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Comment from Rubylou
Hi Judy,
I like the progression feeling in this poem although a sad topic. The hopes in the beginning, how things subtly change, criticism, hurt, and finally realization.
this is a wonderful work.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hi Judy,
I like the progression feeling in this poem although a sad topic. The hopes in the beginning, how things subtly change, criticism, hurt, and finally realization.
this is a wonderful work.
Rubylou
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Heartache many have felt. I have a wonderful life now.
Comment from scd41
When relationships go sour, one is torn between her emotional considerations and social demands. But there is no standard formula for resolving such complex matters. The decision to end it must be taken without being influenced by outside forces. You have expressed your feelings in the poem nicely in the smooth flowing simple poem.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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When relationships go sour, one is torn between her emotional considerations and social demands. But there is no standard formula for resolving such complex matters. The decision to end it must be taken without being influenced by outside forces. You have expressed your feelings in the poem nicely in the smooth flowing simple poem.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Thank you , Life is wonderful.
Comment from DR DIP
Really enjoyed this poem Jusy. Some great verses throughout. Life changes happen all the time and the decisions we make at forks in life's road can determine the rest of our lives. Thanks for sharing and entering the prompt
dip
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Really enjoyed this poem Jusy. Some great verses throughout. Life changes happen all the time and the decisions we make at forks in life's road can determine the rest of our lives. Thanks for sharing and entering the prompt
dip
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hey Dip, Not only does life change, rearrange and gain knowledge, it tells us what we need to learn. I like you. You think deeply.
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thankyou Jusy
dip
Comment from Mary Wakeford
This is quite a read, and I did it twice to make sure I was understanding the message and story it contains. Excellent choice in imagery to accompany the body of work. Rhyming qualities and flow to storyline is superb. Good for you, getting on with your life after a broken heart.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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This is quite a read, and I did it twice to make sure I was understanding the message and story it contains. Excellent choice in imagery to accompany the body of work. Rhyming qualities and flow to storyline is superb. Good for you, getting on with your life after a broken heart.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Life has lessons to learn
Comment from Liberty Justice
"Life is not a pretty picture on the mantle where it sits" is a deeply profound
simuli. Poet admonishes someone due to their poor behavior. Hopes they Will change. liberty justice
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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"Life is not a pretty picture on the mantle where it sits" is a deeply profound
simuli. Poet admonishes someone due to their poor behavior. Hopes they Will change. liberty justice
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you , life learns lessons sometimes quickly sometimes slowly
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
For forgiveness comes too easy to the one who can't admit
Life is not a pretty picture on the mantle where it sits.
These lines stand out to me. I just ended a relationship that should have ended a very long time ago. No children involved, but it can be hard to make that final good-bye. A very good and moving write, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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For forgiveness comes too easy to the one who can't admit
Life is not a pretty picture on the mantle where it sits.
These lines stand out to me. I just ended a relationship that should have ended a very long time ago. No children involved, but it can be hard to make that final good-bye. A very good and moving write, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. Those are such important lines when we realize we are the ones who need to change.
Comment from Rookette
This is amazing! I am sorry you had to go through such struggles but these are the struggles that groom us to be strong, independent, capable adults. I'm glad to hear your life is so well...had it not been for the hard times, who knows where you would be now!? Beautiful xoLeslie
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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This is amazing! I am sorry you had to go through such struggles but these are the struggles that groom us to be strong, independent, capable adults. I'm glad to hear your life is so well...had it not been for the hard times, who knows where you would be now!? Beautiful xoLeslie
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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You are so right. I had lessons to learn and while I may have taken the hard road life is wonderful now.
Comment from VaV-VOOM
WOW! I really enjoyed that. The flow was nice and smooth. Thank you for the sharing of your poetry.
Write On! VaV-VOOM!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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WOW! I really enjoyed that. The flow was nice and smooth. Thank you for the sharing of your poetry.
Write On! VaV-VOOM!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you, It was quite a story. Life is great now.
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It was a powerful read, I liked the last line. God bless. VaV-VOOM!
Comment from DonandVicki
I cannot imagine being in a heart breaking relationship. I am blessed, Vicki and I have had a happy relationship for 45 years and both of our daughters have good marriges as well, sure it is not all roses but we all are happy. You certianly wrote this with emotion.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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I cannot imagine being in a heart breaking relationship. I am blessed, Vicki and I have had a happy relationship for 45 years and both of our daughters have good marriges as well, sure it is not all roses but we all are happy. You certianly wrote this with emotion.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you and that was twenty years ago. Life is wonderful now.
Comment from judiverse
Great contrast between the life of order in the first stanza and the chaos in the second. Such heartbreak if things don't turn out as you hope they will. Staying together for the sake of the children is often the refrain. Sometimes women fear for their safety if they dare to leave. If he's an addict, maybe she thinks he'll change. Your poem is very insightful. Shows that people should think things through before getting married. judi
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Great contrast between the life of order in the first stanza and the chaos in the second. Such heartbreak if things don't turn out as you hope they will. Staying together for the sake of the children is often the refrain. Sometimes women fear for their safety if they dare to leave. If he's an addict, maybe she thinks he'll change. Your poem is very insightful. Shows that people should think things through before getting married. judi
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. It takes a long time to get out of but lessons learned are so valuable.
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You're very welcome. You must have had time to think it through. judi
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You're welcome. It's tough when you have to learn the hard way. judi
