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Comment from I am Cat
This is one of the most beautiful spenserian sonnets I've ever read, Tom...
and it really held onto me. I loved it...
also the repeating lines from the Petrarchan to the English sonnet:
The sweetest blossoms souls could ever know,
lovely...
but it was this:
When roses bloom in springtime, we are blessed.
Thou kissed by sun to flash in morning dew,
on hues that painter's pallets once possessed,
by masters on Parisian's famous rue,
bring swirls of pink, or yellow, red or blue.
Once Spring releases messages to blush,
thy resins rise in petals, to shine through,
and grace yon gardens with good Nature's brush.
upon thy flowers brandishing their bush.
Let's not forget that first portent of Spring,
when sap formed buds within its fluent rush,
and promised real delights that springtime brings.
There's no surprise there's happiness to tout -
A Rosebud in the springtime, tiny sprout.
that sealed the deal for me. ;)
beautiful!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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This is one of the most beautiful spenserian sonnets I've ever read, Tom...
and it really held onto me. I loved it...
also the repeating lines from the Petrarchan to the English sonnet:
The sweetest blossoms souls could ever know,
lovely...
but it was this:
When roses bloom in springtime, we are blessed.
Thou kissed by sun to flash in morning dew,
on hues that painter's pallets once possessed,
by masters on Parisian's famous rue,
bring swirls of pink, or yellow, red or blue.
Once Spring releases messages to blush,
thy resins rise in petals, to shine through,
and grace yon gardens with good Nature's brush.
upon thy flowers brandishing their bush.
Let's not forget that first portent of Spring,
when sap formed buds within its fluent rush,
and promised real delights that springtime brings.
There's no surprise there's happiness to tout -
A Rosebud in the springtime, tiny sprout.
that sealed the deal for me. ;)
beautiful!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Thank you most profusely Cat. I am elated that you liked it so well, and saved it to give me a six. That was awesome. Your Tiara idea is a good one too.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
I could not really read, (distinguish) the poem words because the black lettering blended into the dark red background. If you will change the letter color to white or some other color that is more of a contrast I will revise my review.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Hi, Treischel,
I am sorry that I am prevented from giving this Tiara of Sonnets, "Rosebud in Spring Time" the Six Stars it deserves. Each section meets all of the meets all of the meter, and rhyme scheme and structural requirements of its sonnet type. It is 3 linked sonnets, Its figurative language and rhyme are excellent. As always you are the master of the craft of poetry.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi, Treischel,
I could not really read, (distinguish) the poem words because the black lettering blended into the dark red background. If you will change the letter color to white or some other color that is more of a contrast I will revise my review.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Hi, Treischel,
I am sorry that I am prevented from giving this Tiara of Sonnets, "Rosebud in Spring Time" the Six Stars it deserves. Each section meets all of the meets all of the meter, and rhyme scheme and structural requirements of its sonnet type. It is 3 linked sonnets, Its figurative language and rhyme are excellent. As always you are the master of the craft of poetry.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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OK Preston, I changed to a lighter font
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed each sonnet alone and as part of the whole. You did a great job with each one. I like that you gave the reader the name of each. Your theme is well expressed in each one as the style requires. The picture is gorgeous. I like how all three sonnets fit nicely together [that was the plan though]. My favorite is the Shakespearean sonnet. Good job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed each sonnet alone and as part of the whole. You did a great job with each one. I like that you gave the reader the name of each. Your theme is well expressed in each one as the style requires. The picture is gorgeous. I like how all three sonnets fit nicely together [that was the plan though]. My favorite is the Shakespearean sonnet. Good job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you Jannypan. I am please you liked them. The Shakespearean would be the most familiar from at to most people, I think. Certainly they can all be done in one style.
Comment from Just2Write
For me, the Spenserian Sonnet has this Tiara nailed down and hammered shut. Beautiful work on all 3, Tom.
The only suggestion on the Spenserian sonnet, is that in line 1 you are speaking 3rd person, and by line 2 you are speaking 2nd person.
When roses bloom in springtime, we are blessed (3rd)
Dear rose that blooms in springtime, we are blessed (2nd)
thou kissed by (New sentence - Thou kissed)
I LIKE the concept of a Tiara or Coronet, as Jim suggests - The Crowns are nice, but oh, so long. An abbreviated version is long over-due.
One needed use different styles of Sonnets, methinks. Just 3 sonnets in one style should also work. Loved this offering, especially when it is about my namesake. Rose.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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For me, the Spenserian Sonnet has this Tiara nailed down and hammered shut. Beautiful work on all 3, Tom.
