The Mailman and The Kitten
The kitten finds a guardian angel41 total reviews
Comment from Serendipity!
he stretches, and yawns (do you need to have a comma here?)
I like your lovely description and the topic is close to my heart.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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he stretches, and yawns (do you need to have a comma here?)
I like your lovely description and the topic is close to my heart.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you. I didn't think it needed a comma there, but some of the reviewers told me it did. What do you think? I can still edit the story.
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I have been inclined to put comma's in such places but think it is overdone. Ask an expert!
Comment from Kaydoe
What a compassionate story depicted as the mailman showed such kindness to a helpless critter. A well written story that held my interest and found it enjoyable.
I can see why this was recognized.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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What a compassionate story depicted as the mailman showed such kindness to a helpless critter. A well written story that held my interest and found it enjoyable.
I can see why this was recognized.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. I'm so gld you enjoyed the story. My brother was a kind person.
Comment from William Ross
What a great little story, read several on this prompt odd to see how its interpreted in so many ways. Great job and good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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What a great little story, read several on this prompt odd to see how its interpreted in so many ways. Great job and good luck.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. This story is true. My brother often rescued animals he found on his mail route. This kitten tickled him because it was such a calm and playful little guy.
Comment from Loumon
Some my look at the picture for the contest and think of it as dark and morbid.
You have actually made this into almost a fairy tale. Masterfully done.
Now on to the good deed, the way you describe the initial finding of the kitty and the antics along the way make this so heart felt . The ending actually brought tears to my eyes ( I'm an animal lover, with way too may rescues) the happy ending and how you brought it all together starting with magical and ending with that possibility.
Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Some my look at the picture for the contest and think of it as dark and morbid.
You have actually made this into almost a fairy tale. Masterfully done.
Now on to the good deed, the way you describe the initial finding of the kitty and the antics along the way make this so heart felt . The ending actually brought tears to my eyes ( I'm an animal lover, with way too may rescues) the happy ending and how you brought it all together starting with magical and ending with that possibility.
Well done!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. This is a true story. My brother often rescued animals he found along his mail route. He was a good kind man.
Comment from Bryana
Your story touched my heart. My sons and I were always
rescuing animals, pets and sometimes wild animals. When
you do this, it shows the kindness of your heart, if you help
an animal, you will also help human beings.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Have a nice weekend.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Your story touched my heart. My sons and I were always
rescuing animals, pets and sometimes wild animals. When
you do this, it shows the kindness of your heart, if you help
an animal, you will also help human beings.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Have a nice weekend.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. My brother had a kind heart. I have seven cats and all are rescue cats. Our dog is too.
Comment from humpwhistle
A nice heartwarming tale, built around the required visual.
I live at the edge of a wood, and I'm always feeding feral cats and
kittens.
I made a couple of notes as I read.
Best of luck with The Committee.
Peace, Lee
When the kitten wakes up he stretches and yawns before --this appears to be a tense change. Might be intentional, but I thought I'd ask.
I stick my hand out the window --again, this appears to be a shift in tense.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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A nice heartwarming tale, built around the required visual.
I live at the edge of a wood, and I'm always feeding feral cats and
kittens.
I made a couple of notes as I read.
Best of luck with The Committee.
Peace, Lee
When the kitten wakes up he stretches and yawns before --this appears to be a tense change. Might be intentional, but I thought I'd ask.
I stick my hand out the window --again, this appears to be a shift in tense.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. I just went back and edited the story. I found several spots where I changed tense.I hope I have corrected them all. Thanks for noticing.
Comment from Jacob Collins
I liked how you gave two portrayals of the woods in this piece. The picture you portrayed in your opening lines gave it a mystical feeling, a place of magic, perhaps. But then there was the discovery of the poor kitten and the realization that this poor creature had been dumped in the woods, and left to die. I'm sure there are many who would have left it to its fate but this postman fortunately, had a kind soul. I wonder if he would have reacted the same if he took the route the other postman take and came across the kitten on the street. The ending with the kitten being given to the little girl was a nice touch and a really nice end. I really enjoyed reading this piece, good luck in the contest...Jacob
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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I liked how you gave two portrayals of the woods in this piece. The picture you portrayed in your opening lines gave it a mystical feeling, a place of magic, perhaps. But then there was the discovery of the poor kitten and the realization that this poor creature had been dumped in the woods, and left to die. I'm sure there are many who would have left it to its fate but this postman fortunately, had a kind soul. I wonder if he would have reacted the same if he took the route the other postman take and came across the kitten on the street. The ending with the kitten being given to the little girl was a nice touch and a really nice end. I really enjoyed reading this piece, good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. I'm sure my brother would have picked a kitten up from the streets too; even if the road rage guys got mad.
Comment from c_lucas
Some pet owners get tired of their pets and take the easy way out. A deserted area is their choice. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Some pet owners get tired of their pets and take the easy way out. A deserted area is their choice. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. My brother was a kind soul, and nothing made his angrier then folks dumping animals. Well maybe one other thing; crazy drivers. LOL
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You're welcome, PBB. Charlie
Comment from jpduck
Thank you for writing this delightful account. I would expect it to have a very good chance in the contest -- good luck with it.
Adrian
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you for writing this delightful account. I would expect it to have a very good chance in the contest -- good luck with it.
Adrian
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. This is a true story that my brother told me. He said he often found cats along that stretch of road.
Comment from CD Richards
Or, as Douglas Adams once said - "Isn't the garden beautiful enough without needing fairies at the bottom of it?" I'd say the kitten had a stroke of good fortune in running into a decent human being - a rare thing, it sometimes seems.
This is a lovely story, and well written, with no SPAG issues that I could see. As you kind of point out, some may say the kitten was lucky, but in my view Emily was the lucky one.
A very lovely story, thank you for sharing.
Craig
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Or, as Douglas Adams once said - "Isn't the garden beautiful enough without needing fairies at the bottom of it?" I'd say the kitten had a stroke of good fortune in running into a decent human being - a rare thing, it sometimes seems.
This is a lovely story, and well written, with no SPAG issues that I could see. As you kind of point out, some may say the kitten was lucky, but in my view Emily was the lucky one.
A very lovely story, thank you for sharing.
Craig
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you. I appreciate the six stars; my brother deserves them for rescuing the kitten. He said he often saw cats dumped along that road.
