Little Poems
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Comment from Just2Write
Ah, so beautiful, and it is so nice to see a deviation from the standard Shakespearian Sonnet. I know you are well versed in the many different kinds, so I will just keep to enjoying the poem, and leave it at that.
Lovely presentation, and I really liked that you take time to check out the flowers on your walks. Hopefully, your wife did not suffer in the cold while she waited there for you.
Rose.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Ah, so beautiful, and it is so nice to see a deviation from the standard Shakespearian Sonnet. I know you are well versed in the many different kinds, so I will just keep to enjoying the poem, and leave it at that.
Lovely presentation, and I really liked that you take time to check out the flowers on your walks. Hopefully, your wife did not suffer in the cold while she waited there for you.
Rose.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you Rose. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from dragonpoet
The photo is as good as the poem. Beautiful flowers seen on the way to a beautiful wife. Maybe if you did stop to look at them but not on the way to the dock. Though if you did you could have picked some and given them to your wife as an explanation of your tardiness.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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The photo is as good as the poem. Beautiful flowers seen on the way to a beautiful wife. Maybe if you did stop to look at them but not on the way to the dock. Though if you did you could have picked some and given them to your wife as an explanation of your tardiness.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you dragon poet. Good ideas. Now why didn't I thing of that!
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You are very welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from Pantygynt
I'm sure you used this photo last year and you were asking what they were. I knew I'd seen them in garden centres here but was unsure of ther name. Now you have reminded me I remember well.
I am sure your devotion to duty earned you a few Brownie point. we won't argue whether walk and Dock are full or near rhymes. I know from whence you are coming.
It's a great form provided you have the vocabulary. Some words just wouldn't do.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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I'm sure you used this photo last year and you were asking what they were. I knew I'd seen them in garden centres here but was unsure of ther name. Now you have reminded me I remember well.
I am sure your devotion to duty earned you a few Brownie point. we won't argue whether walk and Dock are full or near rhymes. I know from whence you are coming.
It's a great form provided you have the vocabulary. Some words just wouldn't do.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes for sure. Ever notice how song lyrics are much more free with rhyme.
"Hello darkness my old friend, I've come to talk with you again."
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Absolutely and if you read some of Brett Matthew West's country lyrics they can be a lot further apart than that.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, Tom, your wonderful Spenserian Sonnet here notwithstanding, I believe we all get a little muddleheaded or mush-minded when we're engrossed in something we're writing, honing, and trying to perfect. It's due to the focus involved.
Aside from all of the technical mumbo jumbo as it pertains to poetry, I just know what I enjoy reading after I've read it. I could really care less about meter (just ask anyone about my own meter and they'll tell you much the same), iambs per foot, or any of that stuff. What I DO care about when I read a poem is did it touch me or move me in any way? Did the author's carefully strung-together words and phrases elicit an emotional response, or evoke fond memories? Your well composed Spenserian Sonnet did all of the above for me, and more!
Bravo...
~Dean
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Well, Tom, your wonderful Spenserian Sonnet here notwithstanding, I believe we all get a little muddleheaded or mush-minded when we're engrossed in something we're writing, honing, and trying to perfect. It's due to the focus involved.
Aside from all of the technical mumbo jumbo as it pertains to poetry, I just know what I enjoy reading after I've read it. I could really care less about meter (just ask anyone about my own meter and they'll tell you much the same), iambs per foot, or any of that stuff. What I DO care about when I read a poem is did it touch me or move me in any way? Did the author's carefully strung-together words and phrases elicit an emotional response, or evoke fond memories? Your well composed Spenserian Sonnet did all of the above for me, and more!
Bravo...
~Dean
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you Dean. Yes, you are right. The point is to be moved.
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It's always a pleasure, Tom. This did move me. It was sensational...
~Dean
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It's always a pleasure, Tom. This did move me. It was sensational...
~Dean
Comment from ciliverde
Oh no, the addlepated poet description sounds too familiar. I'll be tapping out the meter of a poem on the table, the hubby knows I'm not listening....
But how can we pass by a multicolored flower without a poetic lapse, or two? I know that you wanted to stay transfixed, a lot (!), but off to meet your bride instead. Good man! She's a lucky woman :)
Carol
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Oh no, the addlepated poet description sounds too familiar. I'll be tapping out the meter of a poem on the table, the hubby knows I'm not listening....
