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NaPoWriMo 2016 Challenge (30 Poems in April)

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Comment from honeytree
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Very interesting to read
and a lot written
Sport is great as well
Being a writer one can
write about sport as well.
A lot has been written here
I liked reading this.

Honeytreee

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016
    Hi Annie,

    Thank you so much for your dedicated reviewing. I enjoy reading them.

    Kim
Comment from amada
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I don't know much about sports...but I liked the title of this work about sports and writing. You see, my fave TV show was this sport/writer funny man, "All About Raymond." I read your work and I learned about this famous lady and a little about baseball as well.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
    Hi Amada:

    I'm really enjoying exploring a different poet each day this month. I've learned so much already, and we're not quite halfway through. This project has been so much fun already. I like that tv show, too. Thanks for the great comments.

    Kim
Comment from CD Richards
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Very nice work, Kim.

Considering it's largely a comparison of two sports I've never seen live, nor even watched more than a few minutes of on TV, you did a great job of keeping my interest :)

Your imaginary discussion is very believable due to its conversational tone, and the comparison between sport and poetry is rather cool.

Great job,
Craig

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
    Hi Craig!

    You know you have a standing invitation to come to hockey with us! :) We're watching Colton in the playoffs right now... nail biter. 7 minutes left in the game and the score is still 0 to 0. Colton is playing very well though :)

    Thank you for the fabulous comments :) The quotes in blue are her actual words, I think that's why it works. I just had to make my end of the conversation match her tone. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review!

    *Hugs*

    Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Kim,
This reads like a great conversation with someone you always wanted to meet. I like the picture. It is perfect. Your use of the different colored fonts made it easy to distinguish who was talking. I like that, too. Good job on the smooth flow and great use of rhyme.

Your 'interview' was fun to read. I like the historical nod to the time the picture refers too.

Good job and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
    Hi Janny...

    It was more a case of not knowing who you wanted to meet. I didn't know who Marianne Moore was before I started reading yesterday, other than she was a name in my book of poetry. I randomly chose her when I was writing my Abecedarian prologue. Finding that pic of her throwing the first ball in to start the Yankees season in '68 was the icing on the cake :)

    Thanks for all the fantastic comments. She was a great poet. If you get the chance, go to poets.org and read her poem titled, "Poetry." :) She also liked to write about animals. I get the impression she was prim and proper, yet very feisty lol

    Kim
Comment from Sandy P.
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I liked your free verse very much. I can't comment too much on the content since I'm not familiar with the people you are writing about, I nevertheless can comment on your excellent choice of descriptive words and very creative rhyming style. Very well done. An enjoyable read. Sandy

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
    Hi Sandy:

    I appreciate the time you spent to read and comment. Thank you for sharing your thoughts!

    Kim
reply by Sandy P. on 13-Apr-2016
    Kim, you are so welcome!
Comment from Joy Graham
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She sounds amazing :) I keep going back to look at that picture. She threw out the first pitch from the stands? Nowadays they stand on the pitcher's mound. I'm a baseball lover and am in my glory now that baseball season is in full swing :) I write baseball poetry in my own style and have a bunch ished online at baseballbard.com We're lucky to have superman - Kevin Pillar on our team lol!

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
    Hi Joy!

    The picture seems to suggest she threw the ball in from the stands. It was 1968, perhaps they did it different then, or thought she couldn't pitch from the mound? Her whole image is of this prim and proper woman, but it seems she was a huge fan of baseball and actually, of boxing, particularly Muhammad Ali. Another fun fact is that Ford was looking for a high class image for a new car they were releasing... she is credited for working with them on naming the Edsel. A fun woman, indeed!

    Thanks for taking the time to read and leave your thoughts. You must be thrilled that baseball season is here. Hockey playoffs start tonight! I'm rooting for the St. Louis Blues! One of our former UAF players is their rookie Defenseman, and he's an amazing guy! It is fun to follow him on Facebook and watch his games as he's making his way in the NHL.

