Yucking Up the Boudoir
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Comment from country ranch writer
AS CORNY AS THIS IS IT IS FUNNY TO A POINT AND GIVING A GUY A KNOB JOB IS WHAT THEY THINK SEX IS ABOUT SO IF THERE IS NO PLEASURE FOR THE BOTH OF YOU. YOU ARE SOL HEHE
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016
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AS CORNY AS THIS IS IT IS FUNNY TO A POINT AND GIVING A GUY A KNOB JOB IS WHAT THEY THINK SEX IS ABOUT SO IF THERE IS NO PLEASURE FOR THE BOTH OF YOU. YOU ARE SOL HEHE
Comment Written 02-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016
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You are one hundred percent correct. HAHAHA. YOu always are. :))
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LOL
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MY HUBBY WENT TO THE DOC TODAY THEY ARE GOING TO PUT HIM BACK ON THE IV FOR THE NEXT FOURTEEN DAYS AS HIS THIGH IS INFECTED WHERE THEY DID THE FEM-POP SURGERY. tHEY CAN'T STOP THE MRSA SO THEY MIGHT HAVE TO GO BACK IN AND DO A RE-DO ON IT TOO
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Jeez. My friend has the same damn thing. It's a rough hombre. You'll both be in my prayers. Hang in there. What a world. mikey
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I WISH YOUR FRIEND THE BEST. IT IS A HORRIBLE THING TO HAVE HAPPEN TO ANYONE AND THERE ISN'T A DAN THING WE CAN DO ABOUT IT
Comment from Jay Squires
You have an uncanny wit (would that be a can'ty wit?--see, I can't even bring it off parenthetically) Mikey. This is obviously, and effectively, off the top of your head. Unfortunately, in that regard, the editing shouldn't be so spontaneous. You committed more nits than I'm used to from you. I have a hunch you didn't edit at all.
Here are my concerns. I didn't doc you a star for it since it's been so long since I downloaded this and you may have already corrected the nits I point out.
Adding a little humour in the bedroom [Unless you are being in character for a Brit in your story, why would an ol' boy from Lancaster write "humour" instead of "humor?" I'm not finished yet, but I found 3 instances on page one.]
too many endorphines flooding the system. [... too many ENDORPHINS]
my little comic precurser to oral sex [...comic PRECURSOR to ...]
especially considering it occurred to my right off the top of my head. [...it occurred to ME ...]
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016
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You have an uncanny wit (would that be a can'ty wit?--see, I can't even bring it off parenthetically) Mikey. This is obviously, and effectively, off the top of your head. Unfortunately, in that regard, the editing shouldn't be so spontaneous. You committed more nits than I'm used to from you. I have a hunch you didn't edit at all.
Here are my concerns. I didn't doc you a star for it since it's been so long since I downloaded this and you may have already corrected the nits I point out.
Adding a little humour in the bedroom [Unless you are being in character for a Brit in your story, why would an ol' boy from Lancaster write "humour" instead of "humor?" I'm not finished yet, but I found 3 instances on page one.]
too many endorphines flooding the system. [... too many ENDORPHINS]
my little comic precurser to oral sex [...comic PRECURSOR to ...]
especially considering it occurred to my right off the top of my head. [...it occurred to ME ...]
Comment Written 02-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2016
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I fixed the my to me already. :)) I've taken to the British Empire spelling or humour, rumour etc. 'cause I like the way it looks and as a tribute to my buddies from there. HAHAHA! I'll fix those other two. Spell check didn't even highlight them, that traitor! No "thats" though. Th ... It's a good thing, yes? I've been away from prose and need to get back into the editing routine. I promise to do so. Thanks for the help. mikey
Comment from Realist101
LOL! It's better to have a good memory like this, than a bad one. I thought this funny and just one nit. In your fourth para change 'my' to (me)? Fun read Mikey! Keep your sense of humor. It's valuable! :)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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LOL! It's better to have a good memory like this, than a bad one. I thought this funny and just one nit. In your fourth para change 'my' to (me)? Fun read Mikey! Keep your sense of humor. It's valuable! :)
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Fixed. Thanks a million. I've found as I've gotten older and lost my looks that a personality had to be developed. Humour seems to come in handy. Laughing with them seems popular with the ladies too. Ha! Glad you enjoyed this. What a relief. :)) mikey
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Just wait until you're 61. :(((( God...
