Comment from Natalie Walker

Exceptional

Wow! This is great. I like poems that are on the dark side and make an impact, just like this. It's spooky and suspenseful, whereas most poems are elegant and use flowery language. Don't get me wrong, those poems are great too...but this is a nice change of pace. This is truly an exceptional poem. I see no errors. Nice work.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Natalie, and I apologize for the lengthy delay in responding.
Don't think for one moment it's because I don't appreciate you or your support.
I really do!
I'm just s-o-o-o-o far behind, but I'm trying to get caught up.
Thanks again!
With gratitude,
~Dean :}

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Exceptional

I so much enjoyed reviewing this wonderful piece of poetry you have shared! Absolutely, beautifully rhymed and great rhythm to the poem. Powerful imagery throughout...loved the strength projected in the third stanza...a place to use "whore hound"! lol...A very good talent shines through here.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Susanne, and I apologize for the lengthy delay in responding.
Don't think for one moment it's because I don't appreciate you or your support.
I really do!
I'm just s-o-o-o-o far behind, but I'm trying to get caught up.
Thanks again!
With gratitude,
~Dean :}

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

I've heard of the green-eyed lady -- but also green-faced? YUCK! This girl is et UP with it! hahaha

I can see why this poem took the win. It's superb! Great job, Dean-O!

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Thanks, Robyn.
~Dean

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

I so wish I had a 6 left for this one, Dean. You really captured this emotion and brought it to life. Your verse, though complex, flows impeccably well.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016

It was a tough poem to get it to flow just right, Douglas, that's for sure.
Thanks very much for taking the time to read and comment.
I sincerely appreciate it.
Enjoy your weekend, my friend.
~Dean

Comment from Dustybones

Excellent

He knew, he knew... just from the sound--he was so close, soon he'd be crowned.
Mankind would nevermore be bound, as Heaven's slaves, nor Hell's whore hound.

I like this line the best.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016

It's my favorite too, DB.
Thanks for checking this out.
~Dean

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

Really good work, Dean! I loved your vocabulary in this piece, and as always your descriptive imagery. Nice work on the greed emotion being unleashed from the gates of hell.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016

Thanks for reading my rare foray into the world of haiku poetry, Russell.
I very much appreciate it.
Enjoy your weekend.
~Dean

Comment from Writeling

Exceptional

Hi, This is an exceptional poem, its rhyming pattern clever and different. I really like, admire, the surprises landed by the internal rhymes, which are so pleasing to the reader. Wonderful!

with best wishes, Writeling

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016

Thanks so much, Writeling, and I apologize for the lengthy delay in responding.
Don't think for one moment it's because I don't appreciate you or your support.
I really do!
I'm just s-o-o-o-o far behind, but I'm trying to get caught up.
Thanks again!
With gratitude,
~Dean :}

Comment from P1

Excellent

well i knew the miute saw te picture i would have the pleasure of reading your words. i love te beat to this the rhyme and of course the terror and imagery. a well deserved winner. congrats xx

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Thanks, Paige.
~Dean

Comment from skelly2013

Excellent

I love this! I applaud anyone who can write poetry in that rhythm because I find it incredibly difficult. Also I liked your vocabulary throughout. Well done!

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Thanks, Shelly.
~Dean

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Dean, your usual brilliant presentation of an excellent poem which is a virtual cornucopia of description and imagery, fantastic internal rhyming, great rhythm and meter all helping toward a healthy smooth flow my friend. Congratulations on the wonderful win.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016

Thanks, Eric. it was a shred win, a three way tie out of four contestants.
Oh well...
~Dean

reply by Eric1 on 03-Apr-2016

A win nontheless my friend.