Sunday Morning Fishing
The joys and sorrows of fishing.51 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Noland
Truly excellent description in this short piece. You appeal to every sense as you build up this Sunday morning experience, only to have its idyllic nature shattered with the mishap at the end. That is a great last line.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Truly excellent description in this short piece. You appeal to every sense as you build up this Sunday morning experience, only to have its idyllic nature shattered with the mishap at the end. That is a great last line.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Debbie, for finding time to read my 200 word story. It makes my day whenever someone notices the little things we add to a story hoping to pull a few extra strings, play with emotions, the good, the bad, and a glimpse into a character's convictions. This fellow thought he could slip off on a Sunday morning for a little fishing and no one would know. But, someone, maybe, did. Your kind words, comments, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from c_lucas
In the morning you praise the Lord for His Blessings. At sunset, you praise him for his bounty. At evening time, you wait for a strike. At midnight you pack it all in. The jar of Shine is empty and the bait is all gone, This is very well written.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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In the morning you praise the Lord for His Blessings. At sunset, you praise him for his bounty. At evening time, you wait for a strike. At midnight you pack it all in. The jar of Shine is empty and the bait is all gone, This is very well written.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Charlie, for reading my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. Yes, sir, sounds like you might have done a little fishing your self. LOL! :-)
Comment from chcbeck
I liked the descriptive build up and the ending superb was not expecting that. A great 200 word contest entry and I wish you look it's a great read.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I liked the descriptive build up and the ending superb was not expecting that. A great 200 word contest entry and I wish you look it's a great read.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for taking time to read my 200 word story. This one wasn't as hard as the 50 word story, but I wanted to add a few more elements giving the good and the bad parts of fishing, along with a little dose of conviction. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Helen Bach
A well written story with great descriptions. You set the scene so well that I feel the feelings you must have had when you're sat in the mud waving bye bye to your pole. Excellent micro flash story. Did you retrieve your pole ? X
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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A well written story with great descriptions. You set the scene so well that I feel the feelings you must have had when you're sat in the mud waving bye bye to your pole. Excellent micro flash story. Did you retrieve your pole ? X
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Helen Bach, for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I seldom tell the truth of whether a story is true or made up, and I think I might have told a few that this one is true. But, it isn't. I made it all up, trying to give the reader some good with some bad, then showing him under conviction at the end. :-)
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Haha, excellent stuff, it read as factual which is a sign of a great writer, even more fun x
Comment from L.lora
You catch your reader at the
beginning, much like your line
got caught, then off and down
the page we go. Your descriptions
are good, the story pace marches
right along. You put a smile on
the reader's face and in conclusion
I think there are many fishers who
could relate. I enjoyed this word
video greatly. Still laughing, no
nits. Lora
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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You catch your reader at the
beginning, much like your line
got caught, then off and down
the page we go. Your descriptions
are good, the story pace marches
right along. You put a smile on
the reader's face and in conclusion
I think there are many fishers who
could relate. I enjoyed this word
video greatly. Still laughing, no
nits. Lora
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Lora, for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I'm glad you liked it. :-)
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Yep, I could see that happening to my late hubby, and naturally I would have been laughing my butt off..It was a pleasure to review. Lora
Comment from Eric1
Hi Ric, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, had to laugh at you falling down that muddy bank though lol! I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Ric, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, had to laugh at you falling down that muddy bank though lol! I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Eric, for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
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You are welcome my friend.
Comment from Ben Colder
LOL . Yep, happens every time. Love the realness in this story. So typical. I have done the same thing or nearly the same. Love Crappie fishing, best eating in my opinion. Well done. I never know when you are posting for some reason so I missed your work. Hummmm.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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LOL . Yep, happens every time. Love the realness in this story. So typical. I have done the same thing or nearly the same. Love Crappie fishing, best eating in my opinion. Well done. I never know when you are posting for some reason so I missed your work. Hummmm.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Ben Colder, for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. For eating, I'm a crappie fan, too. But these days, just sitting by the water listening and relaxing is better than anyone. I appreciate You. :-)
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Hilarious. Favorite line...I should have gone to church! The imagery preceding this line is imaginative, detailed, yet leaves enough creativity to the reader to conjer up the scene of their own fishing experiences. Great read!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hilarious. Favorite line...I should have gone to church! The imagery preceding this line is imaginative, detailed, yet leaves enough creativity to the reader to conjer up the scene of their own fishing experiences. Great read!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Mary Wakeford, this is my favorite review yet, as you described exactly what I was trying to do, hoping to revive an old memory of the reader's own fishing experience. Thanks so much for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from sage17611
Nice, I like your story, it sounds so relaxing and exiting at the same time. I like your description and visualization of the frog legs frying in the pan, I found myself in the moment with you. Your story was interesting, and thought provoking. I actually felt your excitement and frustration as your fishing rod went skimming off down the lake. I enjoyed reading your story, good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Nice, I like your story, it sounds so relaxing and exiting at the same time. I like your description and visualization of the frog legs frying in the pan, I found myself in the moment with you. Your story was interesting, and thought provoking. I actually felt your excitement and frustration as your fishing rod went skimming off down the lake. I enjoyed reading your story, good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Wow, I couldn't have said what I was hoping to do with this story any better than you, if I had said it myself. Thank you so much, Sage, for taking time to read my 200 word story and your wonderful review. Your kind words and, generous, encouraging review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Kazzawin
This was a great entry to the contest....and the one I voted for!
Sadly it wasn't meant to be, but as someone who spent most of her life on a small island fishing has a place in my heart.
The reason this got to me is because it's real! Nothing dramatic or pretentious...just fishing!
Lovely read. Thank you : )
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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This was a great entry to the contest....and the one I voted for!
Sadly it wasn't meant to be, but as someone who spent most of her life on a small island fishing has a place in my heart.
The reason this got to me is because it's real! Nothing dramatic or pretentious...just fishing!
Lovely read. Thank you : )
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Kazzawin, for taking time to read my 200 word story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. There is nothing you could have said that would have made me happier than my story is just fishing. That was my main intention, to show the perfect Sunday morning for being on the water, fishing, and giving the readers a taste of the highs and lows. Thanks also for your vote, as their are so many who read the entries, but never vote. I'm so glad you liked it. :-)
