And We All Fall Down
Freestyle72 total reviews
Comment from Cumbrianlass
We can convince ourselves of many things, true or not. Sometimes it's hard to accept the truth, and easier to kid ourselves. At least, that's what I'm taking from this superb poem, Bev. I love how your work - poetry or prose, never fails to incite thoughts and feelings. You don't indulge us often enough, I think.
Love Av
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
We can convince ourselves of many things, true or not. Sometimes it's hard to accept the truth, and easier to kid ourselves. At least, that's what I'm taking from this superb poem, Bev. I love how your work - poetry or prose, never fails to incite thoughts and feelings. You don't indulge us often enough, I think.
Love Av
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Av, you really get this poem, and I thank you for that. Also appreciated is your faithful support and encouragement.
Love, Bev
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent title for you free style poem. I love the title. Vivid imagery in the well crafted piece. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
Excellent title for you free style poem. I love the title. Vivid imagery in the well crafted piece. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Hi, Jmf
Thank you for your very kind and generous review. Your good luck wishes are appreciate, but this is not a contest entry.
Warm regards,
Bev
Comment from Slythytove2
Shuttered justification- I had some of that once- it gave me a queexy tummy.( I drive my spell check crazy)This one's not so -right there- if you get my drift. It's understandable but not as cohesive as the rest. Each section ( I can't really call them stanzas, can I?) seems to have it's own deeper different background brought together by the ending. I'm guessing this gives insight in your own way of seeing your life, like a collage. Or maybe it went right over my head. At any rate it wasn't as easy to fathom.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
Shuttered justification- I had some of that once- it gave me a queexy tummy.( I drive my spell check crazy)This one's not so -right there- if you get my drift. It's understandable but not as cohesive as the rest. Each section ( I can't really call them stanzas, can I?) seems to have it's own deeper different background brought together by the ending. I'm guessing this gives insight in your own way of seeing your life, like a collage. Or maybe it went right over my head. At any rate it wasn't as easy to fathom.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Hello, Sly
I can appreciate that my own internal sense would not always make unto the page. Thank you, anyway, for your kind and generous review.
:) Bev
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You're entirely welcome.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Bev
= Excellent freestyle.
= The strong emotion that comes with love is evident, and well described throughout this poem.
= Your artwork emphasizes your words as well.
= Great opening stanza to set the tone.
I can move your memory
From hell to heaven
And mold my heart
To shuttered justification
= Fantastic Job!
* A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! *
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
Hi, Bev
= Excellent freestyle.
= The strong emotion that comes with love is evident, and well described throughout this poem.
= Your artwork emphasizes your words as well.
= Great opening stanza to set the tone.
I can move your memory
From hell to heaven
And mold my heart
To shuttered justification
= Fantastic Job!
* A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! *
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much, Jax. It's hard to open the heart's door while still in the midst of the pain.
I'm glad you liked one of my favorite stanzas. Your support and encouragement are much appreciated, my friend.
:) Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, well. I swear, Bev, you make me think too hard sometimes...LOL. My brain hurts from this one, but gosh-darnit, it's thought-provoking and smooth as butter.
That first stanza has me almost in tears - I might be interpreting incorrectly, but to me, it's highly romantic and very beautiful, and the theme seems to follow through. This is a lover playing rescuer (and suffering for it too, but still gladly sacrificing).
? Way off? I loved it!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
Well, well. I swear, Bev, you make me think too hard sometimes...LOL. My brain hurts from this one, but gosh-darnit, it's thought-provoking and smooth as butter.
That first stanza has me almost in tears - I might be interpreting incorrectly, but to me, it's highly romantic and very beautiful, and the theme seems to follow through. This is a lover playing rescuer (and suffering for it too, but still gladly sacrificing).
? Way off? I loved it!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Oh, you're on the mark, Dawn. I believed I was the rescuer, but I was not.
Thank you so much for this very supportive and generous review.
:) Bev
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...sigh... (Hugs!)
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Listen, I promise I am not trying to get you to read the poem (it's very short anyway) but you HAVE to watch the video with my antonym poem, "Thirsting for Knowledge". Bev, I am SO crushing on this piano guy! Hahahaha! (Just kidding of course, but the music is so uplifting, and he's so darn cute and passionate!)
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I'll be sure to check out the hottie, Dawn. I never, ever pass up an opportunity to dream a little.
XX Bev
Comment from Mastery
Bravo! Well done, Bev. Wow! I forgot what a fine poet you are.
"I can indulge the notion
An underprivileged heart
Stokes blind devotion
In a world fraught with schoolyard bullies" (liked this especially welll)
Great job, my friend. X Bob
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
Bravo! Well done, Bev. Wow! I forgot what a fine poet you are.
"I can indulge the notion
An underprivileged heart
Stokes blind devotion
In a world fraught with schoolyard bullies" (liked this especially welll)
Great job, my friend. X Bob
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Hi, Bob
Thank you so very much for this lovely and gracious review. Right now I'm happy to have the itch to write something... anything LOL.
Really appreciate you!
:) Bev
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Honestly.....I know that feeling. Maake up a short storyabout tourists visiting Traverse and getting a flat tire onthat main drag. LOL.. Bob
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Oh and some dumb___ driver slamming into the back end while texting. hehehe
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Bev, this is a beautifully written free style poem. It touches some important issues and I read it with great interest. I especially liked:
I can conjure exhaled sweetness
to breach boudaries
ripewith the smell of
epic strangeness.
Very well done. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
Wow, Bev, this is a beautifully written free style poem. It touches some important issues and I read it with great interest. I especially liked:
I can conjure exhaled sweetness
to breach boudaries
ripewith the smell of
epic strangeness.
Very well done. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Hi, Ulla
Thank you for your inspiring and thoughtful review. I appreciate the encouragement very much, my friend.
:) Bev
Comment from Eric1
Wow Bev, You are doing free verse! I wouldn't mind but you are doing it very well, excellent use of imagery and description, I am not a fan of free verse but when it flows this well I often wish I could write it my friend.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
Wow Bev, You are doing free verse! I wouldn't mind but you are doing it very well, excellent use of imagery and description, I am not a fan of free verse but when it flows this well I often wish I could write it my friend.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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, Eric
I thank you very much for this really encouraging review. I wish I felt more comfortable with the structured forms, but I really am not that confident in them at this point.
I really appreciate your generosity both in reading and reviewing.
:) Bev
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I thought the structure was faultless Bev,
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Thanks for that, Eric. :)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A lovely free verse, Bev. I like these lines:
I can conjure exhaled sweetness
To breach boundaries
Ripe with the smell of
epic strangeness
As well as your concluding ones:
Yet, feelings spin me away
And I want to lose my mind
Just now
Just you
Good write, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
A lovely free verse, Bev. I like these lines:
I can conjure exhaled sweetness
To breach boundaries
Ripe with the smell of
epic strangeness
As well as your concluding ones:
Yet, feelings spin me away
And I want to lose my mind
Just now
Just you
Good write, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much, Debbie. I'm going to take a break now. Sheesh, I rarely work this hard when doing prose. :)
You're the best!
xx Bev
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A well deserved break, my friend~Debbie
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:)
Comment from c_lucas
Sometimes one doesn't know if he is going or coming. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
Sometimes one doesn't know if he is going or coming. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much, Charlie. Memories have that effect on me.
:) Bev
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As you aged, the trouble is getting back up.
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Boy, is that the truth, Charlie. Thank goodness with an IPad, I can write lying on my back LOL.
:) Bev