Sunday Morning Fishing
The joys and sorrows of fishing.51 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Hey Ric, so wonderful to see a posting from you. Sorry I missed this one but I see it was in a blind contest so I won't feel too terribly bad about it.
This is a beautiful piece of writing and about my favourite thing--beer! Wait?! It's not about beer? Ha, excellent fishing tale and in exactly 200 words.
Very nicely done!
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hey Ric, so wonderful to see a posting from you. Sorry I missed this one but I see it was in a blind contest so I won't feel too terribly bad about it.
This is a beautiful piece of writing and about my favourite thing--beer! Wait?! It's not about beer? Ha, excellent fishing tale and in exactly 200 words.
Very nicely done!
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Gloria, my sweet friend, for reading my 200 word story. I stumbled across this contest with 19 minutes before its closing. I had to write it, find a picture, enter and get it posted with a minute to spare. I didn't even get a chance to read over it. I figured it would be swimming in spag. That sounds nasty! So, on a roll, I noticed a 50 word contest and thought what the heck. I guess a second and a third place finish isn't bad behind the likes of Dean and Mikey, and there were a few more heavily talented writers in the mix, too. I can never thank you enough for all your kind reviews, stars, and most of all your friendship and encouragement. ((HUG)) :-)
Comment from Marykelly
You have included much information in just 200 words. Your description of the perfect equipment, the perfect morning, the perfect setting is perfect enough to take the reader to the lake with you. Your conversational tone is an easy read and I love the ending.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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You have included much information in just 200 words. Your description of the perfect equipment, the perfect morning, the perfect setting is perfect enough to take the reader to the lake with you. Your conversational tone is an easy read and I love the ending.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Marykelly, for taking time to read my 200 words story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I'm glad you liked it. :-)
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
I see that I am not the only one to have this happen. My rod and reel was about ten years old. I was fishing for catfish and pan fish when my pole stated bending, I set the hook, but whatever it was must have been a monster. Everything gone in a flash and ended up with two broken fingers.
This is an excellent contest entry and I wish you good luck. Thanks for the memory of my Sunday. I rather be there then in any church.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I see that I am not the only one to have this happen. My rod and reel was about ten years old. I was fishing for catfish and pan fish when my pole stated bending, I set the hook, but whatever it was must have been a monster. Everything gone in a flash and ended up with two broken fingers.
This is an excellent contest entry and I wish you good luck. Thanks for the memory of my Sunday. I rather be there then in any church.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Jim, my friend, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Raycech
Good little story Ric. Think anyone that's done any fishing at all could identify.
But I'd like to know if you at least caught the frog and had some sautéed frog legs to ease the pain.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Good little story Ric. Think anyone that's done any fishing at all could identify.
But I'd like to know if you at least caught the frog and had some sautéed frog legs to ease the pain.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. Please don't hesitate to let me know what you think I could do to make it better. :-)
Comment from RodG
An ever-had-one-of-those-days stories. You set us up beautifully as we watch the fisherman respond to a perfect day on the lake and get his rig(s) ready and himself settled. You do all this in slow-motion it seems. Good description throughout. Even though I don't fish, I wept for you, my friend. Rod
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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An ever-had-one-of-those-days stories. You set us up beautifully as we watch the fisherman respond to a perfect day on the lake and get his rig(s) ready and himself settled. You do all this in slow-motion it seems. Good description throughout. Even though I don't fish, I wept for you, my friend. Rod
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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As Elvis Presley sang way back into the fifties, "Have you ever had one of those days, Boy." Thank you so much, RodG, for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from mfowler
This story of the bitter sweet art of fishing is lovingly relayed in this fine flash fish fiction. I laughed (a little) at your sad ending, but only because the reader was supposed to. What I enjoyed best about this was the sound of the language you employed. Using 'tech-whiz' jargon of the fisherman from your end of the world (some quite new to me, a southern hemisphere fisherman) and some really energetic sentences, I found the language zinged along with its own special rhythm eg I pop a top to wet my whistle as I sit down in my comfy-butt extra-padded fold-up chair...loved that phrasing. Unfortunately, your final paragraph has gone off the rails, but you have time to fix it, I hope. The energy you imbued in the majority of the story comes via the immediacy of present tense. But, your last paragraph suddenly switches to past tense and really throws the reading. I haven't graded lower because this is an easy fix, and the story is excellent. best of luck.