Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Wow, this is a stark read and left me with a very strong impression. Had to read it a few times and then it really sunk in. Very good and a strong entry. Good luck. All the best. Ulla

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thank you for taking the time to read and review the poem, Ulla.
It is appreciated.

Comment from Jonesy

Excellent

So I imagine you might get some reviewers saying this echoes, Poe? Not much into poetry really, not that that was all Poe wrote, but sure seemed like it's written in a similar style. From what I can recall of Poe anyway.

Or am I way off base?

Anyway, I liked this. High on the creep factor.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thanks, Jonesy. I'm obviously a big fan of Edgar's writing, both poetry and prose.
Much appreciated...

Comment from hifein

Exceptional

you got my attention both with your photo (powerful) and with the opening a la 'the midnight ride of paul revere. well written and it held my attention all the way through. we all, indeed, have a greenish glow, but to different degrees. flow is good as is rhyme and meter. enjoyed it. best hi

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thank you first of all for taking an interest and deciding to read the poem, hifein. I appreciate that in and of itself.
I am also sincerely grateful for your encouraging comments and exceptional rating.
But most important of all, I'm just really glad to know that ya liked this.
Take care, and thanks again...

reply by hifein on 31-Mar-2016

you're very welcome :-)

Comment from camaria

Exceptional

So very Edgar Allen Poe. Loved the elegant old style of this one and you did an excellent job fleshing out what the contest set out. Great rythm and a wonderful poem turned cautionary tale. Strong contender, I'm sure. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thank you for taking the time to read and review the poem, Camaria. I appreciate that, in and of itself. I'm also very grateful for the shiny six stars, and you very encouraging comments as well.
I very pleased to know that you enjoyed this.
Take care, and thanks again. :)

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Good

"The Jade" is quite a well-written and entertaining piece. It's only my opinion, bit this poem would be improved by using more stringent editing. Write, re-write, and then WRITE again.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thanks, that's just your opinion.
In my opinion it's fine just as it is, respectfully.

Comment from Chris Walker

Excellent

LOL--Wonderful! If I there wasn't so much that's awesome in this poem,
I'd be a bit jealous of your talent.
Really very well done.
Perfect choice of artwork and title make this complete.
~Chris

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading, Chris.
No need to be jealous of my abilities in the slightest.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

Great rhyming in this poem. I loved the color of the font and the background choice. The poem was definitely a very terror filled warning. I liked the rhythm to your work. It flowed nicely, both as I read it silently and then aloud. Well done. Good luck to you in the contest. Gretchen

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading, Gretchen, and for the additional star.
It's all appreciated.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a good modern myth about what happens when you let pride make you think you can close the gate of hell. This person just opened it at let out all the horrible emotions that let the world become what it is today. We need more people who work to stem the flow of these things to make Earth less of a hell and more like the Heaven we wish to enter in the end.

Hope you did well in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

It's still ongoing, DP, so I have no idea how well I've done.
Thanks for reading.

reply by dragonpoet on 31-Mar-2016

You're welcome.

dp

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Hate personified. Certainly is.
am that ghastly greenish glow;
the dark jade gleam behind black eyes--the one who hates, who deftly grows....says it all. A tale of disaster on the high seas, and terror released from Heaven's gate. An rollicking, horror poem written with passion and great rhythms. These are generated mostly by the deft use of enjambment, alliteration and repeated internal rhymes on every line. Some verses run as monorhymes which is very difficult to achieve. A fabulous entry. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading, Mark.
Your encouraging comments are appreciated.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Excellent poem with both internal and external rhyme, it never faltered the flow was smooth and even. I enjoyed the personification of the poem, you did a really good job bringing out all the emotions of poetry. Good luck in the contest! :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Thanks for deciding to review the poem, Sandra.
I appreciate your comments.