Once Upon A Fairy Tale
Acrostic47 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Steve
I love this. I'm not usually a fan of the acrostic, they can be quite stilted. Yours flows
in excellent meter and rhyme. Your touches of alliteration, assonance and consonance and the tiniest tweak of enjambment really provide strong cadence and emphasises the fantasy of this delightful poem. Who said acrostics can be boring? Who wouldn't enjoy a steady stream of fairies, elves, pixies and sprites all under brilliant moonlight.
"At a word from their master, the unicorns leap: -- the enjambment here is the leap to a faster pace and further fantasy with Dragon's sparkles of treasure until the final couplet which brings the reader back to earth and reality. Oh ... I so wanted it to all be real. :))
A great entry for the contest, I think you have the winner here ... WOW! I really enjoyed, you poetry master you! lol Hugs - Lovi xoxox
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi Steve
I love this. I'm not usually a fan of the acrostic, they can be quite stilted. Yours flows
in excellent meter and rhyme. Your touches of alliteration, assonance and consonance and the tiniest tweak of enjambment really provide strong cadence and emphasises the fantasy of this delightful poem. Who said acrostics can be boring? Who wouldn't enjoy a steady stream of fairies, elves, pixies and sprites all under brilliant moonlight.
"At a word from their master, the unicorns leap: -- the enjambment here is the leap to a faster pace and further fantasy with Dragon's sparkles of treasure until the final couplet which brings the reader back to earth and reality. Oh ... I so wanted it to all be real. :))
A great entry for the contest, I think you have the winner here ... WOW! I really enjoyed, you poetry master you! lol Hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Lovi.
This has brought all the soppy romantics out. You wouldn't want to know the piece that I originally started on for this contest!
Steve
Comment from William Ross
Excellent acrostic on once upon a fairy tale, great meter with a good rhythm and rhyme pattern. good luck on this piece. great job and write have a good day
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Excellent acrostic on once upon a fairy tale, great meter with a good rhythm and rhyme pattern. good luck on this piece. great job and write have a good day
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thanks, William - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from DR DIP
Great effort Steve love the fact its a rhyming acrostic not just a series of one line statements
Just one silly thing
The great image shows horses yet you mention unicorns is it to do with that stupid bloody syllabic count that everyone gets hung up about? is that why you used unicorns?
Am I just being pedantic? lol
thanks for posting
dip
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Great effort Steve love the fact its a rhyming acrostic not just a series of one line statements
Just one silly thing
The great image shows horses yet you mention unicorns is it to do with that stupid bloody syllabic count that everyone gets hung up about? is that why you used unicorns?
Am I just being pedantic? lol
thanks for posting
dip
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Dip. better get your magnifying glass out - those horses have horns! I know that for a fact because I imported them into Paint and added the horns myself - they're just a little hard to see...
yes, I like to make an acrostic feel like a real poem rather than a shopping lost.
Steve
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yeah i best get them out alright be stuffed if i can see them unicorns horn is quite long and predominate best get on paint again haha
I'll give you some poetic licence ok? lol
dipster
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Steve,
Wow! This one is going to be hard to beat. The liberal use of the anapaestic metre with the couplet rhymes is just the ticket for a story type poem and your usual flair for the exotic doesn't do any harm.
Reg
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Dear Steve,
Wow! This one is going to be hard to beat. The liberal use of the anapaestic metre with the couplet rhymes is just the ticket for a story type poem and your usual flair for the exotic doesn't do any harm.
Reg
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Reg. It will probably do better than the one I originally planned Death By A Thousand Cuts, which began
Darkness awaits us all. The sodden earth
Engulfs our empty husks.... and then got gloomier from there.
Steve
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Steve,
This is a wonderful Fairy Tale acrostic. Your lines flow so smooth that the acrostic element isn't even evident. (That's a great quality!) Excellent work! I'm going to bet that this one will be a real contender! Thanks for sharing!
Good luck in the contest!
Kim
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi Steve,
This is a wonderful Fairy Tale acrostic. Your lines flow so smooth that the acrostic element isn't even evident. (That's a great quality!) Excellent work! I'm going to bet that this one will be a real contender! Thanks for sharing!
Good luck in the contest!
Kim
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Kim. That's my goal in any acrostic - to make it so the reader doesn't even notice the acrostic element.
Steve
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Steve,
this is so magical, I love the imagery and the words are so elegant.
I felt like I was ten years old again and reading one of my fairy-tale books, feeling as if I were there with them.
A little girls piece of heaven, just great.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi Steve,
this is so magical, I love the imagery and the words are so elegant.
I felt like I was ten years old again and reading one of my fairy-tale books, feeling as if I were there with them.
A little girls piece of heaven, just great.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Glad I can still get into a little girl's mind!
Thanks for the kind words and the six shiny stars.
Steve
Comment from lightink
Wow! "It's all in your head!" I love the ambiguity of this! Both the magic and the darkness... it can be a good or a bad thing!
You created such an incredible whimsical world with lovely anapestic rhythm!
Very accomplished writing, my friend!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Wow! "It's all in your head!" I love the ambiguity of this! Both the magic and the darkness... it can be a good or a bad thing!
You created such an incredible whimsical world with lovely anapestic rhythm!
Very accomplished writing, my friend!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Jyoti.
It will probably do better than the one I originally planned Death By A Thousand Cuts, which began
Darkness awaits us all. The sodden earth
Engulfs our empty husks.... and then got gloomier from there.
Steve
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Excellent acrostic and the rhyming is spot on which makes it even better.
Loved the story in the poem also and it was so easy to read and understand.
Loved the descriptions and the phrases you used
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Excellent acrostic and the rhyming is spot on which makes it even better.
Loved the story in the poem also and it was so easy to read and understand.
Loved the descriptions and the phrases you used
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Barb. I am so glad you enjoyed this.
Steve
Comment from jlsavell
kiwisteveh, now this is fascinating. Not only an acrostic but a perfectly rhythmed rhyming story unforced. Brilliant. Best wishes with the contest. Jlsavell
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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kiwisteveh, now this is fascinating. Not only an acrostic but a perfectly rhythmed rhyming story unforced. Brilliant. Best wishes with the contest. Jlsavell
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Janet.
I like to think my acrostics can stand on their own merits without being really noticeable as acrostics at all. Your comment confirms that I achieved that on this occasion.
Steve
Comment from I am Cat
Not that I expected to win with my piddly entry... but damn Steve! lol
The committee should be happy I'm not on this committee, seems as if I'd be choosing most of your work to beat out everyone! LOL
I'm just glad I don't pay to get in these contests!
This is seamless.. .I forgot I was reading an acrostic (which I typically can't stand, by the way, because they are so... stilted)
This is wonderful! I will be shocked if it doesn't at least place in this contest. Well done!
Cat
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Not that I expected to win with my piddly entry... but damn Steve! lol
The committee should be happy I'm not on this committee, seems as if I'd be choosing most of your work to beat out everyone! LOL
I'm just glad I don't pay to get in these contests!
This is seamless.. .I forgot I was reading an acrostic (which I typically can't stand, by the way, because they are so... stilted)
This is wonderful! I will be shocked if it doesn't at least place in this contest. Well done!
Cat
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Cat.
I don't like 'shopping list' acrostics either, so typically, I try to let the reader forget about this pesky initial letters.
I appreciate the very kind words and the six stars, as well as the help with boosting it.
I wouldn't lose hope on yours - the committee has a strangely wayward mind of its own - almost enough for me to think someone on there doesn't like me!
Steve