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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This story of the bitter sweet art of fishing is lovingly relayed in this fine flash fish fiction. I laughed (a little) at your sad ending, but only because the reader was supposed to. What I enjoyed best about this was the sound of the language you employed. Using 'tech-whiz' jargon of the fisherman from your end of the world (some quite new to me, a southern hemisphere fisherman) and some really energetic sentences, I found the language zinged along with its own special rhythm eg I pop a top to wet my whistle as I sit down in my comfy-butt extra-padded fold-up chair...loved that phrasing. Unfortunately, your final paragraph has gone off the rails, but you have time to fix it, I hope. The energy you imbued in the majority of the story comes via the immediacy of present tense. But, your last paragraph suddenly switches to past tense and really throws the reading. I haven't graded lower because this is an easy fix, and the story is excellent. best of luck.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for taking time to read my 200 word story, and spending the time to help and encourage me to make it better. There was 19 minutes before closing when I noticed this contest and decided to enter. So, I wrote it, found a picture, entered and posted with less than a minute to spare; therefore, I didn't even read through it the first time. Of course, that had nothing to do with the mess up in tenses, I do that constantly, it seems. Your suggestions, kind words, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from LisaD123
A clever take on the prompt. The description is excellent and sustains the interest of the reader. The tension is slowly built up and the reader is not expecting the ending. Good luck with the contest and thanks for sharing such a talented piece.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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A clever take on the prompt. The description is excellent and sustains the interest of the reader. The tension is slowly built up and the reader is not expecting the ending. Good luck with the contest and thanks for sharing such a talented piece.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. It's so nice to receive a review that not only gives remarks, but offers encouragement to help build the writer's confidence. What this site is intended to do. Thanks again. :-)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hello, Anonymous Author. Looks like we got us a fishin' tail...e-r-r-r, heh-heh... I mean, tale, on our hands here, huh? Okay...
...here goes...
Sunday morning, the sun's rays spray through the trees like laser beams. A soft breeze blows across the lake's crystal-clear water as a deep croak bellows from, undoubtedly, a Mack-daddy frog. ..........Great opening here, very vivid and descriptive. It was easy to set the scene in my imagination based on your descriptive narrative...
No sooner had I sat, than my big pole doubled-over and the drag roared as the line zinged and danced when I yanked the rod to set the hook. The faster I reeled, and harder I pulled, the more line the monster-sized fish peeled off. Then, I slipped on the bank's muddy edge and watched my rod and reel skim away down the lake............Again, very good writing. You made me almost want to dive in and help the poor guy retrieve his rod 'n' reel, LOL.
This was a fish tale, no doubt about it. But this is a tale about one that got away.
Well done.
Best of luck to you in the contest. ~Dean :}
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hello, Anonymous Author. Looks like we got us a fishin' tail...e-r-r-r, heh-heh... I mean, tale, on our hands here, huh? Okay...
...here goes...
Sunday morning, the sun's rays spray through the trees like laser beams. A soft breeze blows across the lake's crystal-clear water as a deep croak bellows from, undoubtedly, a Mack-daddy frog. ..........Great opening here, very vivid and descriptive. It was easy to set the scene in my imagination based on your descriptive narrative...
No sooner had I sat, than my big pole doubled-over and the drag roared as the line zinged and danced when I yanked the rod to set the hook. The faster I reeled, and harder I pulled, the more line the monster-sized fish peeled off. Then, I slipped on the bank's muddy edge and watched my rod and reel skim away down the lake............Again, very good writing. You made me almost want to dive in and help the poor guy retrieve his rod 'n' reel, LOL.
This was a fish tale, no doubt about it. But this is a tale about one that got away.
Well done.
Best of luck to you in the contest. ~Dean :}
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Dean, for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
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My pleasure.
Comment from franichm
This is a very good story with a very sad ending for a fisherman. Very descriptive and I loved the scenario you painted in the beginning. I also loved your comment about 'you should have gone to church'. That line would have been great at the end of the story, if you could have fit it in. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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This is a very good story with a very sad ending for a fisherman. Very descriptive and I loved the scenario you painted in the beginning. I also loved your comment about 'you should have gone to church'. That line would have been great at the end of the story, if you could have fit it in. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Spiritual Echo
This is a beautiful piece of writing. Anyone who has spent time on the water with a rod in hand would be reeled in by the recognition and memory of her/his own fishing experience. Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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This is a beautiful piece of writing. Anyone who has spent time on the water with a rod in hand would be reeled in by the recognition and memory of her/his own fishing experience. Great job.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Spiritual Echo, for taking time to read my 200 word story. I can't thank you enough for the kind, encouraging words along with the generous review. :-)