But how can we pass by a multicolored flower without a poetic lapse, or two? I know that you wanted to stay transfixed, a lot (!), but off to meet your bride instead. Good man! She's a lucky woman :)
Carol
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you Carol. Our spouse learn when they see that gaze and those fingers tapping, don't they.
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Lolol, yes they do :)
Comment from I am Cat
Hello Tom,
A lovely flower which would definitely distract me from walking, but then, everything does. LOL
it's lovely, reminds me (the leaves) of a geranium.
This is a gorgeous Spenserean Sonnet. I've not written one yet, but am currently taking Ray's (mountainwriter49) class, Sonnets 101, and I know they are on the list, so I know i'll be writing one soon, of course all the ones we've written won't be able to be made visible for a few weeks, once the class is over. ;)
It's interesting, our first class is Sunday night.
Anyway, your meter is good and the theme is well done...your volta comes along on the 9th line, the only thing I had a question about was the 'rhyme' of walk/dock
that must be an accent thing? In the south those really rhyme well. I take it they do up north? ;)
Other than that, well done, I really enjoyed both photo and verse.
Cat
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Hello Tom,
A lovely flower which would definitely distract me from walking, but then, everything does. LOL
it's lovely, reminds me (the leaves) of a geranium.
This is a gorgeous Spenserean Sonnet. I've not written one yet, but am currently taking Ray's (mountainwriter49) class, Sonnets 101, and I know they are on the list, so I know i'll be writing one soon, of course all the ones we've written won't be able to be made visible for a few weeks, once the class is over. ;)
It's interesting, our first class is Sunday night.
Anyway, your meter is good and the theme is well done...your volta comes along on the 9th line, the only thing I had a question about was the 'rhyme' of walk/dock
that must be an accent thing? In the south those really rhyme well. I take it they do up north? ;)
Other than that, well done, I really enjoyed both photo and verse.
Cat
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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They are very lovely flowers. What spectacular colors. It comes in blues, purples and pinks. In South Africa it's called Rag Wort, I think because of the leaves. Wow! A Sonnet class. Oh my girl, your coming over to the Dark side. Lol. Sometimes I will unabashedly go to some Near or slant rhyme. Up north here the sound is pretty close.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Beautiful photograph of these stunning flowers. I very much enjoyed the story in your sonnet, Treischel. I like your rhymes, meter, and the enjambment made the poem read so smooth.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Beautiful photograph of these stunning flowers. I very much enjoyed the story in your sonnet, Treischel. I like your rhymes, meter, and the enjambment made the poem read so smooth.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you Karyn. Those colors are stunning.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the Cinerarias both in your lovely photograph and in your Spenserian sonnet with a twist. I'm glad you have your priorities straight! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you for sharing the Cinerarias both in your lovely photograph and in your Spenserian sonnet with a twist. I'm glad you have your priorities straight! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Thank you Joan.i try.
Comment from robyn corum
What lovely flowers! It's rather unusual to find too many blue-colored flowers, so I'm glad you shared these with us! I love them! The photo is great and the sonnet is lovely! Thanks!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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What lovely flowers! It's rather unusual to find too many blue-colored flowers, so I'm glad you shared these with us! I love them! The photo is great and the sonnet is lovely! Thanks!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Thank you Robyn. They are usually available at a good flourish in the Spring and fall. They can also be grown from seeds.
Comment from Nottoway
I too become transfixed when I happen upon a beautiful growth of flowers whether in a pot, manicured garden or what is left of garden once tended.
Beautiful imagery and I love the twist. So wonderful to admire for a moment the new found beauty of the flower, but there is more beautiful flower that awaits that you hurry away to meet!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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I too become transfixed when I happen upon a beautiful growth of flowers whether in a pot, manicured garden or what is left of garden once tended.
Beautiful imagery and I love the twist. So wonderful to admire for a moment the new found beauty of the flower, but there is more beautiful flower that awaits that you hurry away to meet!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Thank you Nottoway. Yes, indeed. They both are gifts to be cherished. I appreciate the stars.
