New Car
Grandma's gift33 total reviews
Comment from Bill O'Bier
This is a fun entry for this contest. Excellent choice of words. Nice picture and appropriate for the poem. Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you the best,
Bill
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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This is a fun entry for this contest. Excellent choice of words. Nice picture and appropriate for the poem. Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you the best,
Bill
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much and I giggled as I wrote it.
Comment from c_lucas
Averages show that the new driver is more apt to have an accident. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Averages show that the new driver is more apt to have an accident. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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I know, but my prayers will always go with her...Let's hope for the best. Thanks so much.
Comment from Liberty Justice
WHOA! This photo and poem is too funny. It made me smile. Do you know dear poet how good it feels to smile, when I've been crying for days. Thank you! The tone is one of warning and taking heed. liberty justice
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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WHOA! This photo and poem is too funny. It made me smile. Do you know dear poet how good it feels to smile, when I've been crying for days. Thank you! The tone is one of warning and taking heed. liberty justice
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Well, I am happy that in any way my words made you smile. My prayers and thoughts will be with you...hoping for many more smiles to come.
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thanks liberty justice
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
The first car s always the most precious car we own. Your granddaughter must be the luckiest person to have a grandmother like you.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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The first car s always the most precious car we own. Your granddaughter must be the luckiest person to have a grandmother like you.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Well...I'm not sure how lucky they are...but I sure am. I wish my Husband could have seen them grow up! Blessings.
Comment from foxangie123
This ISO funny and a fabulously magnificent use of syllables. This will be so hard to beat I this contest. Wow. This is brilliant and so true. Bravo.....
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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This ISO funny and a fabulously magnificent use of syllables. This will be so hard to beat I this contest. Wow. This is brilliant and so true. Bravo.....
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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What a nice thing to say...but I really sign up to share and read other's work. I never usually win, but you know, I don't mind. One of my friends usually does!! LOL P.S. I do a GIGUNDA WHOOPIE when I do win....just saying'
Comment from GeraldS
This is a fun piece that gives the reader pause for thought. When my sons were learning to drive, I felt the same way. And when their friends also started to drive, I was petrified by the thought of them on the road.
Nice poem... nicely illustrated. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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This is a fun piece that gives the reader pause for thought. When my sons were learning to drive, I felt the same way. And when their friends also started to drive, I was petrified by the thought of them on the road.
Nice poem... nicely illustrated. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Oh what a nice surprise!! You made my day(week), and I enjoyed your comments, too! Think it would be too obvious to wear a star to church, tomorrow? LOL
Comment from William Ross
Yeah very good on the 34 syllables, My son turns 16 this summer that means here permit time, looking forward. good luck on this and have a great day.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Yeah very good on the 34 syllables, My son turns 16 this summer that means here permit time, looking forward. good luck on this and have a great day.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you, William...and good wishes to your son!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image.
-You have a good topic to write about, but you do not have it in poem form.
-I would work on taking the experience and breaking it up in phrases.
-Example:
My granddaughter Emma
Got a new car today
-Just make sure when you are done, your syllables add up to 34.
-I like the author notes!
-I will check back and based on that, re-write the review.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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-Nice image.
-You have a good topic to write about, but you do not have it in poem form.
-I would work on taking the experience and breaking it up in phrases.
-Example:
My granddaughter Emma
Got a new car today
-Just make sure when you are done, your syllables add up to 34.
-I like the author notes!
-I will check back and based on that, re-write the review.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for your kind comments. The form was 8-9-8-9 for 34 syllables. Blessings.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent entry for the contest
Exact syllables at 34
Written like free verse with a single rhyme
This is supposed to be a poem, but you've listed it as fiction
You can leave it this way, but you won't get the exposure a poem gets
Only Tom can change it. I would contact him under the community Tab
to move it to poetry
Emma looks quite happy, as she should be with that great car
The driving lessons may not be quite as easy
Good use of humor in your poem
And a great picture to match
Well done
Excellent entry, excellent poem, excellent car
Exceptional granddaughter
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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This is an excellent entry for the contest
Exact syllables at 34
Written like free verse with a single rhyme
This is supposed to be a poem, but you've listed it as fiction
You can leave it this way, but you won't get the exposure a poem gets
Only Tom can change it. I would contact him under the community Tab
to move it to poetry
Emma looks quite happy, as she should be with that great car
The driving lessons may not be quite as easy
Good use of humor in your poem
And a great picture to match
Well done
Excellent entry, excellent poem, excellent car
Exceptional granddaughter
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you for telling me. I hadn't entered it that way, but sometimes, they get befuddled...Tom, indeed fixed it. Thanks so very very much. I enjoyed your comments!
Comment from djeckert
nice entry. Prayers to you and your granddaughter. Maybe som extras apparently. anyways good luck in contest. And God Bless and protect.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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nice entry. Prayers to you and your granddaughter. Maybe som extras apparently. anyways good luck in contest. And God Bless and protect.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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What a nice response. Thank you!
