Bud's song ...
petition, acceptance, faith, trust and praise43 total reviews
Comment from damommy
This poem really touched me. I love a dear uncle who was like father to me. He had always had vision problems, and at the last, was going downhill fast. I hold on to the thought in your last two lines - "My Jesus led me safe away.
I'm whole. I'm strong. I'm well." I know he can see know and is healthy and whole.
I'm so sorry the two of you have this to face. But remember, there's no telling what new treatment or drug will be found tomorrow. There's always hope. I'll remember you in my prayers.
Thank you for sharing this. I know I'm supposed to be critiquing, but I find nothing wrong with your poem. It has a powerful message that will help others. Bless you! 8-)
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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This poem really touched me. I love a dear uncle who was like father to me. He had always had vision problems, and at the last, was going downhill fast. I hold on to the thought in your last two lines - "My Jesus led me safe away.
I'm whole. I'm strong. I'm well." I know he can see know and is healthy and whole.
I'm so sorry the two of you have this to face. But remember, there's no telling what new treatment or drug will be found tomorrow. There's always hope. I'll remember you in my prayers.
Thank you for sharing this. I know I'm supposed to be critiquing, but I find nothing wrong with your poem. It has a powerful message that will help others. Bless you! 8-)
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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I apologize for taking so long to thank you for the review and comments - Bud and I have been dealing with VA housing modification inspections. Thank you for your encouragement and your prayers are much appreciated. Actually, Bud and I feel blessed in that ALS, generally, causes no pain (except for occasional muscle cramps). Bud has some pain from arthritis in his hands, but that is minor. We have many friends in the throes of cancer - well, it makes us reflect on things differently. His ALS is also progressing slower than most of the others in our Mayo clinic group. I'll look in on your site soon to see what you are up to.
God bless and my best,
Relda
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Please, there's no need for you to apologize. I realize things come up and we can't be glues on this site all the time. I hope you got your specifications to your liking. Keep in posted on how you two are doing. 8-)
Comment from Lannell912
Truly a blessing to read something so personal. I felt your words a the truth behind them. To put your heart into poetry you must go though something good, bad what ever it may be we can feel it on the other side of the pen KEEP WRITING
MY FRIEND your friend Lannell912
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Truly a blessing to read something so personal. I felt your words a the truth behind them. To put your heart into poetry you must go though something good, bad what ever it may be we can feel it on the other side of the pen KEEP WRITING
MY FRIEND your friend Lannell912
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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I apologize for taking so long to thank you for the review and comments - Bud and I have been dealing with VA housing modification inspections. Thank you for your encouragement and friendship. I'll look in on your site soon to see what you are up to.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Slythytove2
Your poem is well crafted and presented. I don't to typo's and the like, but I couldn't find any of those either. I try to look at each poem as if I'd just come across it in an anthology of contemporary American poetry.Without the explanation at the end could your poems stand alone?
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Your poem is well crafted and presented. I don't to typo's and the like, but I couldn't find any of those either. I try to look at each poem as if I'd just come across it in an anthology of contemporary American poetry.Without the explanation at the end could your poems stand alone?
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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I apologize for taking so long to thank you for the review and comments - Bud and I have been dealing with VA housing modification inspections. Thank you for your critique - I see your point - It does presuppose that the reader is familiar with ALS and that does hamper the 'stand alone' test. Some folks who've read it have known about ALS and others were not familiar with it. At least reading the notes may help to increase awareness of ALS. I'm probably spoiled by FanStory's Authors Notes section!
I'll look in on your site soon to see what you are up to.
God bless and my best,
Relda
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Please do.
Comment from Lisa Deverick
I like how this reads. Your words are well chosen. I'm scared I'm mad I'm overwhelmed- your words make a reader feel his pain. That is a successful write when a writer can do that. well done
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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I like how this reads. Your words are well chosen. I'm scared I'm mad I'm overwhelmed- your words make a reader feel his pain. That is a successful write when a writer can do that. well done
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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Lisa - I apologize for being so long in thanking you for your review and encouragement. Bud and I have had a lot going on with getting a VA inspection for adaptive housing. I look forward to stopping by your site and seeing what you are up to.
God bless and my best,
Relda
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No worries- Thanks Relda. I would love for you to stop by :)
Comment from johnwilson
What a well thought out and beautiful piece this is! I had not heard of this particular disease and the suffering that goes along with it. Bless you and your husband as I don't know whom this is hardest upon. I'm glad that you have the Lord as your savoir. Thank you for sharing this intimate part of your life along with the explanation. I wouldn't change anything.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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What a well thought out and beautiful piece this is! I had not heard of this particular disease and the suffering that goes along with it. Bless you and your husband as I don't know whom this is hardest upon. I'm glad that you have the Lord as your savoir. Thank you for sharing this intimate part of your life along with the explanation. I wouldn't change anything.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Your comments have touched my heart. I've been sharing some of the reviews with Bud - when I tell him about yours I am sure he'll be encouraged and glad that information on ALS is being shared.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from L.lora
A snapshot through poetic
device presents crisp pictures
of what your loved one has to
endure. Your easy flow makes this
poignant and heart-felt rendering
an easy read. You leave much for the
reader to ponder, this will not be
quickly forgotten. Good luck with your
contest. Lora
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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A snapshot through poetic
device presents crisp pictures
of what your loved one has to
endure. Your easy flow makes this
poignant and heart-felt rendering
an easy read. You leave much for the
reader to ponder, this will not be
quickly forgotten. Good luck with your
contest. Lora
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Lora - thank you for your review and insight. I am much encouraged.
God bless and my very best to you,
Relda
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You are most welcome. Lora
Comment from jusylee72
this poem is full of hardship, self loathing and eventually health and faith. It is hard when our bodies betray us, but when we believe in life and God thing turn out so much better. I think you wrote this well.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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this poem is full of hardship, self loathing and eventually health and faith. It is hard when our bodies betray us, but when we believe in life and God thing turn out so much better. I think you wrote this well.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Your encouragement is so appreciated. Thank you so much for your review and insight.
The process of writing about this has helped Bud and me ... and the responses from the FS family have helped us so much.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Your encouragement is so appreciated. Thank you for your review and insights.
The process of writing about this has helped Bud and me ... and the responses from the FS family have helped us so much.
Comment from icywell
Excellent poem. Faith is one of the most difficult things to write about, since it's different for everyone. I particularly like the way your poem conveys the emotions of anger and fear, yet lets the theme of faith win out in the end.
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reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Excellent poem. Faith is one of the most difficult things to write about, since it's different for everyone. I particularly like the way your poem conveys the emotions of anger and fear, yet lets the theme of faith win out in the end.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your review and insight.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from zekeziemann
A wonderful poem and an even greater testimony. This life will not compare to the next, as you know. The last verse says it all. God Bless,
Zeke
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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A wonderful poem and an even greater testimony. This life will not compare to the next, as you know. The last verse says it all. God Bless,
Zeke
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Zeke - when we step through that final door, 'there's gonna be a whole lot of shoutin' going on!'
Your encouragement is so appreciated. Thank you so much for your review and insight.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Dean Kuch
With God, all things are possible, right, Relda?
I was sorry to learn of Bud's ALS.
This is a nice poetic testament to his bravery and your devotion.
Well done...
~Dean
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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With God, all things are possible, right, Relda?
I was sorry to learn of Bud's ALS.
This is a nice poetic testament to his bravery and your devotion.
Well done...
~Dean
Comment Written 01-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Dean -
Thank you so much for the review and kind comments.
Bud and I both appreciate your encouragement.
Relda
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My pleasure.