The only suggestion on the Spenserian sonnet, is that in line 1 you are speaking 3rd person, and by line 2 you are speaking 2nd person.
When roses bloom in springtime, we are blessed (3rd)
Dear rose that blooms in springtime, we are blessed (2nd)
thou kissed by (New sentence - Thou kissed)
I LIKE the concept of a Tiara or Coronet, as Jim suggests - The Crowns are nice, but oh, so long. An abbreviated version is long over-due.
One needed use different styles of Sonnets, methinks. Just 3 sonnets in one style should also work. Loved this offering, especially when it is about my namesake. Rose.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you Rose. I like the name Tiara the best. I don't think there needs to be three different types of Sonnets, that can be an option though. Thanks for the excellent review,
Comment from chcbeck
We certainly are blessed by the the rose, as we are by your beautiful poem. It is crafted in such a way the reader can visualize each word. A beautiful picture too. Worthy of nothing less than six stars.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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We certainly are blessed by the the rose, as we are by your beautiful poem. It is crafted in such a way the reader can visualize each word. A beautiful picture too. Worthy of nothing less than six stars.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you chcbeck, for a fabulous review,mand all those stars to boot.
Comment from tfawcus
You might almost have been in Ray's class! That was exactly the assignment he set us for one of the weeks. You have the unique flavour of each type of sonnet woven subtly into the whole sequence. A tiara fit for a goddess!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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You might almost have been in Ray's class! That was exactly the assignment he set us for one of the weeks. You have the unique flavour of each type of sonnet woven subtly into the whole sequence. A tiara fit for a goddess!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you Tony. Sounds like Ray is a very good teacher. Glad you liked it. I appreciate the stars too.
Comment from Pantygynt
I think the idea of a tiara including an example of each of these types should become mandatory, or give it a different name lake a coronet which, in the UK is a crown worn by nobility that is not royal
Were it not for your amazing work on the full blooded crowns of heroic sonnets I would be tempted to say that this is your best ever creation.
Not only have you written three linked sonnets in the style of their creators but you have taken us back in time to give us a hint of the language of earlier times. I think you are aware that I am not a fan of those wh sprinkle their 2ist century poetry with "thou", "ye" and suchlike archaic terms, but it is a totally different matter when you give the whole tiara a period flavour.
This is an outstanding tiara and I am happy to award a six.
"there's happiness to taut -" Is this a typo? Did you mean tout, because that is how I read it at first?
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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I think the idea of a tiara including an example of each of these types should become mandatory, or give it a different name lake a coronet which, in the UK is a crown worn by nobility that is not royal
Were it not for your amazing work on the full blooded crowns of heroic sonnets I would be tempted to say that this is your best ever creation.
Not only have you written three linked sonnets in the style of their creators but you have taken us back in time to give us a hint of the language of earlier times. I think you are aware that I am not a fan of those wh sprinkle their 2ist century poetry with "thou", "ye" and suchlike archaic terms, but it is a totally different matter when you give the whole tiara a period flavour.
This is an outstanding tiara and I am happy to award a six.
"there's happiness to taut -" Is this a typo? Did you mean tout, because that is how I read it at first?
Comment Written 11-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes, that's a typo. I like this shorter format. For some things it works quite well. I'm not sure we should require everyone to do the three formats, maybe as an option. The Tiara appeals to me, although a tiara doesn't close in a complete circle, so maybe the Coronet is more appropriate. I appreciate your thoughts here and the six stars as well, as I was very pleased how it turned out.
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Funnily enough, when Cat came up with the name I mentioned the lack of closure and was told that the kiddies' ones did. She also said that a coronet was something totally different in Texas, but I can't remember what. Anyway I don't argue with the cat any more. Lol.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi TRIESCHEL,
this is a very beautiful three part sonnet. A great Cat format that you have succeeded in executing perfectly. A beautiful read about the most known and loved flower ever.
Just Great.
Brenda
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Hi TRIESCHEL,
this is a very beautiful three part sonnet. A great Cat format that you have succeeded in executing perfectly. A beautiful read about the most known and loved flower ever.
Just Great.
Brenda
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Thank you Brenda for this rousing review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
To read about roses and their beauty from budding to full bloom is as good as walking through a beautiful rose garden while the different aromas hang in the air. A perfect picture taken of that rose.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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To read about roses and their beauty from budding to full bloom is as good as walking through a beautiful rose garden while the different aromas hang in the air. A perfect picture taken of that rose.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Thank you Sandra. Your review is wonderful.
