Blue Coffin
Brown burial in blue box.98 total reviews
Comment from melyuki
Wow! thanks Sis Cat for sharing this intense and emotionally charged verse that paints a very dismal picture in the mind. Your words truly create a feeling of devastation as each Stanza carries us through this horrifying fact about our forests and bark beetles. Using each of our senses to develop the intensity here is extremely clever and works well. The final stanza adds another dimension to your verse and leaves the reader spellbound.. A great poem.. I really enjoyed reading and learning more about the damage caused by bark beetles due to global warming. cheers and thanks mel xx
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Wow! thanks Sis Cat for sharing this intense and emotionally charged verse that paints a very dismal picture in the mind. Your words truly create a feeling of devastation as each Stanza carries us through this horrifying fact about our forests and bark beetles. Using each of our senses to develop the intensity here is extremely clever and works well. The final stanza adds another dimension to your verse and leaves the reader spellbound.. A great poem.. I really enjoyed reading and learning more about the damage caused by bark beetles due to global warming. cheers and thanks mel xx
Comment Written 31-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Thank you, melyuki, for your generous, enthusiastic review. I am glad I shared "this intense and emotionally charged verse that paints a very dismal picture in the mind," by "using each of our senses to develop the intensity." Thanks for your review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Your poem is very powerful with strong imagery, my friend. Your author notes are very concerning. I haven't heard about this before and thank you for sharing it~Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Your poem is very powerful with strong imagery, my friend. Your author notes are very concerning. I haven't heard about this before and thank you for sharing it~Debbie
Comment Written 31-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Debbie, for your review and concerns. Many reviewers in Europe and North America told be that beetles killed their trees. I am glad I shared my poem.
Comment from Debbie Noland
There is a sensory smorgasbord in this powerful piece penned for the climate change collection. As you go sense by sense, explaining how this beetle inflicts damage gradually nut completely, you lead readers to grasp the horror of this and other changes that befall the earth as a result of careless, thoughtless human activity. It is a powerful poem throughout, but the "blue coffin" image at the end is riveting.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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There is a sensory smorgasbord in this powerful piece penned for the climate change collection. As you go sense by sense, explaining how this beetle inflicts damage gradually nut completely, you lead readers to grasp the horror of this and other changes that befall the earth as a result of careless, thoughtless human activity. It is a powerful poem throughout, but the "blue coffin" image at the end is riveting.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Yes, Debbie, that blue coffin imagery at the end of my poem is riveting and horrific. I took readers on a sense by sense tour of the devastation. Thank you for your review.
Comment from judester
This is another heart breaking reminder of how everything is connected and the effects our carelessness is causing. A clever poem with each stanza dealing with our senses. The thing that scares me is how fast the destruction rolls... don't get me started on our precious oceans. judester
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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This is another heart breaking reminder of how everything is connected and the effects our carelessness is causing. A clever poem with each stanza dealing with our senses. The thing that scares me is how fast the destruction rolls... don't get me started on our precious oceans. judester
Comment Written 31-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Yes, judester, everything is connected. When earth's temperature rises, beetles that normally would be kept in check by cold winters now thrive. Reviewers in Spain, England, Canada, and throughout America told me that beetles are killing their forests. I can only imagine what is going on in our precious oceans. Thanks for your review.
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I spend alot of time in zanzibar where Coca Cola makes a fortune selling their bottled water, but absolutely no recycling program for the empty bottles. I wrote to Coca Cola about this but they don't care. I suggest to the hotels to supply free water coolers so people are not buying new bottles every day, just refilling. They can put a little money box, honor system, and the tourists would contribute, I know. Imagine a big container with a plexiglass side and shredder, you put the bottle in and an explosion of shredded plastic. The beach kids would comb the beaches picking up bottles just for the show, haha, cheers, judester
Comment from nancyrabbrose
That is an amazing poem and greatly needed. Would that all the people could read it. Good for you.
I didn't know about the bark beetles. THANK YOU for telling Fanstory about that problem. This is a very well written poem, as you explained the form using senses.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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That is an amazing poem and greatly needed. Would that all the people could read it. Good for you.
I didn't know about the bark beetles. THANK YOU for telling Fanstory about that problem. This is a very well written poem, as you explained the form using senses.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Thank you, nancyrabbrose, for your generous, six star review of my "amazing poem" "using senses." I am humbled that I told people about the bark beetles. Reviewers in Canada, England, Spain, and America told me that beetles are killing their trees.
