To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "Eternal Virgin"Poems by Michael
13 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
Fantastic art work and words
The singing was great and the background
To be close to someone as we know
is very special in every way within our lives.
Wonderful to read and also listening to the music.
Honey tree
I have no six
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Fantastic art work and words
The singing was great and the background
To be close to someone as we know
is very special in every way within our lives.
Wonderful to read and also listening to the music.
Honey tree
I have no six
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Thank you Honey...-smile-
yes I suppose it is. Appreciate you understanding. Big love Michael
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That's fine
honeytree
Comment from Slythytove2
Wish I've read some of your other work. I like your imagery and toss salad verbiage but I really don't see where your poem was going. I'm old so there's good enough reason right there. But I want to learn and what's that-" cotton mouth swallowed sober"- line. I'm sure I'm supposed to know already but I'm slow. Since I'm the guy who doesn't know what you're saying, you lose no points from me- but if I were your adoring public who you might want to make a point with.,.,.......
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Wish I've read some of your other work. I like your imagery and toss salad verbiage but I really don't see where your poem was going. I'm old so there's good enough reason right there. But I want to learn and what's that-" cotton mouth swallowed sober"- line. I'm sure I'm supposed to know already but I'm slow. Since I'm the guy who doesn't know what you're saying, you lose no points from me- but if I were your adoring public who you might want to make a point with.,.,.......
Comment Written 09-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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well in truth....what I was thinking when I wrote this was ah something I hardly ever see...but when I do its all I want beautiful. A love ...two in one ya know...? that have lived a die together...but when they look at eachother...you can still see the smile...the satisfied contentment. I have a few people who enjoy my expression...I dont write to please others most of the time...but to ease a ah need to create my in the moment of that time. dry mouth is what I meant by cotten. thanks. love Michael
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OK I thought you were talking about a snake. Silly me.
Comment from jusylee72
You are quite visual in your writing. This is slightly over my head and don't understand parts of it but it is descriptive. Thank you.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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You are quite visual in your writing. This is slightly over my head and don't understand parts of it but it is descriptive. Thank you.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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Hey...-smile-
well thanks for stopping by. Appreciate you're taking the time. love Michael
Comment from NicciFaye
first stanza second line...great metaphoric thought...as leaves once green are turned brown..."tortures"...excellent word usage.
Excellent alliteration of "s" with swallows sober show me shed skin.
Second stanza, second and third lines are penetrable. "soul lived in older...squeezed lemon labored for treasure..
The power stanza is the fourth one. It just screams ...genius poetic mind...I so adore...
I've added that song to my Youtube playlist...
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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first stanza second line...great metaphoric thought...as leaves once green are turned brown..."tortures"...excellent word usage.
Excellent alliteration of "s" with swallows sober show me shed skin.
Second stanza, second and third lines are penetrable. "soul lived in older...squeezed lemon labored for treasure..
The power stanza is the fourth one. It just screams ...genius poetic mind...I so adore...
I've added that song to my Youtube playlist...
Comment Written 07-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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yea I was worried it would come across ...snake...the cotton mouth...I could've changed it...but I didn't want to...-shouldershrug-...Thank you Nic....when you say i'm special...I feel it. love you Michael
Comment from Joan E.
