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Comment from write hand blue
Your picture and layout is appropriate for the poem. I find this is a thought-provoking piece. For most women it is difficult to get away from abuse. A well written and heartfelt poem, with a deep sadness. Good luck in the contest... ~Mel~
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Your picture and layout is appropriate for the poem. I find this is a thought-provoking piece. For most women it is difficult to get away from abuse. A well written and heartfelt poem, with a deep sadness. Good luck in the contest... ~Mel~
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Life is good now.
Comment from misscookie
Your artwork captured my attention from the start
Your word truly touched my heart
this is what I call a food for thought poem... meaning after you read it you go mm.
ookie
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Your artwork captured my attention from the start
Your word truly touched my heart
this is what I call a food for thought poem... meaning after you read it you go mm.
ookie
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you , it is revealing but honesty always is.
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You're very welcome. until nextt time.
Cookie
Comment from pattipac
You have penned a poignant poem about what keeps a woman in an abusive marriage; her marriage vow, her hopes that he will change, and her children.
This poem digs deeper than most people want to look. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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You have penned a poignant poem about what keeps a woman in an abusive marriage; her marriage vow, her hopes that he will change, and her children.
This poem digs deeper than most people want to look. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. It was started years ago when I had so much pain. It is now much less painful for me to read. What women don't want to admit is that they are choosing to stay there. That's why it takes so long to leave.
Comment from LIJ Red
two suspected nits:
just desserts, is how I've often seen that expression.
how much she's(she has) sinned?
They tell me abused wives see the good in men who don't truly want to be bad ones, but can't help themselves...you restate this very well.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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two suspected nits:
just desserts, is how I've often seen that expression.
how much she's(she has) sinned?
They tell me abused wives see the good in men who don't truly want to be bad ones, but can't help themselves...you restate this very well.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for the corrections. This makes it so much better for me. Yes. they see the good , but abused women also don't want to admit they were wrong in their choices and this is what takes so long to learn.
Comment from Joan E.
Welcome to FanStory--I hope the site is fulfilling your goals for membership.
Your poem is quite evocative and speaks for so many women. Your rhymes add to its intensity, and your line "Reality and Fantasy/ So easily entwined" says it all.
It is good to hear that you have turned things around in your life. Best wishes for continued strength and good luck in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Welcome to FanStory--I hope the site is fulfilling your goals for membership.
Your poem is quite evocative and speaks for so many women. Your rhymes add to its intensity, and your line "Reality and Fantasy/ So easily entwined" says it all.
It is good to hear that you have turned things around in your life. Best wishes for continued strength and good luck in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Yes, life is wonderful now.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, Judy, now that I see you are entered in the same contest, I added to my author's notes - I don't want any votes out of "sympathy' - yours is a tragic tale too, and beautifully told.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Ah, Judy, now that I see you are entered in the same contest, I added to my author's notes - I don't want any votes out of "sympathy' - yours is a tragic tale too, and beautifully told.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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I agree with you. We all are sharing such true hard moments. Life is not always fair but it is always teaching. You are so sweet.
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Thank you - you too.
Comment from William Ross
Relationships, marriages are not always a bed of roses, but sometimes differences are just to much at times for some. Great free verse and read. on the strife's of marriage.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Relationships, marriages are not always a bed of roses, but sometimes differences are just to much at times for some. Great free verse and read. on the strife's of marriage.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Life is great now.
Comment from tfawcus
Hi Judy. This is such a very powerful poem from the outset, with those two graphic pictures that you have penned, contrasting the ideal with the reality. You go on from there to build up, in a most heartrending way, some of the reasons why women stay in abusive relationships. I doubt that anyone who has not lived through the experience could have touched the reader's heart as you have done. This should be right up there vying for a place in the winners' circle if there is any justice in this world. Six stars without a moments hesitation.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Hi Judy. This is such a very powerful poem from the outset, with those two graphic pictures that you have penned, contrasting the ideal with the reality. You go on from there to build up, in a most heartrending way, some of the reasons why women stay in abusive relationships. I doubt that anyone who has not lived through the experience could have touched the reader's heart as you have done. This should be right up there vying for a place in the winners' circle if there is any justice in this world. Six stars without a moments hesitation.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank yo so much. Your understand is so valuable to me. That was 20 years ago when I walked out, put him in jail and left everything. My home, my friends, my job and started anew. It took a long time but life is wonderful now.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
For the woman it is difficult to break away from her abuser. He tells her all that happen is get fault and she will never make it through life without him.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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For the woman it is difficult to break away from her abuser. He tells her all that happen is get fault and she will never make it through life without him.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from TOMORAL
You have written a page from my own book. I saw myself so clearly it hurt. Oh, by the grace of God, that is all in the past.Best of luck in the contest with this fine entry. It clearly describes a broken heart.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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You have written a page from my own book. I saw myself so clearly it hurt. Oh, by the grace of God, that is all in the past.Best of luck in the contest with this fine entry. It clearly describes a broken heart.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Aren't you glad we are beyond that now? The lessons learned were painful and life changing.
