Christine's Poems
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Comment from winnona
Very well written. I think you completed the challenge for this contest well. Your words flow line to line creating the message of the poem for the reader. All three parts tie in together well creating a well written poem.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2016
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Very well written. I think you completed the challenge for this contest well. Your words flow line to line creating the message of the poem for the reader. All three parts tie in together well creating a well written poem.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2016
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Hi Winnona, Many thanks for your lovely review and rating, I always try to do justice to these and appreciate your comments .Cheers to your
Comment from Liberty Justice
AWESOMELY beautiful. A true winner way port uses personification as if winter and autumn were people--examples: "winter
waits in line." Such vivid lovely descriptions. liberty justice
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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AWESOMELY beautiful. A true winner way port uses personification as if winter and autumn were people--examples: "winter
waits in line." Such vivid lovely descriptions. liberty justice
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Hi Liberty Justice. I am so grateful for your lovely review for my Haiku suite. I hope I have done justice to this contest requirement and you have reassured me of this Cheers to you for your support
Comment from mayflowerbg
Sorry, there is no concrete imagery in these short pieces and since no one has asked the authors to stick to 5-7-5 count (Write three haiku with each the syllable count of 17 or less) it's a pity that counting syllables seems to be the only thing which leads the author of this contest entry.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Sorry, there is no concrete imagery in these short pieces and since no one has asked the authors to stick to 5-7-5 count (Write three haiku with each the syllable count of 17 or less) it's a pity that counting syllables seems to be the only thing which leads the author of this contest entry.
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Unsure how to respond other than to say Thank you for taking your time to read and review my Haiku.
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5-7-5 is an urban myth for haiku in English. They don't count syllables in Japanese at all, and never have, but sounds. The word "haiku" itself has two syllables in English but THREE sounds in Japanese, and that's just the tip of the iceberg here.
Indeed, 5-7-5 is a violation of the Japanese form, not a preservation of it, because it makes a significantly longer poem, despite how widely all of us have been mistaught haiku in North American schoo
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Hi Maya, Yes thank you for this information I have been reviewing the writing of Haiku since your review and have learn't quite a lot over the past hour/ half. and I will be more mindful in the future. I have only followed what I thought to be the right format for writing a Haiku the 5-7-5 syllable count as I thought this was what is expected for these, however have since read many in my research and am beginning to understand the differences. I will attempt to take some lessons in writing a Haiku and would appreciate any help you can give
me. I have also looked you up only to discover you are a master Haiku writer and therefore an expert in this field. I really had no idea that I was on the wrong track and as with all my poetry and work I try hard to do justice to the writing style required and now realise I have a lot to learn. So I am glad for your review and do not take any offence at your rating as you gave it from you expertise in this style and this has now led me to look further into this. Ps Nice to meet you Cheers C
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Nice to meet you too (although I can't see who you are right now). So nice to have a reply from an author who doesn't count stars. You can look me up on FB if you have a profile there because I come here "once in a blue moon" but the scandal with the golden haiku contest and the article in the Washingtonian made me find a haiku contest here and comment.
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Thanks Maya for your reply and I will see if I can find the article your refer too and have a read. I do have a FB page also .And I will practice writing Haiku as you have spurrned me on to improve and get to know this style until I get them right. Cheers
Comment from mvbrooks
It's interesting how you have each season handing off to the next season --and yet, included all four seasons in just three stanzas. The "cycle" of seasons is very effective and the description appropriate for each step of the cycle.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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It's interesting how you have each season handing off to the next season --and yet, included all four seasons in just three stanzas. The "cycle" of seasons is very effective and the description appropriate for each step of the cycle.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Hi mybrooks, thanks for your great review and rating . You have picked up exactly what I intended. to start off with the end of Summer and incorporate the other seasons in a cyclic way. Many Cheers for your support
Comment from foxangie123
Title to count is perfect in my opinion. I learned with Haiku there is to be but one three liner. If the contest calls for more what can I do? What can I do when out of exceptional stars but give a five and and vote at contest time...
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Title to count is perfect in my opinion. I learned with Haiku there is to be but one three liner. If the contest calls for more what can I do? What can I do when out of exceptional stars but give a five and and vote at contest time...
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Hi fixangie123, So many thanks for your lovely support and great rating for my Haiku. always appreciated Cheers
Comment from Ben Colder
I can only hope for my fruit trees and other veg garden items, that winter does lose it's grip and sends not a killing frost. Best to you. I find no fault.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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I can only hope for my fruit trees and other veg garden items, that winter does lose it's grip and sends not a killing frost. Best to you. I find no fault.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Hi Ben , I had thought of incorporating a frost in this but couldn't get it right so no I hope the frosts don't get to your fruit trees, or veges they can be quite destructive and have lost a few natives from them. ( But the frosts always herald the Spring so Although cold I like this time of the year. Cheers for your time to read and review my Haiku.
Comment from William Ross
Nice a good haiku stack going through the seasons I see nothing wrong or that needs changing great job on this and good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Nice a good haiku stack going through the seasons I see nothing wrong or that needs changing great job on this and good luck.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Hi William. A big thank you for taking your times to read and review my Haiku and for such an encouraging review. much appreciated Cheer for a great day
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
The cycle of nature is the ticking clock for each new season another must die. Autumn sheds their last leaves to let winter be born when the time is right winter have to die to make space for spring.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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The cycle of nature is the ticking clock for each new season another must die. Autumn sheds their last leaves to let winter be born when the time is right winter have to die to make space for spring.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Hi Sandra, Yes this cycle goes on and on as our lives becomes shorter and shorter. Thanks for taking your time to read and review my Haiku. grateful Cheers
Comment from royowen
A Nice entry in this haiku suite, death in nature. Of course death is part of life in winter is a recovery time when things appear to be dead, like leafless trees, suddenly in spring are renewed, the cycle starts again, well done, great effort, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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A Nice entry in this haiku suite, death in nature. Of course death is part of life in winter is a recovery time when things appear to be dead, like leafless trees, suddenly in spring are renewed, the cycle starts again, well done, great effort, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Hi Roy, second time round I did a reply then the computer went mad LOL so here is my next one. I Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my Haiku and glad you thought it a good effort. Many Cheers to you my friend
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My pleasure
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
autumns extinction (needs apostrophe in autumn's)
Your haiku are well written. You have complied with all of the contest requirements. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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autumns extinction (needs apostrophe in autumn's)
Your haiku are well written. You have complied with all of the contest requirements. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Hi Debbie many thanks for reading my Haiku suite and for your lovely comments, and thanks for the tip I did wonder if autumn's needed one so Cheers for picking that up. Your friend in need LOL
