Goode Humour
Short Story18 total reviews
Comment from Liberty Justice
Hi Mikey! Just gave you thumbs up. I think you're on second place now. Your story us very interesting and entertaining the way conversations made about homeless people need to get a job and some don't have to live that way. Hope you win for story of the month. liberty justice
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi Mikey! Just gave you thumbs up. I think you're on second place now. Your story us very interesting and entertaining the way conversations made about homeless people need to get a job and some don't have to live that way. Hope you win for story of the month. liberty justice
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much, Liberty
One of those cases where it truly is an honor to be nominated. I'm so delighted you appreciated this story. With your vote and great review, I have won. Thanks a million, mikey
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WOW You jumped up
to 1s t place from 2nd place
with my thumbs up. I'm
so glad you hung on to
1s t place. CONGRATS!
Hopefully more writers will
participate in these events.
lol liberty justice. I hope
I win more.
Comment from Ima L. Ami
This is such a nice story. I'm not sure if it left me happy for Tish and the main character or sad for the way they found their happiness. It also made me think that war had affected the main character more than he realized. Would anyone really choose to leave a stable home/future to live on the streets if something hadn't changed their outlook on life? Great read and very thought provoking; thank you.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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This is such a nice story. I'm not sure if it left me happy for Tish and the main character or sad for the way they found their happiness. It also made me think that war had affected the main character more than he realized. Would anyone really choose to leave a stable home/future to live on the streets if something hadn't changed their outlook on life? Great read and very thought provoking; thank you.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi, Suzanne
Thanks so much for going back to read this one. I'm so pleased you enjoyed and found it thought provoking. Sometimes we write so many things we just forget about them. I was surprised to see this nominated. I forgot I wrote it. LOL mikey
Comment from c_lucas
Cupid does not do a credit check before he lets on of his arrows fly. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Cupid does not do a credit check before he lets on of his arrows fly. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Nope, that's certainly a blessing now that I think of it. Great point. Thanks so much. mikey
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You're welcome, Mikey. Charlie
Comment from I am Cat
Wow,
I really 'heard' this story.
you know? As in... it spoke to me... right out loud. In a voice.
Maybe it's time for me to go to bed.
weird, eh?
But it did. That's the biggest compliment I can give you I think...
is that this character is ALIVE.
Do you know what I mean?
Either that, or the psychosis is back. Hard to say. ;)
Hugs
well done Mikey.
truly
Cat
a Virtual one...
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Wow,
I really 'heard' this story.
you know? As in... it spoke to me... right out loud. In a voice.
Maybe it's time for me to go to bed.
weird, eh?
But it did. That's the biggest compliment I can give you I think...
is that this character is ALIVE.
Do you know what I mean?
Either that, or the psychosis is back. Hard to say. ;)
Hugs
well done Mikey.
truly
Cat
a Virtual one...
Comment Written 08-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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I appreciate your response quite a bit. I'm apprehensive when I write without bells and whistles i.e. humour or craziness. I'm not quite secure writing normal stuff and having it compared to other normal stuff if you know what I mean. :))
So, yes, thank you very much. mikey
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I think there are four things you write VERY well... (hell there are probably lots more)
Love/romance
crazy/other's perception of...
humor/sarcasm
'real'
that's why I love your work.
hell... that's just why I get it.
what's 'crazy'? just a more raw state of normal, I guess.
well done.
Comment from Gloria ....
Brilliant how you introduced the difference between dialect and vernacular. That was a very comedic touch, which I'm sure the tourists did appreciate. You don't want to locals to be all up in heah with their Ivy League language now do ya?
Haaaaa yes go to Walmart and be a greeter, oh and don't take a bath either because the filth just adds to the cache. Love it!
How tragic it is veterans who have been forced to suffer this further denigration. Grrrrr.
Oh boy nice switch back and forth between righteous anger to Bart Simpson Seymour Butts humour.
Yes I tend to agree with you that Leticia is a fine, fine poet. She's authentic and addresses the environment within which she finds herself and the tin bucket.
