Little Poems
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Comment from Green Lake Girl
Oh, I remember that famous game! Standing breathless in front of the TV. It seemed to me there was so much more at stake than the game. The metaphorical clash between communism and democracy.
Your poem's format does a very good job depicting the feeling of that game. I enjoyed this very much, Tom!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Oh, I remember that famous game! Standing breathless in front of the TV. It seemed to me there was so much more at stake than the game. The metaphorical clash between communism and democracy.
Your poem's format does a very good job depicting the feeling of that game. I enjoyed this very much, Tom!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Thank you, I was one of those moments to remember.
Comment from Just2Write
Things have a way of becoming something that was never intended. I keep a log of forms that are new to me, and the Paradelle certainly is one of those. I looked it up, and found the following in Wikipedia:
"A Paradelle is a modern poetic form which was invented by United States Poet Laureate Billy Collins as a parody of the villanelle. Billy Collins originally said the paradelle was invented in eleventh century France, but he later admitted that he invented it himself to parody strict forms of poetry, particularly the villanelle. His sample paradelle, "Paradelle for Susan" (c1997), was seemingly intentionally terrible."
No matter - a new form was born. It does look tough, but you did admirably well with it. And CONGRATULATIONS on your team's WIN.
Rose.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Things have a way of becoming something that was never intended. I keep a log of forms that are new to me, and the Paradelle certainly is one of those. I looked it up, and found the following in Wikipedia:
"A Paradelle is a modern poetic form which was invented by United States Poet Laureate Billy Collins as a parody of the villanelle. Billy Collins originally said the paradelle was invented in eleventh century France, but he later admitted that he invented it himself to parody strict forms of poetry, particularly the villanelle. His sample paradelle, "Paradelle for Susan" (c1997), was seemingly intentionally terrible."
No matter - a new form was born. It does look tough, but you did admirably well with it. And CONGRATULATIONS on your team's WIN.
Rose.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you Rose. I appreciate your added information. I just took Sunnilicious' word for it. I'll have to add another footnote.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Don't know if I like this format either, but I agree the repetition is good for this amazing event. I remember watching that game like it was yesterday... the USA team of amateurs against the teams of professional skaters. What jo we all felt when the miracle did come true. Great poem and thanks for making me remember the thrill of their win again.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Don't know if I like this format either, but I agree the repetition is good for this amazing event. I remember watching that game like it was yesterday... the USA team of amateurs against the teams of professional skaters. What jo we all felt when the miracle did come true. Great poem and thanks for making me remember the thrill of their win again.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Thyank you Karyn. Any time.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
This is definitely a "where were you when"...moments. My husband and I were expecting our first child and watching on a television in a supermarket as we shopped. Time stood still during those last few moments. I knew what you were writing of from the first line without even reading your description. Great job in organizing the flow and restrictions required for a Paradelle structure.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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This is definitely a "where were you when"...moments. My husband and I were expecting our first child and watching on a television in a supermarket as we shopped. Time stood still during those last few moments. I knew what you were writing of from the first line without even reading your description. Great job in organizing the flow and restrictions required for a Paradelle structure.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Thank you Mary, for the wonderful review, and for sharing the memory.
Comment from William Ross
It's good and worked out very well for what you were after. It's shows the pride in the US team in defeating the Russians. great job ad thanks for sharing have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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It's good and worked out very well for what you were after. It's shows the pride in the US team in defeating the Russians. great job ad thanks for sharing have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Thank you William.
Comment from Pantygynt
This repetitive form is absolutely ideal for conveying the euphoria of a big win, especially one as unexpected as this. I can't help but see a certain jingoism creeping in here as well which is perhaps understandable under the circumstances. Once again your extensive knowledge has enabled you to match form to content and indeed to subject, reflecting the joy expressed in the statue's pose.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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This repetitive form is absolutely ideal for conveying the euphoria of a big win, especially one as unexpected as this. I can't help but see a certain jingoism creeping in here as well which is perhaps understandable under the circumstances. Once again your extensive knowledge has enabled you to match form to content and indeed to subject, reflecting the joy expressed in the statue's pose.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Stank you Pantygynt, then I achieved my objective.
Comment from tfawcus
I think I shall just call it a jubilation! Anyway, I've put the instructions to one side to satisfy one of my more masochistic moments! You rather remind me of the newspaper report, when the American ambassador was challenged to a race by the Russian ambassador. The American press wrote it up as, "The US Ambassador won and the Russian ambassador came second." Pravda reported it as, "The Russian ambassador came second and the US ambassador came second to last."
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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I think I shall just call it a jubilation! Anyway, I've put the instructions to one side to satisfy one of my more masochistic moments! You rather remind me of the newspaper report, when the American ambassador was challenged to a race by the Russian ambassador. The American press wrote it up as, "The US Ambassador won and the Russian ambassador came second." Pravda reported it as, "The Russian ambassador came second and the US ambassador came second to last."
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Thank you tony. Hah, that is a good recollection.
Comment from I am Cat
Hi Tom,
WEll, I'm sure you wrote it to form, but I can't say that I like the form at all.
It's quite repetitious... and I'm not a fan of so much of that... for me, it takes away from the poetic value of the poetry. But hey, it's exalting, right? lol
and good for the Americans winning... you're right, this guy looks like he's thrilled. lol
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Hi Tom,
WEll, I'm sure you wrote it to form, but I can't say that I like the form at all.
It's quite repetitious... and I'm not a fan of so much of that... for me, it takes away from the poetic value of the poetry. But hey, it's exalting, right? lol
and good for the Americans winning... you're right, this guy looks like he's thrilled. lol
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Thank you Cat. Yup, I'm not a big fan of the format either. But, if you want to beat a victory celebration to death, this is the form for it.
Comment from NicciFaye
TREISCHEL I totally agree with you that this format goes well with this statue. As well as your authors notes provide an excellent description about the history of this statue. You did an excellent job and portraying the excitement and victory of Herb Brooks.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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TREISCHEL I totally agree with you that this format goes well with this statue. As well as your authors notes provide an excellent description about the history of this statue. You did an excellent job and portraying the excitement and victory of Herb Brooks.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Thank you Nicci. I am elated that you liked it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great feeling of victory and happiness in this poem. The statue surely portray the feeling of victorious and he screams hooray!
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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A great feeling of victory and happiness in this poem. The statue surely portray the feeling of victorious and he screams hooray!
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Thank you Sandra. It does get infectious.
