The Joy Of Life
where peace resides18 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your mostly rhymed quatrains and conversational style. Thanks for the reminder that material things don't make a "joyful life". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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I admired your mostly rhymed quatrains and conversational style. Thanks for the reminder that material things don't make a "joyful life". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Thanks for reading and commenting on my work.
Jax
Comment from nancyjam
A well rhymed and metered poem with
a great message. Wealth is not always
what will make us happy.
Helping and loving our neighbors brings
us more joy and peace.
nancy
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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A well rhymed and metered poem with
a great message. Wealth is not always
what will make us happy.
Helping and loving our neighbors brings
us more joy and peace.
nancy
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your kind thoughts and comments. Jax
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hm...although I really enjoyed reading this poem, I think it is romanticizing homelessness. Maybe not romanticizing, but minimalizing a bit.
I do understand your message and there should be a happy balance in a material life. All your rhymes are chosen well, they make sense to the piece and none were forced. Good work. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Hm...although I really enjoyed reading this poem, I think it is romanticizing homelessness. Maybe not romanticizing, but minimalizing a bit.
I do understand your message and there should be a happy balance in a material life. All your rhymes are chosen well, they make sense to the piece and none were forced. Good work. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Thanks it provokes in different ways. Thanks for the review Jax
Comment from dmt1967
The trouble is, the wrong people have money and the more you have, the more you want. I like this well-messaged poem. Giving is a good way to go if you have more than you need. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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The trouble is, the wrong people have money and the more you have, the more you want. I like this well-messaged poem. Giving is a good way to go if you have more than you need. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Thanks for the review and comment
Jax
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi jaxpoet. This is a great ppem with a simple but powerful message. A person doesn't need to have material wealth to be rich as long as they have love in their heart. In fact money often causes more misery than its worth . Only nit would be the line 'I got no morgage payments'. may read better with 'I've got no morgage payment' but this is only my point of view and certainly did not detract from enjoying your poem as I did. Cheers Christineð???
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Hi jaxpoet. This is a great ppem with a simple but powerful message. A person doesn't need to have material wealth to be rich as long as they have love in their heart. In fact money often causes more misery than its worth . Only nit would be the line 'I got no morgage payments'. may read better with 'I've got no morgage payment' but this is only my point of view and certainly did not detract from enjoying your poem as I did. Cheers Christineð???
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your kind and thoughtful comments. Jax
Comment from Bill007
I found this a very powerful and meaningful poem. In the world today with so much materialism and greed it's easy to lose sight of the appreciation we should have for the simple things. Well said.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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I found this a very powerful and meaningful poem. In the world today with so much materialism and greed it's easy to lose sight of the appreciation we should have for the simple things. Well said.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your review and comments
Jax
Comment from fastdigits
Beautiful thoughts encapsulated in an
artistic flourish of expressions that
poetically wind their way down the
page until it settles down at the end
with the last two lines, "It's time to
give to those who need" By far,
a feeling greater than gold.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Beautiful thoughts encapsulated in an
artistic flourish of expressions that
poetically wind their way down the
page until it settles down at the end
with the last two lines, "It's time to
give to those who need" By far,
a feeling greater than gold.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Great comments
Thanks Jax
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
The homeless seems to have no worries of bills to pay. They know God looks after them all the time. We that have more should help the needy ones more.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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The homeless seems to have no worries of bills to pay. They know God looks after them all the time. We that have more should help the needy ones more.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Love your take
Thanks Jax
Comment from Pantygynt
Excellent advice from one who has not to all of those who have. There is though one parable - that of the talents. The man who did nothing with his legacy and buried it.
Was he one who said as you do: "The Lord He surly loves me" (by the way, that should be "surely" I think) No he was the one Jesus turned on and said "To him that hath shall be given and to him that hath not it shall be taken away, even that which he hath".
That has always worried me. Perhaps it ought to worry you.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Excellent advice from one who has not to all of those who have. There is though one parable - that of the talents. The man who did nothing with his legacy and buried it.
Was he one who said as you do: "The Lord He surly loves me" (by the way, that should be "surely" I think) No he was the one Jesus turned on and said "To him that hath shall be given and to him that hath not it shall be taken away, even that which he hath".
That has always worried me. Perhaps it ought to worry you.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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So many contradictions. Giving is a central theme. Thanks for a great review. You always give me a muse which I totally enjoy. Thanks so much
Jax
Comment from TAB_that's me
Oh, this is such a touching story poem you wrote from the picture. However this was supposed to be free verse and you have a definite rhyme scheme so it may get disqualified.
Teresa
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Oh, this is such a touching story poem you wrote from the picture. However this was supposed to be free verse and you have a definite rhyme scheme so it may get disqualified.
Teresa
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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I guess I missed the fine print. Thank you so much for setting up this contest. It got me off the dime. I have not written anything for monthes. It was fun. I am sorry I missed the instruction.
