Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

This is a lovely anniversary poem for your husband Kim. Love the
In glass, our reflection Was smiling perfection.
And just as interesting was Marya's story. I too hope you get to have some Golden champagne smiles.
cheers,
valda.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thank you, Valda! :)

I'm going to print him out some of the poems I've written him and put them in a book.
I appreciate the kind review.

Kim

reply by Pearl Edwards on 29-Apr-2016

That will be a great Anniversary Present.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Kim. Congratulations to you and James on your 21st anniversary. A milestone on your way to your golden. I enjoyed reading this. Presented beautifully. I'm very behind in my reading and reviewing. Hope to catch up soon. :) Marilyn

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Hi Marilyn!

Thank you so much for your lovely thoughts. I am so happy to hear that I'm not the only one who has fallen behind! lol I've been trying to catch up, to no avail this week! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

Kim

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

The art work is very special
for these words written
The writing told of love and sincerity
when the one we love is so special.

Annie

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Hi Annie!

Thank you so much for leaving me your wonderful thoughts.

Kim

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

To mimic a style that is not your own can be difficult, you do it very well here, even down to the strange aberrations of rhyme scheme within the tercets, which suddenly change from aba to abb or aab as do those of Zaturenska herself. I can't help feeling uneasy with i,t having been taught that once a unity is established then it should be adhered to. But she's the one with the Pulitzer not me so I guess I just could be wrong on this one.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016

Hi Pantygynt:

And that is precisely why I did it lol I wasn't actually comfortable with it either, but she did it first, so I followed suit. What did I read recently... it is either the form for a Rondel or Rondelet that does that change in rhyme scheme, as well...

Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I truly appreciate your insight and comments. Don't worry, I promise not to make a habit of changing up my rhyme schemes mid poem :)

Kim

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

:-) I can see the connection to Marya Zaturenska
style (I had to read your notes first because I was
not familiar with her and wanted to see an example
first).

This was a lovely reflection of your wedding day and
what it has lead to -

Congrats on your upcoming 21st! :-)

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016

Hi Leineco,

I discovered Marya Zaturenska in my reading. Since I've stayed fairly alphabetical in the book, I was thrilled to come up with a Z. :) Otherwise, I'd never have discovered that she won the Pulitzer Prize for Poetry. I've learned a lot this month!

Thanks for the lovely comments.

Kim

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Kim,

What a great poem for your husband.

Your inspiration was super, too. Thanks for the author notes. Your lines had smooth flow and great rhyme like the inspiration poem in the notes.

I like the use of alliteration, too. The picture is awesome!

Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016

Hi Jan,

Thank you for the lovely review. I appreciate your kind comments. :)

Kim

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is really a very cool poem and toast to your upcoming 21st wedding anniversary. I imagine you'll be reciting it to a large family gathering. Or perhaps a romantic even for two?

Either way it's a wonderful write and you captured a whole lotta love.

Great job!

Gloria

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016

Hi Gloria...

I think it will go into a book of poems for my husband. We are going on vacation at the end of May, so our Anniversary will be low-key at home, just the two of us, I think. :) Thank you for the lovely comments.

Kim

Comment from jusylee72

Excellent

Happy, Happy Anniversary. I hope you have many more. What a special gift you gave to your husband, His poem, your appreciation, your passion for writing. I truly wish you both the best.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Hi Jusylee,

Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your lovely compliments. :)

Kim

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

I wish, as wishers do,
For golden champagne smiles --
As I grow old with you.

;)
Beautifully said, Kim... Congratulations on a happy marriage and Happy Anniversary (coming up) A very well written poem which shows a more personal side to your poetry, one which I love reading.
Loved it,
Cat

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Thanks, Cat! :)

I'm thinking of printing out the poems I've written him through the years and putting them in an album for our anniversary. We're going on vacation to Spokane to visit his family at the end of May, so I think we're just going to be low key at home for this one. Thank you for the wonderful comments.

Kim

reply by I am Cat on 25-Apr-2016

Mine and Jimmy's is the 12th (our 32nd) we'll be low-key as well. ;)

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Very nicely done.
A different type of poem but it expressed love all the way.
Nicley phrased and I wish you a happy anniversary.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Thanks, Barb,
I was keeping with my theme and modeling a poem style used by Marya Zaturenska. I appreciate your lovely comments. :)

Kim