And We All Fall Down
Freestyle72 total reviews
Comment from Caressa_08
I believe that a free verse is putting out, a better perspective without having to worry about what will rhyme with a word on the end. And think you did a good job of letting us know how you think and quite diverse, is seems. And, sometimes it can fly out of nowhere or be in your subconscious, for a time and move to the present...I see that in your writing. Though, you truly know what you really mean, or seems to be a spontaneous write to me. Though each end line of each stanza in your poem does direct to, And we all fall down, in some way it appears by the words expressed.
Caressa_08
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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I believe that a free verse is putting out, a better perspective without having to worry about what will rhyme with a word on the end. And think you did a good job of letting us know how you think and quite diverse, is seems. And, sometimes it can fly out of nowhere or be in your subconscious, for a time and move to the present...I see that in your writing. Though, you truly know what you really mean, or seems to be a spontaneous write to me. Though each end line of each stanza in your poem does direct to, And we all fall down, in some way it appears by the words expressed.
Caressa_08
Comment Written 03-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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Hi, Caressa
I like the way you express your insights into the development of my free verse poem. The phrase 'sometimes it can fly out of nowhere or be in your subconscious' pretty much sums it up for me. Thanks for that understanding.
I really appreciate this excellent and most encouraging review.
Comment from TPAC
Poetic cafe style prose captivating and thought-provoking in its given conveyance. Writer shout is crime in the dark: nice expressed views.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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Poetic cafe style prose captivating and thought-provoking in its given conveyance. Writer shout is crime in the dark: nice expressed views.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much for taking time to read and review my poem. I appreciate it.
Comment from DR DIP
I have read this poem 5 times now and each time I see different meanings. Rather cryptic in format theimage of the earth and a saturn like planet above Earth (well thats how i decipher it) good use of metaphors.
thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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I have read this poem 5 times now and each time I see different meanings. Rather cryptic in format theimage of the earth and a saturn like planet above Earth (well thats how i decipher it) good use of metaphors.
thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 03-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your review!
Comment from Chris Walker
I enjoyed this free verse poem you have written. Your word choice is well crafted and creates a strong piece. I like the repetition of "I can" in the first three stanzas. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed this free verse poem you have written. Your word choice is well crafted and creates a strong piece. I like the repetition of "I can" in the first three stanzas. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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Chris, thank you very much for taking to read and review my poem. I appreciate your generosity and support.
:) Bev
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
Free form poetry is hard for me, mostly because I am more of a rule-kinda gal. If I'm not going to be playing with rhyme and meter, then it's prose I tend to gravitate toward in my ownwriting. That being said, I am able to recognize a free form poem I like when we happen to cross paths, and I like this offering of yours. It took me several readings to form any kind of cohesive opinion, but here goes:
First off, the illustration you chose seems appropriate on several levels. First, to me this poem is all about memories of a past relationship. Someone has let their thoughts drift back to a time of heavenly, oblivious memory- making, perhaps as a brief escape from the hell of remembering the "winding down," and eventual end of the relationship. I can see this deliberate, focused centering and spinning in both your words and in the illustration.
Thank you for sharing this deeply thought-provoking poem. Anyone who spends some time considering these words will surely be able to find something that strikes a chord. -CtVR
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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Free form poetry is hard for me, mostly because I am more of a rule-kinda gal. If I'm not going to be playing with rhyme and meter, then it's prose I tend to gravitate toward in my ownwriting. That being said, I am able to recognize a free form poem I like when we happen to cross paths, and I like this offering of yours. It took me several readings to form any kind of cohesive opinion, but here goes:
First off, the illustration you chose seems appropriate on several levels. First, to me this poem is all about memories of a past relationship. Someone has let their thoughts drift back to a time of heavenly, oblivious memory- making, perhaps as a brief escape from the hell of remembering the "winding down," and eventual end of the relationship. I can see this deliberate, focused centering and spinning in both your words and in the illustration.
Thank you for sharing this deeply thought-provoking poem. Anyone who spends some time considering these words will surely be able to find something that strikes a chord. -CtVR
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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I am really honored by the fact that you took so much time with this, CtVR. This review makes my heart glad because you got the meaning behind words and picture choice. That is completely awesome.
Thank you very much for this most supportive and encouraging review.
:) Bev
Comment from JW
This is an interesting poem. One that is very deep, full with emotion.
So sad it ends with one wanting to lose there mind.
Maybe, with the end of my marriage, that's why I never desired to get involved in a permanent relationship.
Thanks for sharing this, Bev. JW
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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This is an interesting poem. One that is very deep, full with emotion.
So sad it ends with one wanting to lose there mind.
Maybe, with the end of my marriage, that's why I never desired to get involved in a permanent relationship.
Thanks for sharing this, Bev. JW
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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Thank you, JW, for getting the gist of my poem. I appreciate both your support and encouragement.
:) Bev
Comment from C.J. 16
A very interesting, though provoking free verse poem. I especially liked the last two stanzas, but I enjoyed reading all of it. Very well done. All the best.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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A very interesting, though provoking free verse poem. I especially liked the last two stanzas, but I enjoyed reading all of it. Very well done. All the best.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
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Hi, C.J.
Thank you for taking time out to read my poem and review it so generously. I appreciate the encouragement.
:) Bev
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You're very welcome.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from w.j.debi
You know how to create mood. Excellent enjambment. The alliteration adds to the mood as well:
breach boundaries
demented dreams
meager master
watch Winding
I like how you engage various senses and creat vivid imagery
Ripe with the smell of epic strangeness
Haunt my demented dreams
Stokes blind devotion
fraught with schoolyard bullies.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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You know how to create mood. Excellent enjambment. The alliteration adds to the mood as well:
breach boundaries
demented dreams
meager master
watch Winding
I like how you engage various senses and creat vivid imagery
Ripe with the smell of epic strangeness
Haunt my demented dreams
Stokes blind devotion
fraught with schoolyard bullies.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Hi, Debi
Thanks so much for this very thorough and most helpful review. I was just trying to think of the term for lines building on lines the other day and you've helped me remember -- enjambment!
Coming from a poet I admire, your thoughful sharings are especially nice.
:) Bev
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You are welcome. Hey, excellent choice of verbs in this one, too.
Comment from IndianaIrish
An interesting poem, Bev, and your space photo is wonderful. I spcially liked the power of this verse...
And desire
Is a meager master
Unaware of the watch
Winding down
I enjoy reading your poetry, Bev.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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An interesting poem, Bev, and your space photo is wonderful. I spcially liked the power of this verse...
And desire
Is a meager master
Unaware of the watch
Winding down
I enjoy reading your poetry, Bev.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much, Karyn. I appreciate your support and generosity.
:) Bev
Comment from DonandVicki
A poem that moves my imagination to think of how I feel when I am with my wife and we are making love. That feeling when nothing else exists in the universe but us. Well written.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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A poem that moves my imagination to think of how I feel when I am with my wife and we are making love. That feeling when nothing else exists in the universe but us. Well written.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Thanks for sharing your most romantic insight, Don. I really appreciate you taking time to read and review my poem so kindly.
:) Bev
