My Pot is Cracked
... back in the kiln, again38 total reviews
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent ...
It has passion life and breathes a very strong discernment with a good sentiment and appealing thought provoking idea. It is creative has good concept connection and is informative with a personal and endearing charm it is liberated in its phrasing and has endeavoured to be a principle piece a worthy winner.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Excellent ...
It has passion life and breathes a very strong discernment with a good sentiment and appealing thought provoking idea. It is creative has good concept connection and is informative with a personal and endearing charm it is liberated in its phrasing and has endeavoured to be a principle piece a worthy winner.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for reviewing and encouragement.
I appreciate your comments so much.
Relda
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anytime ...
Comment from Violet WolfChild
I found this poem very relatable. I've been feeling a bit broken lately and struggling to see the light. Your words helped to remind me that things can get better. That life has a way of surprising us, and sometimes, when we feel like we're falling apart, we might find ourselves falling together in a new and better way.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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I found this poem very relatable. I've been feeling a bit broken lately and struggling to see the light. Your words helped to remind me that things can get better. That life has a way of surprising us, and sometimes, when we feel like we're falling apart, we might find ourselves falling together in a new and better way.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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I am so glad it helped.
Relda
Comment from Teri7
This is truly beautiful what you have penned about the Potter and the Clay. How neat that today I bought an accompaniment CD titled, "He didn't throw the clay away." Thank you so much for sharing this. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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This is truly beautiful what you have penned about the Potter and the Clay. How neat that today I bought an accompaniment CD titled, "He didn't throw the clay away." Thank you so much for sharing this. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Hi, Teri,
My poem AND a CD! That's got to be a GOD THING!!
How encouraging to me ? thanks for reviewing and telling me!
Relda
Comment from tfawcus
Not only have you used the metaphor of the potter to good effect in tracing a spiritual journey, but you have also shown us the intricate details of the pottery process through all its stages. An interesting poem.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Not only have you used the metaphor of the potter to good effect in tracing a spiritual journey, but you have also shown us the intricate details of the pottery process through all its stages. An interesting poem.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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I admire your writing. I consider your review, High Praise.
You've made my day.
Thanks,
Relda
Comment from BethShelby
You've outlined the whole plan of salvation in this poem in which you use a broken and imperfect vessel but one in which the spirit lives. The master potter is able to take the shattered pot and remake into something beautiful. You correctly allow the cracks to remind us that we are not perfect in this realm . Using the clay to show this comes form scripture as you have included in your notes. A beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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You've outlined the whole plan of salvation in this poem in which you use a broken and imperfect vessel but one in which the spirit lives. The master potter is able to take the shattered pot and remake into something beautiful. You correctly allow the cracks to remind us that we are not perfect in this realm . Using the clay to show this comes form scripture as you have included in your notes. A beautiful poem.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Beth - thank you so much for your comments and encouragement.
Relda
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You are welcome. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Oh dear Relda...This is brilliant!
My eyes were wide open as I read this poem and entry (which I did not
realize was a winning entry poem until after I read your poem.) Congratulations!
I did read your author notes prior to reading your poem. I am a potter
from way back...Okay...I took one course in college...just enough to
know those terms you use in your poem:)
Your poem has a melody to it and I just read it again out loud...with chills.
This is just over the top great. Wow...I hardly know where to begin.
"In kiln so hot all dross burned off
remains a different shape"
Love those lines and all of them, really.
Your speckled rhymes and near rhymes
throughout the poem add to the pleasure
of reading.
I'm astounded by your talent and your
spirituality. Love this poem!
Now...There is one part...that seems
like one part of it sounds better turned...:
"A masterpiece!
He's refined me!
Re 'formed' all of my past"
It's the middle line...I hear this:
'I'm refined
re-formed of all my past"
That's it...that's my 2 cents...
That what you paid me for:)
This is an unbelievably great poem
and I'm your new fan,
Linda
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Oh dear Relda...This is brilliant!
My eyes were wide open as I read this poem and entry (which I did not
realize was a winning entry poem until after I read your poem.) Congratulations!
