Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

We can convince ourselves of many things, true or not. Sometimes it's hard to accept the truth, and easier to kid ourselves. At least, that's what I'm taking from this superb poem, Bev. I love how your work - poetry or prose, never fails to incite thoughts and feelings. You don't indulge us often enough, I think.

Love Av

x

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Av, you really get this poem, and I thank you for that. Also appreciated is your faithful support and encouragement.

Love, Bev

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Excellent title for you free style poem. I love the title. Vivid imagery in the well crafted piece. Well done and good luck in the contest.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Hi, Jmf

Thank you for your very kind and generous review. Your good luck wishes are appreciate, but this is not a contest entry.

Warm regards,

Bev

Comment from Slythytove2

Excellent

Shuttered justification- I had some of that once- it gave me a queexy tummy.( I drive my spell check crazy)This one's not so -right there- if you get my drift. It's understandable but not as cohesive as the rest. Each section ( I can't really call them stanzas, can I?) seems to have it's own deeper different background brought together by the ending. I'm guessing this gives insight in your own way of seeing your life, like a collage. Or maybe it went right over my head. At any rate it wasn't as easy to fathom.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Hello, Sly

I can appreciate that my own internal sense would not always make unto the page. Thank you, anyway, for your kind and generous review.

:) Bev

reply by Slythytove2 on 02-Apr-2016

You're entirely welcome.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Bev

= Excellent freestyle.
= The strong emotion that comes with love is evident, and well described throughout this poem.
= Your artwork emphasizes your words as well.
= Great opening stanza to set the tone.

I can move your memory
From hell to heaven
And mold my heart
To shuttered justification

= Fantastic Job!

* A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! *
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Jax. It's hard to open the heart's door while still in the midst of the pain.

I'm glad you liked one of my favorite stanzas. Your support and encouragement are much appreciated, my friend.

:) Bev

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Well, well. I swear, Bev, you make me think too hard sometimes...LOL. My brain hurts from this one, but gosh-darnit, it's thought-provoking and smooth as butter.

That first stanza has me almost in tears - I might be interpreting incorrectly, but to me, it's highly romantic and very beautiful, and the theme seems to follow through. This is a lover playing rescuer (and suffering for it too, but still gladly sacrificing).

? Way off? I loved it!

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Oh, you're on the mark, Dawn. I believed I was the rescuer, but I was not.

Thank you so much for this very supportive and generous review.

:) Bev

reply by Dawn Munro on 02-Apr-2016

...sigh... (Hugs!)

reply by Dawn Munro on 02-Apr-2016

Listen, I promise I am not trying to get you to read the poem (it's very short anyway) but you HAVE to watch the video with my antonym poem, "Thirsting for Knowledge". Bev, I am SO crushing on this piano guy! Hahahaha! (Just kidding of course, but the music is so uplifting, and he's so darn cute and passionate!)

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

I'll be sure to check out the hottie, Dawn. I never, ever pass up an opportunity to dream a little.

XX Bev

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Bravo! Well done, Bev. Wow! I forgot what a fine poet you are.

"I can indulge the notion
An underprivileged heart
Stokes blind devotion
In a world fraught with schoolyard bullies" (liked this especially welll)

Great job, my friend. X Bob

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Hi, Bob

Thank you so very much for this lovely and gracious review. Right now I'm happy to have the itch to write something... anything LOL.

Really appreciate you!

:) Bev

reply by Mastery on 02-Apr-2016

Honestly.....I know that feeling. Maake up a short storyabout tourists visiting Traverse and getting a flat tire onthat main drag. LOL.. Bob

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Oh and some dumb___ driver slamming into the back end while texting. hehehe

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Wow, Bev, this is a beautifully written free style poem. It touches some important issues and I read it with great interest. I especially liked:
I can conjure exhaled sweetness
to breach boudaries
ripewith the smell of
epic strangeness.
Very well done. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Hi, Ulla

Thank you for your inspiring and thoughtful review. I appreciate the encouragement very much, my friend.

:) Bev

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Wow Bev, You are doing free verse! I wouldn't mind but you are doing it very well, excellent use of imagery and description, I am not a fan of free verse but when it flows this well I often wish I could write it my friend.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

, Eric

I thank you very much for this really encouraging review. I wish I felt more comfortable with the structured forms, but I really am not that confident in them at this point.

I really appreciate your generosity both in reading and reviewing.

:) Bev

reply by Eric1 on 03-Apr-2016

I thought the structure was faultless Bev,

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Thanks for that, Eric. :)

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

A lovely free verse, Bev. I like these lines:

I can conjure exhaled sweetness
To breach boundaries
Ripe with the smell of
epic strangeness

As well as your concluding ones:

Yet, feelings spin me away
And I want to lose my mind
Just now
Just you

Good write, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Debbie. I'm going to take a break now. Sheesh, I rarely work this hard when doing prose. :)

You're the best!

xx Bev

reply by dejohnsrld (Debbie) on 02-Apr-2016

A well deserved break, my friend~Debbie

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

:)

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Sometimes one doesn't know if he is going or coming. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Charlie. Memories have that effect on me.

:) Bev

reply by c_lucas on 03-Apr-2016

As you aged, the trouble is getting back up.

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Boy, is that the truth, Charlie. Thank goodness with an IPad, I can write lying on my back LOL.

:) Bev