    Kim
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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A very well written poem. I am learning so much about different poets from your writings. I may have to read Fanstory a bit less and read some of the more famous poets more. You have peaked my interest, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
    Hi Debbie,

    I have been having so much fun with this project. It is amazing the ones I'd maybe heard of in passing but didn't really know, and some I hadn't heard of at all. Marianne Moore is one I didn't know of before this challenge. I have this book, Poet's Corner, that I picked up at the used book store. She had one poem in it, called "Poetry." When I was writing my abecedarian poem at the beginning of the month I picked her out for my "M" line... I'm so happy I did. I spent yesterday reading and researching her, she was an amazing lady.

    Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

    Kim
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Very nicely done and introducing poets my teacher did not tell us about...not that we would have listened at that age.
Nice combination writing and the authors notes are wanted...and needed...to realize the history

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
    Thanks, Barb! Turns out Marianne Moore was a prolific American Poet lol I had no idea until I started reading :)

    Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate your thoughts.

    Kim
Comment from Pantygynt
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This is a truly remarkable piece of writing, weaving your own part and an established poets into a conversation. I am trying to think if we in Britain have a parallel to this lady on the sporting front. The one that springs to mind his more about war than sport but it is so typically British. I thought it might interest you. It was written in 1897 and the war referred to is the Boer war in South Africa. The sport is cricket.

Vitai Lampada by Sir Henry Newbolt (1862-1938)

THERE'S a breathless hush in the Close to-night -
Ten to make and the match to win -
A bumping pitch and a blinding light,
An hour to play and the last man in.
And it's not for the sake of a ribboned coat,
Or the selfish hope of a season's fame,
But his Captain's hand on his shoulder smote
"Play up! play up! and play the game!"

The sand of the desert is sodden red, -
Red with the wreck of a square that broke; -
The Gatling's jammed and the colonel dead,
And the regiment blind with dust and smoke.
The river of death has brimmed his banks,
And England's far, and Honour a name,
But the voice of schoolboy rallies the ranks,
"Play up! play up! and play the game!"

This is the word that year by year
While in her place the School is set
Every one of her sons must hear,
And none that hears it dare forget.
This they all with a joyful mind
Bear through life like a torch in flame,
And falling fling to the host behind -
"Play up! play up! and play the game!"

But a really literary poem involving sport, I cant think of one really except one of mine about formula 1 motor racing. I might dig that out some time. I think you've don'e a wonderful job here. Six stars for originality.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
    Hi Pantygynt!

    I am so honored! Thank you for sharing the poem with me, I'll have to put Newbolt on my list to read more. If you delve into my portfolio you will find hockey poems in various styles. You might know that we're really involved with our college hockey team here, I'm on the Board of Directors for the boosters and help with fundraising and running the table for raffles and merchandise at all of our home games. It is all about the personal connection for me. I enjoy getting to know the players through their time at the University and some of the ones we build a rapport with we follow as they play semi-pro to NHL. As a matter of fact, one of them has been playing in the European league in England, the team is called The Wildcats.

    I'm liable to talk your ear off here lol I love hockey :) And our boys are the best. We do have one in his rookie season in the NHL and it is thrilling to watch him play at the highest level of professional hockey. I believe he'll be representing Canada in International competition after the NHL season is over.

    Thank you again for a most wonderful review and commentary!

    Kim
reply by Pantygynt on 13-Apr-2016
    When you say hockey I imagine you are talking ice hockey. I have never managed to stay upright on a pair of skates long enough and would have used the stick to keep me standing rather than for hitting the puck.

    I was forced to to play hockey with a ball at school and hated every moment. Balls and I do not get on. As an adult I took up golf thinking that a stationary ball might be easier to hit than a moving one -- wrong again. Lol.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
    lol yes, I mean ice hockey :) The Ode to the Blue and Gold and my Governor's Cup poems will tell you all about our love for the game and the players here. It is Alaska, what can I say? Ice hockey it is! lol
reply by Pantygynt on 13-Apr-2016
    I've watched it on TV. It's so fast I can't even follow it properly.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
    It is so much fun in person. And great for yelling to take out your pent up frustrations lol I worked retail for 25 years, I had a lot of frustrations ;)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very interesting poem you have constructed. You seem to do a lot of research on your poem for today. I can only salute you for your efforts to bring the best.

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 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
    Hi Sandra...
    I have been writing hockey poetry for years. To find a poet that was writing baseball poetry back in the 50's, and is famous, that warms my heart lol She was quite the interesting lady and a well respected poet. I had fun reading about her. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

    Kim