I did read your author notes prior to reading your poem. I am a potter
from way back...Okay...I took one course in college...just enough to
know those terms you use in your poem:)
Your poem has a melody to it and I just read it again out loud...with chills.
This is just over the top great. Wow...I hardly know where to begin.
"In kiln so hot all dross burned off
remains a different shape"
Love those lines and all of them, really.
Your speckled rhymes and near rhymes
throughout the poem add to the pleasure
of reading.
I'm astounded by your talent and your
spirituality. Love this poem!
Now...There is one part...that seems
like one part of it sounds better turned...:
"A masterpiece!
He's refined me!
Re 'formed' all of my past"
It's the middle line...I hear this:
'I'm refined
re-formed of all my past"
That's it...that's my 2 cents...
That what you paid me for:)
This is an unbelievably great poem
and I'm your new fan,
Linda
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Linda - you send me over the top. That passage - I know exactly what you mean. Reads rough to me, too. It's those blasted syllable counts and rhymes. Most of the time I just ignore such arbitrary (hah!) restraints - but I guess my brain was in a mood for arbitrary - bummer. BUT WAIT! If I revised your suggestion to 'I am refined' I get the blasted 4 syllables AND it rhymes back to the prior verses first two lines! WE ARE BRILLIANT!
I'm rushing off to change it. Thanks, Pard!
Also for the stars. And the fan-ship.
Relda
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a fabulous poem, Relda. Congratulations in winning the contest. I have a little experience with throwing on a wheel, but I'm not very good at this form. You have described the process beautifully. I'm better at slab method, i.e. rolling the clay out like piecrust, cutting it and constructing. Your lovely spiritual poem describes being made whole again using the "potter" metaphor. Clearly expressive and nicely composed. Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016
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This is a fabulous poem, Relda. Congratulations in winning the contest. I have a little experience with throwing on a wheel, but I'm not very good at this form. You have described the process beautifully. I'm better at slab method, i.e. rolling the clay out like piecrust, cutting it and constructing. Your lovely spiritual poem describes being made whole again using the "potter" metaphor. Clearly expressive and nicely composed. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016
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So glad you liked it. That means a lot. - Relda
Comment from bluegill
I liked very much your use of pottery in your poetry. Nice metaphor with the trials and tribulations, successes and failures, realized in the effort of making pottery and also in the making and remaking of one's soul. I liked your rhyming style also, though I know very little of the different styles used in poetry. I saw how you achieved a sense of rhyme without forcing. The structure I liked, beginning with sadness and depression, depiction of rebuilding, the allegory of the pot to the rebuilding of the soul and character, making for a satisfying end.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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I liked very much your use of pottery in your poetry. Nice metaphor with the trials and tribulations, successes and failures, realized in the effort of making pottery and also in the making and remaking of one's soul. I liked your rhyming style also, though I know very little of the different styles used in poetry. I saw how you achieved a sense of rhyme without forcing. The structure I liked, beginning with sadness and depression, depiction of rebuilding, the allegory of the pot to the rebuilding of the soul and character, making for a satisfying end.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your review and kind comments. Your insight is appreciated.
Glad to hear from you. Hope you are well.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Dustybones
Good morning. Want you to know I loved this poem and the use of a broken pot which is redone again, and restored back to goodness. I will remember this all day. CYA.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Good morning. Want you to know I loved this poem and the use of a broken pot which is redone again, and restored back to goodness. I will remember this all day. CYA.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016
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Hi, again. You are so generous with your reviews. I've been off-the-grid for a few days - took my husband to Ft. Myers (a spot we've gone many times on our anniversary) for his birthday. It will probably be our last 'hurrah,' as far as a trip as a couple. The ALS is bad enough now that he is embarrassed to be fed in public. We're home now and the dust should settle soon. I promise I am really interested in exploring your work.
Relda
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Thanks, No rush!
Comment from frogbook
Definitely not a crackpot author. This was a unique and original idea for the prompt and well written with thought provoking ideas.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Definitely not a crackpot author. This was a unique and original idea for the prompt and well written with thought provoking ideas.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Thank so much for your review Your comments are very encouraging.
God bless and my best,
Relda
