Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

This is sensational free verse poetry, Bev. So eloquently worded and so very expressive.

I could relate completely to the two following stanzas:
I can let our promise


Haunt my demented dreams --
As if the contract was fulfilled

And we each moved on...

I can indulge the notion
An underprivileged heart
Stokes blind devotion
In a world fraught with schoolyard bullies

Outstanding, Bev...
~Dean

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Thank you very much, Dean. I so appreciate the encouragement of a fine poet like yourself. And thanks for highlighting those areas. Glad they resonated with you.

Have a good week!

Bev

Comment from Judvan2

Excellent

Good free style poem. The words conjure emotions of loss and anger or sadness. I like the way you build it and end with just now, just you. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Thank you very much for this most gracious review. I appreciate the good luck wishes, but this isn't entered in a contest entry. Anyway, great to hear from you.

Bev

Comment from Terra Dane

Exceptional

Wow. Have always liked your work --it's been a while, but this is a strong piece, smart, vivid, and emotional. It's perfect for my current place in time and mind. So though I am certain you wrote for other reasons it leaves gracious room for interpretation--my favorite kind of work.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Hi, Terra

I'm so glad this poem resonated with you. I appreciate you mentioning that as well as your most gracious review. The encouragement and support mean a lot to me.

I, too, like poems that 'leave gracious room for interpretation''. So well said!

:0) Bev

Comment from foxangie123

Exceptional

This is spectacular and so well done. There is so much to take from this masterpiece of brilliant construction and I mean it. Wow. Way to go.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Thank you so very much for this most gracious review, F. I really appreciate your encouragement and support.

:) Bev

reply by foxangie123 on 03-Apr-2016

If is a pleasure to read your great writing.

Comment from pamelaperron

Excellent

love the topic. could remove some smaller words to making the sound of lines cohesive. hope to see more of you...pamela

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Thanks for the review, Pamela.

Comment from Winslow

Excellent

Dear funwriting,

I don't know exactly what this poem says but to me you think of life and all its oddities and give yourself over to the meager master desire? Thoughts before you indulge in love making with a mate who might not satisfy you entirely?

Warm regards,

Winslow

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Thanks for the review, Winslow

Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

Poet wants move his memories from good times to bad times. Wants to still feel the memories and love of a lover. Doesn't want to let go yet. This is my interpretation. Nicely done! liberty justice

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Right on target, LJ. Thank you for the encouraging review.

:) Bev

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Creative artwork and good presentation.
-Well written poem expressing many different ideas and feelings.
-I like the style; it seems like a stream of consciousness.
-My favorite lines are:
"Unaware of the watch
Winding down." (I like it for the image and effective alliteration.)
-Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, R. I really appreciate yet another generous and encouraging review!

:) Bev

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

Desire is a meager master
The mind can alter memories
turn hell to heaven
conjure sweetness and promise
the beginnings
now distance, mere memory
for time is a relentless master
that also moves on
despite attempts to hold it back
Nicely written,
strong free verse poetry
Interesting art work
like a volcano in the mind

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

Thank you very much, rs. I really appreciate this gracious and insightful review.

:) Bev

Comment from chcbeck

Excellent

A well written free style poem. The questions that we are left with when relationships don't work out. You capture this. The picture is awesome by the way. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016

I love the artwork that we have access to through FanStory. So many amazing images that can, often, add much to the post. And many of the artists have them for sale.

Anyway, thank you for, yet another, awesome review. I really appreciate it!

:) Bev