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Above the law.89 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Roy,
A beautiful and very thoughtful poem about the season. I enjoyed it very much and wish you (only a LITTLE) luck in the contest -- 'cause I'm entered too! hahaha
JK~!
Favorite lines:
For love will walk that extra mile
love only wants to give;
it suffers long - resists all wrong,
concerned that you should live.
So when you think of love's great cost
and think, deserve your rights;
they're only based on self's great needs...
don't write them up in lights.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Roy,
A beautiful and very thoughtful poem about the season. I enjoyed it very much and wish you (only a LITTLE) luck in the contest -- 'cause I'm entered too! hahaha
JK~!
Favorite lines:
For love will walk that extra mile
love only wants to give;
it suffers long - resists all wrong,
concerned that you should live.
So when you think of love's great cost
and think, deserve your rights;
they're only based on self's great needs...
don't write them up in lights.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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No, I would be pleased if you won it, you deserve to dear girl! And thanks for the great review, happy Easter Robyn, blessings, Roy
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is, of course, perfect for the Easter poem contest, Roy. This is what Easter is all about, although many seem to have forgotten the point of it. It is a lovely one of Jesus' sacrifice for us. Excellent, my friend, perfect rhyme and easy rhythm. Good luck! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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This is, of course, perfect for the Easter poem contest, Roy. This is what Easter is all about, although many seem to have forgotten the point of it. It is a lovely one of Jesus' sacrifice for us. Excellent, my friend, perfect rhyme and easy rhythm. Good luck! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much Sandra, for this very kind review and great commentary, and happy Easter, blessings, Roy
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A beautiful Easter poem about the greatest sacrifice of all times--the death of our Savior for our sins, and to give us back a relationship with the Father. You also spoke of man's selfishness and how we believe we deserve more than we do. Also a good point was that God wants us to live, and that may seem something we all know, but there are those who think that because we die, God is just waiting for us on "the other side", and doesn't care whether we live. He does, and we need to remember that!
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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A beautiful Easter poem about the greatest sacrifice of all times--the death of our Savior for our sins, and to give us back a relationship with the Father. You also spoke of man's selfishness and how we believe we deserve more than we do. Also a good point was that God wants us to live, and that may seem something we all know, but there are those who think that because we die, God is just waiting for us on "the other side", and doesn't care whether we live. He does, and we need to remember that!
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much Rhonda, for this very kind review and great commentary, and happy Easter, blessings, Roy
Comment from Natalie Walker
This is a great poem about the true reason we celebrate Easter. I think the poem is flawless until the very last stanza. I'm not so sure about the ellipses at the end, but I also don't know what you would do to set that phrase apart, which I assume is why you went with the ellipses. Maybe just a comma?
Other than that, I have no suggestions. My favorite stanza is the second. Specifally, "placate that blow and turn the other cheek;" is a good line to remember. Is it Jesus telling us to turn the other cheek, or how he turned the other cheek to our sins and forgot them after they were redeemed on the cross?
This is a great poem.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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This is a great poem about the true reason we celebrate Easter. I think the poem is flawless until the very last stanza. I'm not so sure about the ellipses at the end, but I also don't know what you would do to set that phrase apart, which I assume is why you went with the ellipses. Maybe just a comma?
Other than that, I have no suggestions. My favorite stanza is the second. Specifally, "placate that blow and turn the other cheek;" is a good line to remember. Is it Jesus telling us to turn the other cheek, or how he turned the other cheek to our sins and forgot them after they were redeemed on the cross?
This is a great poem.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much Natalie, for this very kind review and great commentary, and happy Easter, blessings, Roy
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written thought provoking, philosophical poem. The following verse says it all:
So when you think of love's great cost
and think, deserve your rights;
they're only based on self's great needs...
don't write them up in lights.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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This is a very well written thought provoking, philosophical poem. The following verse says it all:
So when you think of love's great cost
and think, deserve your rights;
they're only based on self's great needs...
don't write them up in lights.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much Charlie, for this very kind review and great commentary, and happy Easter, blessings, Roy
Comment from BeasPeas
This is good advice, Roy:
"So when you think of love's great cost
and think, deserve your rights;
they're only based on self's great needs...
don't write them up in lights."
But, sometimes we write--which is a catharsis and therapy for us. Perhaps others who are struggling with the same problem may identify with our words and it helps them--makes them feel they are not alone. Your poem is excellent, flows and rhymes well, with great content. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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This is good advice, Roy:
"So when you think of love's great cost
and think, deserve your rights;
they're only based on self's great needs...
don't write them up in lights."
But, sometimes we write--which is a catharsis and therapy for us. Perhaps others who are struggling with the same problem may identify with our words and it helps them--makes them feel they are not alone. Your poem is excellent, flows and rhymes well, with great content. Marilyn
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much Marilyn, for this very kind review and great commentary, and happy Easter, blessings, Roy
Comment from Chris Walker
Nicely penned! Your piece has excellent rhyme and meter making the poem easy to read with no interruptions and wonderful flow. Beautiful message! Good luck in the contest. ~Chris
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Nicely penned! Your piece has excellent rhyme and meter making the poem easy to read with no interruptions and wonderful flow. Beautiful message! Good luck in the contest. ~Chris
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much Chris, for this very kind review and great commentary, and happy Easter, blessings, Roy
Comment from Pantygynt
Quatrains of iambic tetrameter lines alternating with iambic trimeter. Rhyme scheme abcb. The only break in the rhythm comes at the start of S2 which is a headless iamb. This trouble hair start is quite acceptable as a difference drawing attention to the importance of it being the words of Jerusalem.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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Quatrains of iambic tetrameter lines alternating with iambic trimeter. Rhyme scheme abcb. The only break in the rhythm comes at the start of S2 which is a headless iamb. This trouble hair start is quite acceptable as a difference drawing attention to the importance of it being the words of Jerusalem.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much Jim, for this very kind review and great commentary, and happy Easter, blessings, Roy
Comment from scongrove
This is beautiful Roy! :)
I'm honored to read such touching words this morning. Feeling a little down & it lifted my spirits. You're always my inspiration.
We all need to cherish what Jesus has done for us. He has given the most precious gift anyone could ever receive. I'm thankful knowing how much he loves us all. Thank you for sharing this.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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This is beautiful Roy! :)
I'm honored to read such touching words this morning. Feeling a little down & it lifted my spirits. You're always my inspiration.
We all need to cherish what Jesus has done for us. He has given the most precious gift anyone could ever receive. I'm thankful knowing how much he loves us all. Thank you for sharing this.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Thank you Shana for these lovely, gracious words enough to strengthen and give meaning to His sacrifice, happy Easter, blessings. Roy
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You're welcome! Happy Easter to you :)
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Dear Roy,
I so appreciate your wonderful poetry about our Lord. Yes he gave it all for us. We don't, nor ever will deserve it, but as the epitome of love, he willingly died for us. Then arose so that we can do the same and follow him to a 'mansion' he has prepared. What a wonderful and awesome God we serve.
Thank you for this lovely piece.
Love, Carolyn
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Dear Roy,
I so appreciate your wonderful poetry about our Lord. Yes he gave it all for us. We don't, nor ever will deserve it, but as the epitome of love, he willingly died for us. Then arose so that we can do the same and follow him to a 'mansion' he has prepared. What a wonderful and awesome God we serve.
Thank you for this lovely piece.
Love, Carolyn
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Thank you dear Caroline, I am indeed pleased that you enjoyed this piece, a tribute to that priceless gift Christ gave to us, happy Easter and blessing to you and Larry, R&E.