Comment from seaglass
This is a beautiful poem describing an alarming truth. I lived in Wyoming for a time and watched the death of lodge pine forests.Between the harvests of the rain forests and the blithe of the mountains' woodlands, one wonders if our grandchildren will see trees
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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This is a beautiful poem describing an alarming truth. I lived in Wyoming for a time and watched the death of lodge pine forests.Between the harvests of the rain forests and the blithe of the mountains' woodlands, one wonders if our grandchildren will see trees
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Yes, seaglass, his is "an alarming truth." Reviewers in New York, Illinois, Arizona, Nebraska and as faraway as Canada, Spain, and England have reported that beetles are killing their trees, too. I, too, wonder if our grandchildren will see trees. Thanks for your review.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Sis Cat: thank you for beautiful poem using the senses. You say there is no smell and no one wants these trees. Destruction by bugs is ruining the beauty of the mountains. I have seen trees destroyed by fires. Good awareness. I'm sure you had a fun writing time with the poets. I like to climb the Colorado mountains. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Sis Cat: thank you for beautiful poem using the senses. You say there is no smell and no one wants these trees. Destruction by bugs is ruining the beauty of the mountains. I have seen trees destroyed by fires. Good awareness. I'm sure you had a fun writing time with the poets. I like to climb the Colorado mountains. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you, flylikeaneagle, for your review of my "beautiful poem using the senses." I had fun writing this poem but it also saddened me.
Comment from Judvan2
Its a beautiful poem and idea brought about by a tragic situation. In NY we have the emerald ash borer that is forcing them to cut the trees down. A very good write with the coffin having more than one meaning!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Its a beautiful poem and idea brought about by a tragic situation. In NY we have the emerald ash borer that is forcing them to cut the trees down. A very good write with the coffin having more than one meaning!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Judvan2, in New York, too? Reviewers in Canada, England, Spain, Arizona, and Nebraska report that their trees are dying because of these bark beetles. In California, we are cutting and burning trees to try to slow the beetle infestation. Yes, that coffin has more than one meaning. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Slythytove2
It is an insidious progression isn't it- an incursion of the comfort level we all have that allows us to continue each day. The minute sidelong observations which build up to a recognizable and irretrievable loss. It's not a popular thought these days but I can't help thinking that maybe, just maybe fish kills and tree kills and the like have been happening for a long time, it's just us who are now noticing these things, and of course blaming ourselves because we think we're so important that whatever we do has to have some earth shattering consequence. I think if we'd just all disappear one day the earth would go back to the way it's going to want to be and start waiting for the next inhabitants.
I particularly liked your juxtaposing of "evergreen to everbrown.
Your piece is well thought out and well expressed with just the right amount of poignancy.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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It is an insidious progression isn't it- an incursion of the comfort level we all have that allows us to continue each day. The minute sidelong observations which build up to a recognizable and irretrievable loss. It's not a popular thought these days but I can't help thinking that maybe, just maybe fish kills and tree kills and the like have been happening for a long time, it's just us who are now noticing these things, and of course blaming ourselves because we think we're so important that whatever we do has to have some earth shattering consequence. I think if we'd just all disappear one day the earth would go back to the way it's going to want to be and start waiting for the next inhabitants.
I particularly liked your juxtaposing of "evergreen to everbrown.
Your piece is well thought out and well expressed with just the right amount of poignancy.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Yes, Slythytove2, people are now noticing this problem. Reviewers in Arizona, Nebraska, Alberta, Canada, and England reported that their trees are dying or dead because of these bark beetles. Things do not look good. I am glad you "particularly liked your juxtaposing of "evergreen to everbrown." Thank you for your review of my poignant poem.
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"Say no more- say no more."
Comment from jpduck
Your poem reflects well the dire tidings it reports. I loved your use of all the senses.
I am appalled at that awful picture.
It appears that we will have no ash trees left in the UK in twenty years; it's a fungal disease called Ash Die Back. Do you also have that 'in your neck of the woods'?
Adrian
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Your poem reflects well the dire tidings it reports. I loved your use of all the senses.
I am appalled at that awful picture.
It appears that we will have no ash trees left in the UK in twenty years; it's a fungal disease called Ash Die Back. Do you also have that 'in your neck of the woods'?
Adrian
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Adrian, I checked and found that fungus brought by beetles are causes ashes to die in the United States and Canada. Reviewers in England, Alberta, Canada, in Arizona, and Nebraska are all reporting that their pine trees are dying or have died because of bark beetles. Yes, that is an "awful picture." Thank you for your review.
