Windy
A metaphor in meaning about when you stand back up.7 total reviews
Comment from Marykelly
This is a very short poem but seems to have several meanings. The literal meaning is a description of someone feeling a breeze that changes to heavy wind, but the wind does not knock that person over. I also read an emotional component to this poem where the wind is a metaphor for troubling times that the speaker survives. Am I reading too much into this?
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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This is a very short poem but seems to have several meanings. The literal meaning is a description of someone feeling a breeze that changes to heavy wind, but the wind does not knock that person over. I also read an emotional component to this poem where the wind is a metaphor for troubling times that the speaker survives. Am I reading too much into this?
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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No Mary, that is a good perception--just meant when given those life blows, we get back up. In this case it wasn't a severe one, just a little discouraging ( the one I was referring to). But then I could also move up and be a little more diligent--I guess we don't like it when some one comes at our weaknesses (still referring to what prompted my poem). Thank you, Mary for this nice review:)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your acrostic. The artwork is perfect for your well written words.
Good job on the format, too.
Thank you for sharing a thought-provoking poem.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed your acrostic. The artwork is perfect for your well written words.
Good job on the format, too.
Thank you for sharing a thought-provoking poem.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I really appreciate this delightful review. Have a happy day:)
Comment from rama devi
Good metaphorical depth and a closing line with impact. Fine simple style that adds potency to the message.
Nice opening line:
Wind on my face
In tune with my own happiness--
Good developmental twist:
Now it changes directions;
Good crescendo to climax:
Destructive forces swirl,
Pitch perfect AHA:
Yet I keep standing.
I think you punctuation choices serve the poem well.
Bravo,
rd
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Good metaphorical depth and a closing line with impact. Fine simple style that adds potency to the message.
Nice opening line:
Wind on my face
In tune with my own happiness--
Good developmental twist:
Now it changes directions;
Good crescendo to climax:
Destructive forces swirl,
Pitch perfect AHA:
Yet I keep standing.
I think you punctuation choices serve the poem well.
Bravo,
rd
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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You've added joy to my day, rama. I was unsure about the punctuation. I'm glad you think it is ok, very helpful:) LOL! Also I really appreciate the breakdown of the other lines, helps me know my writing better:)
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Yay! Joy! Glad to hear it. Thanks for your gracious response. Warmly, rd
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PS
Thanks a ton for your considerate gesture! Much appreciate! :-)))
Comment from Gert sherwood
Yes donnadiann I understand your metaphorical poem about the wind
One finds happiness even when the powerful winds knock them in a backward direction
they desire not to go and have the strength to go on toward.
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Yes donnadiann I understand your metaphorical poem about the wind
One finds happiness even when the powerful winds knock them in a backward direction
they desire not to go and have the strength to go on toward.
Gert
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much, Gert. I like this review and glad you caught the meaning so easily:). Blessings.
Comment from Dr. Nad
Windy is a very nice Acrostic Poetry Contest contest entry. Your work reminds us that forces of nature at times appear to work with us and for us. And other times, these forces appear to work contrary to our ambitions. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Windy is a very nice Acrostic Poetry Contest contest entry. Your work reminds us that forces of nature at times appear to work with us and for us. And other times, these forces appear to work contrary to our ambitions. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Brilliant review and thank you so very much:)
You are very welcome,
Embrace the Love from above!
You are very welcome,
Embrace the Love from above!
Comment from djeckert
Good job and GOOD metaphor. C.S. Lewis wrote alot about the wind often in the same manner as your metaphor. very nice and I didnt notice the acrostic until your notes . cool God Blesses
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Good job and GOOD metaphor. C.S. Lewis wrote alot about the wind often in the same manner as your metaphor. very nice and I didnt notice the acrostic until your notes . cool God Blesses
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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I did not know that about C.S. Lewis--I will have to read more of his poetry. Thank you for a great review and encouragement:)
Comment from RodG
I like how you have used wind as a metaphor to symbolize one's resilience and fortitude.
Nice contrast with before and after.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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I like how you have used wind as a metaphor to symbolize one's resilience and fortitude.
Nice contrast with before and after.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Thank you for such an insightful review:). Glad you noticed the contrast of the before and after:)