Very fascinating vignette, Mikey. The things that we won't do for true love.
Exceptional job with this, I got a few laughs and a few sober moments too!
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Brilliant how you introduced the difference between dialect and vernacular. That was a very comedic touch, which I'm sure the tourists did appreciate. You don't want to locals to be all up in heah with their Ivy League language now do ya?
Haaaaa yes go to Walmart and be a greeter, oh and don't take a bath either because the filth just adds to the cache. Love it!
How tragic it is veterans who have been forced to suffer this further denigration. Grrrrr.
Oh boy nice switch back and forth between righteous anger to Bart Simpson Seymour Butts humour.
Yes I tend to agree with you that Leticia is a fine, fine poet. She's authentic and addresses the environment within which she finds herself and the tin bucket.
Very fascinating vignette, Mikey. The things that we won't do for true love.
Exceptional job with this, I got a few laughs and a few sober moments too!
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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You hit on everything I was trying to do. So, needless to say, I'm delighted with your response. I have to force myself to write straight prose like this and I think I'm just afraid I can't do it well. So, I appreciate the encouragement from one of the best, in my opinion, prose writers I know. A six too. You are entirely too generous. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from TheWriteTeach
This is a serious piece told through the eyes of a homeless man, rather than a news reporter. Humour Simon Goode makes it very clear he chose this life. He turned his back on his wife and children. He found another love in the homeless alley, but then his thoughts stray from the alley to the life he left behind. He tells us he makes regular stops to see his house in the burbs; his wife and kids are still there. But his meanderings don't stop there. He tells us he is (not used to be, or was, but IS) an insurance salesman, and he is going to check on his license tomorrow to make sure it hasn't run out. Is he trying to convince the reader he has a life outside the alley any time he wants to return, and the only thing keeping him in the alley is his love, Trish? I think he likes the alley and is content there but to save face, he is boastful of his old life. Kind of like, "I can quit any time I want; I just don't want to at the moment." This is very well written Mikey. I think I'll study it some more and see what else I can unearth in Humour's musings.
Suzanne
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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This is a serious piece told through the eyes of a homeless man, rather than a news reporter. Humour Simon Goode makes it very clear he chose this life. He turned his back on his wife and children. He found another love in the homeless alley, but then his thoughts stray from the alley to the life he left behind. He tells us he makes regular stops to see his house in the burbs; his wife and kids are still there. But his meanderings don't stop there. He tells us he is (not used to be, or was, but IS) an insurance salesman, and he is going to check on his license tomorrow to make sure it hasn't run out. Is he trying to convince the reader he has a life outside the alley any time he wants to return, and the only thing keeping him in the alley is his love, Trish? I think he likes the alley and is content there but to save face, he is boastful of his old life. Kind of like, "I can quit any time I want; I just don't want to at the moment." This is very well written Mikey. I think I'll study it some more and see what else I can unearth in Humour's musings.
Suzanne
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Hi, Suzanne
What a wonderful response and review. I do try and write some straight forward serious prose in between my more experimental offerings. :))
I'm thrilled you found this to your liking. I'm delighted you've touched on so many points I was trying to get across. Thanks so much for the great insights and the extremely generous rating. mikey
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
Great work, really bringing in your reader into the actuality of homelessness. We often don't think in terms of a couple on the streets, usually we expect those who seek isolation within a relationship with themselves or drugs and/or booze. Of course many are mentally ill, and not necessarily addictive. What a cruel way to live.
One wonders at his choice. He left because his wife didn't love him? Perhaps this fellow's problem is the effect of fighting a war. He suppresses his rage and only feels from time to time when he discovers a fellow Veteran on the streets. PTSD ... all the rest that comes with the package of returning from fighting for one's country and the lack of resource and care for the people they return as.
Your short story is poignant, yet Goode has learned to live and accept his destiny ... he has his gal, and she writes poetry, he is almost matter-of-fact about it all ... his claim ... he made his choice to be where he is. Seems Trish has a protector and someone to love her. It makes me wonder if relationships this strong do build out there in a cruel world when just surviving day to day seems to be the rule.
