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Comment from Joan E.
Your artwork selection and font color reinforce the theme well. I understand the sentiment and admired your added rhymes to intensify the emotion. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Your artwork selection and font color reinforce the theme well. I understand the sentiment and admired your added rhymes to intensify the emotion. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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thank you, I truly have no time for jealousy in my life, but I do remember being young and devastated back then. .
Comment from VaV-VOOM
Nice poem, and I am glad I take the time to vote on these contests. They are all so fun to read. Thank you so much for sharing, and good luck. Write On! VaV-VOOM
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Nice poem, and I am glad I take the time to vote on these contests. They are all so fun to read. Thank you so much for sharing, and good luck. Write On! VaV-VOOM
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Thank you, I too try to vote in as many contests as I can. it helps me in two ways. one I get to see all styles, Two , it encourages me to go on. The only problem is that it doesn't get me the member dollars we all need to promote our own work. This could be something that maybe fan story could change. I don't know how because it would be like buying votes, but not really if you read all of them and then picked your favorite. Just an idea.
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Your so welcome, and I think that would be a great idea. I guess I get some member dollar, cause I do rate and review them all, then I vote so I do get some. Cool, thanks. Write On! VaV-VOOM!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Breaking up is hard to do, and when jealousy, that Green-Eyed Monster, rears its ugly head that makes all the pretending you don't care all the harder to bear.
Should be a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Breaking up is hard to do, and when jealousy, that Green-Eyed Monster, rears its ugly head that makes all the pretending you don't care all the harder to bear.
Should be a good contest entry.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Yes, I wrote this because I remember when I was immature to be jealous. I would never want to be with someone who didn't want to be with me now. I have someone who loves me just as I am now for the last twenty years. I truly now have no time for jealousy.
Comment from Cindy Warren
I've done that myself. I don't know why. It's not like I think pretending not to care fools anyone. I guess it's just hard to admit that it hurts to be dumped for someone else.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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I've done that myself. I don't know why. It's not like I think pretending not to care fools anyone. I guess it's just hard to admit that it hurts to be dumped for someone else.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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That was so many years ago, but I still remember the desperation. Now I wouldn't want to be with anyone who didn't want to be with me.
Comment from William Ross
very good nice write on jealously, It's a waste of time and emotion and causes nothing but trouble in a relationship. great write and good luck on this.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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very good nice write on jealously, It's a waste of time and emotion and causes nothing but trouble in a relationship. great write and good luck on this.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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That was so many years ago, but I still remember the desperation. Now I wouldn't want to be with anyone who didn't want to be with me. I agree with you a waste of time.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a very good entry into the One Word: Jealousy contest. You have presented this piece very well with a perfectly chosen picture to enhance. Your poem relays a story of a broken love that is still in the hurt stage but not for the other party that has already recovered and moved on to someone new. Your green font is effective in its delivery. A good job all round - best of luck in the competition. ~DD
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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This is a very good entry into the One Word: Jealousy contest. You have presented this piece very well with a perfectly chosen picture to enhance. Your poem relays a story of a broken love that is still in the hurt stage but not for the other party that has already recovered and moved on to someone new. Your green font is effective in its delivery. A good job all round - best of luck in the competition. ~DD
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I honestly don't want to go back to being young and believing that everything hinged on someone loving me. I have been loved for almost 20 years now by one man who truly like me just as I am. Real love is so comfortable. Thank you .
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I hear you. Like a comfy pair of old slippers where your soul (play on words) has already left its mark :-) ~DD
Comment from Kooky Clown
What a lovely and very moving if not sad poem which I did enjoy being an emotional person I could picture the scene almost as you passed each other in the street very poignant. Loved it in an emotional way it made feel sad for you but with the hope things get better and you find another. Kooky
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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What a lovely and very moving if not sad poem which I did enjoy being an emotional person I could picture the scene almost as you passed each other in the street very poignant. Loved it in an emotional way it made feel sad for you but with the hope things get better and you find another. Kooky
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. That green monster is real if we will acknowledge it.
