfawcus
Here are six stars for you and Nic to share between you and, through the glistening tears that your writing inspired, they look more like twelve to me.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Here are six stars for you and Nic to share between you and, through the glistening tears that your writing inspired, they look more like twelve to me.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I will let him know. Life is wonderful now. We have come a long ways.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It is a nightmare life and I am glad you and your children got out of that situation alive and all doing well in life. It does not always happen that people rise above their bad circumstances.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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It is a nightmare life and I am glad you and your children got out of that situation alive and all doing well in life. It does not always happen that people rise above their bad circumstances.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you Sandra , we did get out and we did grow up and life is wonderful now.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I made it all the way to the school parking lot before I called the office and told them Isimple simply couldn't come in.
I wouldn't dream of attempting to edit, alter, or in any way change Nik's poem. It's perfect just as it is. Full of anger, angst, and more than a little despondent, there is some light at the end of the tunnel, it seems. And where there's just a pinprick of light, there is also life, and hope...
~Dean
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I made it all the way to the school parking lot before I called the office and told them I
I wouldn't dream of attempting to edit, alter, or in any way change Nik's poem. It's perfect just as it is. Full of anger, angst, and more than a little despondent, there is some light at the end of the tunnel, it seems. And where there's just a pinprick of light, there is also life, and hope...
~Dean
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thanks once again for editing. I love it. Nik's poem was heartbreaking and so well written. So raw with emotion. He is an amazing person and athlete. Thank you for about the hundredth time Dean.
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You're welcome for about the hundredth time, Jusylee.
Heh-heh-heh...
Comment from Jay Squires
I feel privileged to read your son's poem--didn't find a word or punctuation mark I would edit out of it.
Likewise, your lead-in to the poem ... flawless, naked, honest, courageous. I want to read more of your writing.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I feel privileged to read your son's poem--didn't find a word or punctuation mark I would edit out of it.
Likewise, your lead-in to the poem ... flawless, naked, honest, courageous. I want to read more of your writing.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I truly appreciate it. The truth about life is sometimes hard to tell about your self, but the lessons learned are worthwhile. You give me the strength to tell more.
Comment from LisaD123
This was very powerfully written and deeply moving and I am so angry with myself that I am out of six stars because this is what it truly deserves. The sentiments are perfectly expressed and the reader can empathise perfectly with the situation presented. The free verse is excellently executed and the repetition serves to make the reader become more involved in the story. Thank you for sharing such a personal piece and please pass onto Nik that I think he is an immensely talented writer (a chip off the old block!).
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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This was very powerfully written and deeply moving and I am so angry with myself that I am out of six stars because this is what it truly deserves. The sentiments are perfectly expressed and the reader can empathise perfectly with the situation presented. The free verse is excellently executed and the repetition serves to make the reader become more involved in the story. Thank you for sharing such a personal piece and please pass onto Nik that I think he is an immensely talented writer (a chip off the old block!).
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. I will tell him that. He is an amazing person who is fun to be around and such a wonderful athlete.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
What a simply amazing story and what a monumental spirit you, Judy, placed into each one of your children. I assure you that did not come from their abusive father. That is all from your love, and sometimes, your failings. Your journey, with them as witness, speaks to the inner spirit that kept you plugging along, waiting for the moment when you could leave with your children and begin anew. That is a beautiful example that will stick with them throughout their lives, good times and bad.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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What a simply amazing story and what a monumental spirit you, Judy, placed into each one of your children. I assure you that did not come from their abusive father. That is all from your love, and sometimes, your failings. Your journey, with them as witness, speaks to the inner spirit that kept you plugging along, waiting for the moment when you could leave with your children and begin anew. That is a beautiful example that will stick with them throughout their lives, good times and bad.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. They are amazing and life is wonderful now. Some of us take longer to realize that we are special and that life is worth every minute.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Judy. You certainly have seen the rough spots in your life. As have your kids when they were younger, I gather. I was a bit confused reading your eight-year-old's poem for only one reason...that being the adult harsh swearing. did he really speak and think like that at eight?
Thanks for sharing. Very emotional stuff. Bob
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi, Judy. You certainly have seen the rough spots in your life. As have your kids when they were younger, I gather. I was a bit confused reading your eight-year-old's poem for only one reason...that being the adult harsh swearing. did he really speak and think like that at eight?
Thanks for sharing. Very emotional stuff. Bob
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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No , this is his memory from when he was eight years old. He wrote it as an adult. I will go back and clarify that , Thank you .
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Good idea, Judy. Bob