Not sure about Pop's decision on naming his son ... then that's another story I guess. Well done in getting the message 'out there' in a unique way ... from the inside out so to speak. You have a talent at making everything entertaining and interesting, while giving your message ... this one a triumph. Well done my friend. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Hi Mikey
Great work, really bringing in your reader into the actuality of homelessness. We often don't think in terms of a couple on the streets, usually we expect those who seek isolation within a relationship with themselves or drugs and/or booze. Of course many are mentally ill, and not necessarily addictive. What a cruel way to live.
One wonders at his choice. He left because his wife didn't love him? Perhaps this fellow's problem is the effect of fighting a war. He suppresses his rage and only feels from time to time when he discovers a fellow Veteran on the streets. PTSD ... all the rest that comes with the package of returning from fighting for one's country and the lack of resource and care for the people they return as.
Your short story is poignant, yet Goode has learned to live and accept his destiny ... he has his gal, and she writes poetry, he is almost matter-of-fact about it all ... his claim ... he made his choice to be where he is. Seems Trish has a protector and someone to love her. It makes me wonder if relationships this strong do build out there in a cruel world when just surviving day to day seems to be the rule.
Not sure about Pop's decision on naming his son ... then that's another story I guess. Well done in getting the message 'out there' in a unique way ... from the inside out so to speak. You have a talent at making everything entertaining and interesting, while giving your message ... this one a triumph. Well done my friend. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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I'm just beside myself delighted with your response, Lovi. WHOOOO HOOOOO! Your speculations are exactly what I would dream would come from this. It tells me I've done what I set out to do. I'm not nearly as confident with prose as I am with poetry especially straight forward stuff like this. So I'm over the moon and so encouraged by your response. Thanks so very much, mikey
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Hi Mikey dearest
I do agree, this straight-forward approach is challenging, I've always found you to do it well, also your essays in personal form such as this. I think so much of your creative work is special, however, I seem to be most connected to your social commentary or personal philosophy or self/society-questioning writing. Though this is what I mostly read, sometimes I can't keep up with longer works such as chapters to a novel and get frustrated when I fall behind and lose touch with the work... I never seem to make it to the end of the book. :(
I'm thrilled my review has been encouraging and I appreciate your wit and talent very much. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
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You're too sweet. Thanks again. I'll try more of this. :)) mikey
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
this deserved a second read to get the pieces i missed on the first round.
I did not know till lately that you wrote pieces...not just poetry and the humor you have is excellent and i just love the stories you write. wow more to love about you
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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this deserved a second read to get the pieces i missed on the first round.
I did not know till lately that you wrote pieces...not just poetry and the humor you have is excellent and i just love the stories you write. wow more to love about you
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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I won the twist contest back in the day too. Yep, many layers and nuances. Oh, and I'm shrinking. Two inches already. It makes my hands look even bigger. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from joann r romei
This is very interesting, and who ever thinks it's easy fro someone to just pick up the pieces from a broken life to go find a job is an idiot who never had experience with devestation, Hope to hear more true to life tales soon.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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This is very interesting, and who ever thinks it's easy fro someone to just pick up the pieces from a broken life to go find a job is an idiot who never had experience with devestation, Hope to hear more true to life tales soon.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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You've hit the nail right on the head. It is always those who've never gone through ANYTHING that have easy answers. Nothing is easy. When life gets broken it's no easy fix and nothing ever wrks like new again. Thanks so much for a wonderful candid response. mikey
Comment from Sasha
This is beyond awesome. I just love your humor and honesty. Yeah, the homeless chose to live in squalor, if given the chance everyone would. Absolutely great work with this, as always and deserving a 6 stars. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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This is beyond awesome. I just love your humor and honesty. Yeah, the homeless chose to live in squalor, if given the chance everyone would. Absolutely great work with this, as always and deserving a 6 stars. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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I'm delighted you liked this piece. You're the tops here in my opinion so a six from you is the highest reward. Thanks a million. mikey
