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A Book of Love

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Assorted poems of love

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Comment from Jay Squires
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Oh, Missy, you did a beautiful job with this poem.

When we come together
In anger
Words sear the heart
Or
Freezes the mind

Love that stanza.

You tell fastdigits you won. K?

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
    K, I sure will sugga! I heard it from you, the "Master". He will be forced to believe :)
    Big hug and sloppy smooch for you Mister Squires :)

    Missy
Comment from l.raven
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HI Missy, WOW!!!!. this one just pulls you in...sets you on fire...very well written sweet girl...I love it...and the picture so sets the stage...I will go check out Fastdigits...well done... Love ya Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
    Hi, Linda, my little firebrand :) You always bring a smile to my face hon!! Thanks sweetie!!!

    Missy
reply by l.raven on 30-Mar-2016
    your so welcome Missy...always...xxoo Linda love
Comment from JTStone
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I keep the number of poets I read to a selected few, you being one. Excellent verses, I'm sure you nailed the competition.
I love the way you can subtly, or in some cases, overtly say what is on your mind...and it always seems to be on your mind.
Jimmy

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    If you are referring to romance...Yes, Jimmy :) it is!
    Thank you for choosing me as one of the ones you read, hon.
    Sometimes we write about what we long for. Probably to old for that nonsense but .....

    Happy Easter,
    Missy
Comment from I am Cat
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Hello Missy,
Yes, I've read his work, it's quite good. I'm glad to see the challenges going back and forth. It's good for inspiration. ;)
Two thoughts on this thought provoking poem which i enjoyed immensely:

Freeze[s] the mind (I think, since you used 'words sear the heart or...' (in singular fashion, then, you should add, 'freeze the mind'... it keeps the tenses correct)

uncontrollably (might be a better word choice than uncontrolled? what do you think?)

just some thoughts... otherwise, awesome challenge... I think you nailed it!
well done
c

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    I agree, Cat. I will go now and make the changes :)
    Thanks, hon, for all your help!

    Missy
    Happy Easter
Comment from Bill O'Bier
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I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. Excellent use of words and a smooth flow. The picture is appropriate for the theme of the poem.

Wishing you the best,
Bill~

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Happy Easter, Bill. Thank you, for this lovely review of my work :)

    Missy
Comment from Natalie Walker
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This is a very cool (pun intended) poem. In the second stanza, I think you mean "complements" (completes) instead of compliments, right? Other than that, this poem is great. Nice work.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Heehee, thank you , Natalie.
    Your review of my work is wonderful!

    Always justafan,
    Missy
Comment from Pantygynt
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Wow! This sounds exciting. Reminds me of an affair I had years ago but it was different. You see she was both fire and ice and you never knew which one was going to be switched on. It did make life interesting, but difficult.

One point on this, below. "Words" is the subject to bothe verbs so both must have plural forms so "freezes" should be "freeze".

"Words sear the heart
Or
Freezes the mind"

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Thank you, Gynt. I read that over and over and just said, the hell with worrying about it. Someone with more grammar knowledge will put me right, and I was not disappointed in my FanStory fans :)
    I appreciate all you do to make my writing better!

    Missy
Comment from Selina Stambi
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Oh baby ... a fresh, upbeat opening line that draws your reader in.

Good job with the challege, justafan!

Sonali



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 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Sonali, thank you for coming over from Fastdigits and giving me a look :) I appreciate your feedback.

    Missy
Comment from jmdg1954
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And your talent rose to the top with the challenge. Fiery, steamy and a clean erotic poem leaving much to ones imagination (a good thing).

Nicely done...
Happy Easter, John

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Oh, there you are, John...Very nice to see you again. You do know how to make a lady smile :)

    Always,
    Missy
    Happy Easter

Comment from tfawcus
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Opposites sure do attract and in this case, it seems, quite explosively. As your poem suggests, intensity of emotion can produce fireworks of all sorts. Love that burnt out ending!

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 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    T, thank you for coming by and leaving this lovely R&R :)

    Happy Easter
    Missy