I liked your establishing the scene as fall with the personification of October. Your "cotton mouth swallows sober" is a memorable line and worthy of its repeat, along with your alliteration of "s's"--I "swear"! Hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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I liked your establishing the scene as fall with the personification of October. Your "cotton mouth swallows sober" is a memorable line and worthy of its repeat, along with your alliteration of "s's"--I "swear"! Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 07-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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hahaha...well a lil' pizzaz was in order J....I've had heavy on my mind lately and getting where I need to be to be...me...is getting harder suddenly. thank you Dear...love Michael
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You even write prose in rhyme--"me/suddenly"! I hope it gets easier soon to be yourself again. Big hugs- Joan
Comment from DR DIP
A well written poem. really like the accompanying video and the lyrics by Trixie Whitley
I had never heard of this artist before. Thankyou for posting and sharing with us
dip
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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A well written poem. really like the accompanying video and the lyrics by Trixie Whitley
I had never heard of this artist before. Thankyou for posting and sharing with us
dip
Comment Written 07-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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Hey Doc...-smile-
yes...she's phenomenal. I dont understand why a "major" label hasn't signed her. Her sound is all hers...and its significant. you remember it. Her Dad was Chris Whitley, he had a couple hits in the 90's. Anyway, appreciate you man. love Michael
Comment from Lannell912
First I love the artwork and the particular way you set up your page. I immediately went back and pulled up all of your post wanted to know was it just this one that had that flow or was it the way you did your work individually. I love the way you have your own sound it's very unique you will have followers. I have a music background so I know how important it is to have your own way of presenting your art. Well I'm pretty sure I'm not telling you something you don't already know so I won't bore you with conversation love your work stay at it I will be keeping up with you
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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First I love the artwork and the particular way you set up your page. I immediately went back and pulled up all of your post wanted to know was it just this one that had that flow or was it the way you did your work individually. I love the way you have your own sound it's very unique you will have followers. I have a music background so I know how important it is to have your own way of presenting your art. Well I'm pretty sure I'm not telling you something you don't already know so I won't bore you with conversation love your work stay at it I will be keeping up with you
Comment Written 07-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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all of my posts...wow. Well hello...I'm Michael...-smile-
ha yea I got a following alright bad luck and perfect timing...song of my life. I grew up in Michigan but in Aunt Beanie's basement Country came alive...my family would gather their to drink and listen to both Hank senior and Bocephus...I got bored fairly quick and developed my own ah musical sensitivity as well as a speech impairment in twang residue
and inclination for late night cornbread, the simplicity of white cotton and summer breeze memories...-smile- thank you very much for enjoying. love Michael
Comment from royowen
It's true that the time is closer rpthan it's ever been, I wonder just how close however, nicely written my friend, lots of great imagery and fervour, some tragic refrain, there's one thing about this free verse, lots of imaginative vision, well done, Michael, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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It's true that the time is closer rpthan it's ever been, I wonder just how close however, nicely written my friend, lots of great imagery and fervour, some tragic refrain, there's one thing about this free verse, lots of imaginative vision, well done, Michael, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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ha...glad you understood. yea...this is about that "real" love....the kind that lives and dies with you. the kind that sees past all the ah skin...and is still in love with what they found. Its about times constant way of change and how odd...scary maybe, that age even takes what assumed owned.
Its about this woman I met here...very um timid, shy...you just wanted to protect her. She would always write poems about her husband....He died. But you could read the love never was or would ever be. I havent heard from her in long time...but I'm really glad I read her. love michael
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Well done Michael,
Comment from Sis Cat
A modern, abstract poem with a collage of images and impressions. I like the snake theme:
"swear to God cotton mouth swallowed sober
show me shed skin...slower"
Repetition enhances the message. I also like the three line stanza as they give this free verse poem structure. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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A modern, abstract poem with a collage of images and impressions. I like the snake theme:
"swear to God cotton mouth swallowed sober
show me shed skin...slower"
Repetition enhances the message. I also like the three line stanza as they give this free verse poem structure. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2016
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I just caught a snake in my backyard...copperhead two and a half three feet long. its not the first I've caught several...but I would have to be drunk out of my mind to attempt to swallow a cottonmouth. in fact I'd eat fire first...haha...no I was suggesting dry mouth...its apparent you dont smoke pot...ahaha...thanks. love Michael
Comment from Rookette
This was beautiful. It took me a few times of reading it because it was difficult for me to follow. That's a reflection on me, not your work. You are very articulate and I love that your work is so unique. The video was amazing as well. Beautiful song!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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This was beautiful. It took me a few times of reading it because it was difficult for me to follow. That's a reflection on me, not your work. You are very articulate and I love that your work is so unique. The video was amazing as well. Beautiful song!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you...-smile-
yes I've been told I write the way life really is...it just sounds better to me. -wink-...I was hoping to do the song honor...appreciate you enjoying. love Michael
