Memories of the Good Old Days
A short talk56 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
Wonderful story. I love your description of the older woman. It was very visual, so much so, I could hear her distinct voice when I read her dialogue. Great moment to go back to those "boring" moments that bring such peace now. Gretchen
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Wonderful story. I love your description of the older woman. It was very visual, so much so, I could hear her distinct voice when I read her dialogue. Great moment to go back to those "boring" moments that bring such peace now. Gretchen
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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Gretchen, thank you for stopping over to read this short post. I certainly appreciate it. John
Comment from Annette Gulliver
It's funny how a sound can spark a memory from the past, and bring it back to life.
There's nothing better than laundry that has been hung in the sunshine and the wind. It smells so fresh. I only use my tumble dryer when it rains.
Thank you for sharing.
Annette
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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It's funny how a sound can spark a memory from the past, and bring it back to life.
There's nothing better than laundry that has been hung in the sunshine and the wind. It smells so fresh. I only use my tumble dryer when it rains.
Thank you for sharing.
Annette
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Annette, thank you for reading my post and sharing your thoughts. John
Comment from Douglas Paul
I like your story about revisiting your past. Isn't is amazing how such a simple thing, a simple sound, can trigger such deep memories
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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I like your story about revisiting your past. Isn't is amazing how such a simple thing, a simple sound, can trigger such deep memories
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Yup. I think about "how things were" a lot. Thanks for reading and sharing. John
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Ah yes, hanging out the laundry. We still do that. Don't have a tumble drier, and don't want one. The line is so much better. Mind you, I live in a small village where everyone still seems to do it!
A nice well written and nostalgic piece.
GMG
"My daughters house." - daughter's. (twice)
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Hi there,
Ah yes, hanging out the laundry. We still do that. Don't have a tumble drier, and don't want one. The line is so much better. Mind you, I live in a small village where everyone still seems to do it!
A nice well written and nostalgic piece.
GMG
"My daughters house." - daughter's. (twice)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Village?
Thanks GMG. I'll look at your comment.
Always good to hear from you. John
Comment from jpduck
I have thoroughly enjoyed other writing of yours. But I was disappointed by this, I'm afraid. The problem lies in your dialogue which, to me, feels very stilted. There is (or should be) a whole world of difference between the language of narrative and that of dialogue. For example, can you really imagine someone actually saying, 'She wanted us to head into each new day clean and fresh like the day itself. What better way then with clothes hung outside for all to see and cleansed by the light of the sun.' They would be much more likely to say something like 'She reckoned every day was new and different from all the others.'
Adrian
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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I have thoroughly enjoyed other writing of yours. But I was disappointed by this, I'm afraid. The problem lies in your dialogue which, to me, feels very stilted. There is (or should be) a whole world of difference between the language of narrative and that of dialogue. For example, can you really imagine someone actually saying, 'She wanted us to head into each new day clean and fresh like the day itself. What better way then with clothes hung outside for all to see and cleansed by the light of the sun.' They would be much more likely to say something like 'She reckoned every day was new and different from all the others.'
Adrian
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Adrian. Okay, I understand where you're coming from. I guess I started writing it philosophical in respects and not realistic.
Thanks for pointing that out. John
Comment from boxergirl
Hi John,
Thanks for the trip down memory lane. Love the dialogue between the two of you. Lots of wisdom lost in our hurry up gadget filled lives.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Hi John,
Thanks for the trip down memory lane. Love the dialogue between the two of you. Lots of wisdom lost in our hurry up gadget filled lives.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Karen, I'm glad you stopped by. Thanks for a great review. John
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Dear John,
Memories like that are worth keeping. The squeak of the cloths line, the sun washed days, and the visits in the yards; all apart of your well written story.
Nicely done, I really enjoyed it.
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Dear John,
Memories like that are worth keeping. The squeak of the cloths line, the sun washed days, and the visits in the yards; all apart of your well written story.
Nicely done, I really enjoyed it.
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 10-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016
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Carolyn, thank you so much and I'm glad you enjoyed it. John
Comment from Sasha
I enjoyed this immensely. My mother used a clothesline and here in Mexico no one owns a dryer, the days are too warm and hanging clothes in the sun is so much more logical. I hang mine in the laundry room and open the windows to let the heat inside. It works very well. This is a fun and enjoyable story about visiting the past. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2016
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I enjoyed this immensely. My mother used a clothesline and here in Mexico no one owns a dryer, the days are too warm and hanging clothes in the sun is so much more logical. I hang mine in the laundry room and open the windows to let the heat inside. It works very well. This is a fun and enjoyable story about visiting the past. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2016
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Thank you Valarie. Always John .
Comment from foxangie123
Bringing back sweet memories I find sometimes better than actually the times they happened. A great read hands down. Thank you. Lovely dear.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2016
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Bringing back sweet memories I find sometimes better than actually the times they happened. A great read hands down. Thank you. Lovely dear.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2016
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Oh, back to back!!!
Thank you! John
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Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, John.
How amazing that a sound brought back such strong memories of childhood. You showed well such a wonderful attitude the woman has toward life. Even in the midst of one of the hardest time, she sees every day with such a positive outlook.
I too remember the clotheslines that ran either with pullies or stood like opened umbrellas in most backyards. As you said so well, today, such a rare sight to see.
Great story.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2016
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Hi, John.
How amazing that a sound brought back such strong memories of childhood. You showed well such a wonderful attitude the woman has toward life. Even in the midst of one of the hardest time, she sees every day with such a positive outlook.
I too remember the clotheslines that ran either with pullies or stood like opened umbrellas in most backyards. As you said so well, today, such a rare sight to see.
Great story.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 10-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2016
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My mother used to hang clothes in the basement at times. Thank you Rosalyne for a great review.
John
