Intuition
Intuition is the sixth sense86 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, RP. Refresshing write here. different than the usual fare on this site. I liked this stanza in particular:
"Observing scenes we feel or dream
It hints us what needs to be done,
And also flinging the bright beam
Lays bare nasty notions to shun."
Bravo! Great job, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi, RP. Refresshing write here. different than the usual fare on this site. I liked this stanza in particular:
"Observing scenes we feel or dream
It hints us what needs to be done,
And also flinging the bright beam
Lays bare nasty notions to shun."
Bravo! Great job, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello Bob,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments, and also quoting your favorite lines which gives me a personal touch.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Dr. Nad
Intuition is a very niceFaith Poetry Contest contest entry . In this literary piece, you extol the virtues of that innate trait that so often lies dormant beneath the surface of the human spirit. You remind us that we are not at the mercy of the winds of adversity. You challenge us to engage the part of our psyche that wants to warn us of danger and facilitate streams of success. Thanks for the exultation. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Intuition is a very niceFaith Poetry Contest contest entry . In this literary piece, you extol the virtues of that innate trait that so often lies dormant beneath the surface of the human spirit. You remind us that we are not at the mercy of the winds of adversity. You challenge us to engage the part of our psyche that wants to warn us of danger and facilitate streams of success. Thanks for the exultation. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello Dr. Nad,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely, morale boosting comments and Blessings. I feel a personal touch here.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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You are very welcome,
Embrace the Love from above!
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are interesting, descriptive and thought provoking. The reader pondered on the words of this poem. Thank you for the author's notes. The artwork is perfect and compliments the words and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are interesting, descriptive and thought provoking. The reader pondered on the words of this poem. Thank you for the author's notes. The artwork is perfect and compliments the words and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello Harmony13,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from seaglass
I truly believe in the message here. How many times I have blundered to look back and remember that intuition had warned me and I had ignored it. You have set your message to perfect rhyme.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I truly believe in the message here. How many times I have blundered to look back and remember that intuition had warned me and I had ignored it. You have set your message to perfect rhyme.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello Seaglass,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from happykat4
Like this poem. My intuition came into play when we made the decision to purchasea home in a certain neighborhood part of the city. I felt I was very influenced by intuition when I would hire a person, etc. The poem is well written and the rhythm and rhyme move it along nicely. Good luck in the contest. Kat
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Like this poem. My intuition came into play when we made the decision to purchasea home in a certain neighborhood part of the city. I felt I was very influenced by intuition when I would hire a person, etc. The poem is well written and the rhythm and rhyme move it along nicely. Good luck in the contest. Kat
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello Happykat4,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely, morale boosting comments and Good Luck Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from DonandVicki
A good entry for the faith prompt. I had to read this through several times but I do seen now that we need faith coupled with intuition. Very well done.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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A good entry for the faith prompt. I had to read this through several times but I do seen now that we need faith coupled with intuition. Very well done.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello DonandVicki,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Well done. I hope you win the contest.
My mother used to say that intuition is a higher intelligence. I know she was right. Your poem bears that out. You rhyming is excellent and the poem just flows.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Well done. I hope you win the contest.
My mother used to say that intuition is a higher intelligence. I know she was right. Your poem bears that out. You rhyming is excellent and the poem just flows.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello Nancyrabbrose,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments. I feel a personal touch here.
"I hope you win the contest." - I'm highly honored.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from L.lora
You have a most interesting poem, well thought
out with for the most part has a good flow. I noticed
that you used a strict 8 syllable count in constructing
this and that might account for some of your word
choices which caused some choppiness in your
cadence. I noodled with your poem a bit, just a few
suggestions, I hope you don't mind.
Also, let your line breaks work for you;
you need to delete the commas and periods at the end
of your lines. It is not necessary to capitalize the first
letter of every line especially if it is a connected thought
to the previous line (as if it is a sentence cut in half)
Being a contest entry--I didn't want to knock
down on the rating...If you make changes and wish for me to revise my rating; please contact me and I will re-review your poem. Best of luck with your contest. Lora
Intuition is the sixth sense
Resides veiled in every being,
[And] consoling when we are tense (delete the word in the brackets)
Guides us straight to our well-being.
It predicts sound or ill omen
Hovering just close to each life,
[And] helps all lives, likewise human (delete the word in the brackets)
Surmount tons of heartrending strife.
Observing scenes we feel or dream
It hints us what needs to be done,
[And also] flinging the bright beam (delete the word in the brackets replacing them with "while")
Lays bare nasty notions to shun.
Elevating the common sense
It leads us to acclaimed success
[Hence,] sensing within its presence (delete the word in the brackets)
Let's progress, shedding [aside] stress. (delete the word in the brackets)
[In its tune if] we play our role (reconstruct the first of this line to "if in its
Having full trust like a true fan,
None can deprive us of the goal
Pursued with a wisely framed plan.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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You have a most interesting poem, well thought
out with for the most part has a good flow. I noticed
that you used a strict 8 syllable count in constructing
this and that might account for some of your word
choices which caused some choppiness in your
cadence. I noodled with your poem a bit, just a few
suggestions, I hope you don't mind.
Also, let your line breaks work for you;
you need to delete the commas and periods at the end
of your lines. It is not necessary to capitalize the first
letter of every line especially if it is a connected thought
to the previous line (as if it is a sentence cut in half)
Being a contest entry--I didn't want to knock
down on the rating...If you make changes and wish for me to revise my rating; please contact me and I will re-review your poem. Best of luck with your contest. Lora
Intuition is the sixth sense
Resides veiled in every being,
[And] consoling when we are tense (delete the word in the brackets)
Guides us straight to our well-being.
It predicts sound or ill omen
Hovering just close to each life,
[And] helps all lives, likewise human (delete the word in the brackets)
Surmount tons of heartrending strife.
Observing scenes we feel or dream
It hints us what needs to be done,
[And also] flinging the bright beam (delete the word in the brackets replacing them with "while")
Lays bare nasty notions to shun.
Elevating the common sense
It leads us to acclaimed success
[Hence,] sensing within its presence (delete the word in the brackets)
Let's progress, shedding [aside] stress. (delete the word in the brackets)
[In its tune if] we play our role (reconstruct the first of this line to "if in its
Having full trust like a true fan,
None can deprive us of the goal
Pursued with a wisely framed plan.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you.
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You are most welcome, if you decide to rework it and want it re-reviewed let me know, I'd be happy to help. Lora
Comment from Bill O'Bier
I enjoyed this poem and it is a great contest entry. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. One stanza truly resonates with me at this time:
In its tune if we play our role
Having full trust like a true fan,
None can deprive us of the goal
Pursued with a wisely framed plan.
Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you all the best-
Bill
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed this poem and it is a great contest entry. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. One stanza truly resonates with me at this time:
In its tune if we play our role
Having full trust like a true fan,
None can deprive us of the goal
Pursued with a wisely framed plan.
Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you all the best-
Bill
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello Bill O'Bier,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely, morale boosting comments and also quoting your favorite lines which gives me a personal touch.
Thanks a lot for Good Luck Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from c_lucas
It is an active intuition that brings about the Gift of seeing what is coming. This si very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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It is an active intuition that brings about the Gift of seeing what is coming. This si very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hello C_lucas,
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments.
~RP.
