Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

Haha this was a delightful little bit of trouble you dropped yourself into Debs and indeed trouble and those who are in the poo certainly go hand in hand.

These short ones you have been doing lately are sterling and you have comedy gold daily if you are entertaining littlies.
With that said, you also put yourself in the trubbs category lately (I know the feeling)...

I have a good quote on my profile at present and it says:

"Well behaved women rarely make history"...I rest my case.

Anyways, super poem, just one thing though, the last line felt a little forced to my ear on the tail end: with the "and that's true"

I honestly don't know but I
can't help it, and that's true.

I thought maybe something like:

I honestly don't know but I
can't help (the fact it's) true.

Maybe run it by your ear. Just my opinion. Loved it anyway and the first two lines WERE the poem and you could have stopped there hahaha
Great stuff girly

Hugs P
xo

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2016

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I like the artwork you choose for your poem just looking into her face it tell the story
so many people feel the same way and can't understand why?
The reason why they are always in trouble is a easy answer
but when someone tells them why, they curse you out and ,walk way.
Thank you for sharing.
cookie

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2016

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

As long as your troubles are small
it isn't that bad at all -
call it a learning moment...
and practice acts of atonement.

For the very young
(or young at heart)
it's just another rung
on the later to getting smart ;-)

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2016

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Had to laugh because it is so true.
I miss the old days when they were young now that it is past.
I'd love to go through the trouble . My oldest daughter lists on facebook what my grand children are doing and I just smile

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2016

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Debra,
You do a great job writing these short little poems from the POV of youngsters. [maybe it is a hazard of your job--just kidding].

I enjoy reading them, and think they are just what a kid would say or do.

Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2016

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Debra,

I love this! Such an imp! lol I hope you are still having fun with these daily posts. I'm enjoying yours! Great job at keeping up with the NaPoWriMo pace.
We're on the downhill stretch (no more running uphill to get home!)

Kim

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Good one, Debra. Trouble entices some people and follows others. Which is it for you? I guess the kids have a lot to do with it. Your poem is so cute and I love the photo. Fun topic and rhyming. Marilyn

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

Comment from royowen

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My wife is a retired teacher, and suffered at the hands of many mean pubescent youth, though retired she teaches french at a university of the third age, (people over sixty) she enjoys teaching now it's hard to be mean when one doesn't have the energy. Well done, we sympathise, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Hi, Debs.

4th line should read, [its] and not, [it's]

Terrific personification of, 'trouble', and of course it's often either a temptation OR something we fall into - I KNOW! LOL.

Fun read, my friend.

Cheers, Ray xx

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

As old as I am I don't get in trouble often, but, pain seems to be following me wherever I go and I am not quick enough to avoid it. I even have started the falling bit so I have to us a walker. Patricia

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016