Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi CD, a great effort in this challenge you have managed to write a good poem with a vey good thought process, and you covered different aspects of the topic also.
Brenda

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016

Thanks for the kind comments Brenda :) This is such a fun challenge - not just this week, but every week so far. Glad to see more are joining every week too!

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

Cool theme with this and damn, this is well written too. A smooth flow of meter and rhyme. Isn't this just amazing. Wow. Everyone nailed this too. I think you came in right after me. Too much fun AND a killer poem. mikey

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016

Thanks Mikey - yes, I thought I had it there, but you beat me by three lol

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I'd have given this one a six if the challenge rules allowed it. Perfect flow and cutting social comment - all in under 20 minutes! Your are a genius! I doubt that anyone will manage to trump this one!

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016

lol @ Trump!

Thanks for the wonderful review, Tony - I was floored by your effort :) This is turning out to be such a fun thing to get my Sunday mornings going!

All the best, Craig.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Haaaaa, Craig. I just had to have a big laugh about the line, I wish to God he'd just shut up. Couldn't have said it better myself.

You covered the range of grievances and asked some dynamite questions, and wow I am totally impressed.

Terrific entry indeed. :))

Gloria

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 Comment Written 19-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016

Yes, well, I see I took a much more "serious" line than the couple I've read so far. I need to remember "funny" for next time (watch the topic roll out as "terminal illness", or something!)

Thanks for the kind words, Gloria :)

reply by Gloria .... on 19-Mar-2016

I went on a serious note too, I guess people shouldn't ask me questions and then they won't get any serious from me.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

CD,

So far, your poem is the most expressive and cohesive to me. (But I don't know much about this type of poem - so you'll just have to take my 'lay' opinion on that!) *smile*

Congrats on a great finish! I thought Mikey was fastest - but now I don't know!

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 Comment Written 19-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016

Oh, that would be right, he beat me by a good half hour last time. I thought I was in with a chance at under 20 minutes lol

Thanks so much for the kind words, Robyn :)

Craig

reply by robyn corum on 19-Mar-2016

I think he posted in the forum at 6:16, so he only beat you by mere minutes - if we go by that!