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I'm 64, but don't tell anybody. I can get away with 50. HAHAHA!!!! I think I'm just going to fall apart completely all at once. So far, God has ignored me. :))
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You are NOT older than me. I won't believe it.
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January 19, 1952.
I'm very immature and never grew up in any way. HAHAHA. I'm older than EVERYBODY! But, I can still climb trees ... well, until it kills me. :))
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You are NOT older than me. I won't believe it.
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Just wait until you're 61. :(((( God...
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LMAO
good job Mike
*gypsy hugs*
check this out----it occurred to [ my ] right off the top of my head.--(me)
------"tacking pillows to elevate her baby making machinery and then getting my worthless self lost----- LOl priceless!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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LMAO
good job Mike
*gypsy hugs*
check this out----it occurred to [ my ] right off the top of my head.--(me)
------"tacking pillows to elevate her baby making machinery and then getting my worthless self lost----- LOl priceless!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Gypsy Queen of Haiku and Creator of L.A. Comedians,
Wow. I"m thrilled you liked this. I wasn't sure if anyone would find this funny or not. Humour is a funny thing. I'm funny to the people I hang around with, but that doesn't always translate to the rest of earth. I've had my private parts laughed at. Of course it was hysterical laughter, a joyous release of ecstasy at what was to come ... to come. hahahaha!!!! Mike is what most call me, Michael is when I'm in trouble or "Uh oh, she's fallen in love with me!" Mikey indeed ate everything, or tried to. I think that's what got him killed.
You really made my night. I'm just going to read this over and over and pretend I'm the toast of the town.
Thanks a billion. (((((((IRISH HUGS, and SOMETHING ELSE))))))) mikey
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I totally get your humor and I look forward getting your reviews, they always make me laugh and make me feel good about my writing. You are a great writer and one of the funniest person I know. That's a gift, a talent. Don't let anyone tell you otherwise. Reviewers are mostly nice writers, like us, but there also some real pricks out in FS land.
I thought I was the only one that read good reviews over and over and over... LOL no shame in that. We have to grab our joy wherever we can find it. Right?
You are an awesome person and I am grateful to Cat and Gloria who told me about your bday and what an awesome person you are, I would have never met you otherwise. Isn't life something?
What happened to mikey?
Thank you for my Irish Hugs, etc... LOL I love those Irish hugs.
*gypsy hugs*
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You're an awesome person yourself, Gypsy and I'm delighted I've met you here. Yeah, there's some idiots here, but us cool kids hang together and we wipe them out when we have to. Thanks so much for the kind words. They warm me greatly and mean the world. Irish hugs, mikey
Comment from Gloria ....
What one-eyed dragon? What little man in the boat?! How are we supposed to go down there and save him? Haaaaaaa. Very amusing story Mikey.
I'm surprised she wasn't right in there with the silly string and strap on just having a blast with you. Clearly she had no sense of decorum OR humour. Not having neither makes her no good for you. You're lucky you got out of there alive.
Haaaaaa. Got a big charge out of the baby making sequence, especially her cries of orgasmic ecstasy. Those sounds like the words all men want to hear while pleasuring their woman. Chicca bow wow!
Very fun chapter Mikey even though I'm still wondering about the dragon. ;-)
Great job.
One wee nit:
bring peels (peals) of orgasmic yucks.
I'm still laughing over here. I hope that was the intended response. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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What one-eyed dragon? What little man in the boat?! How are we supposed to go down there and save him? Haaaaaaa. Very amusing story Mikey.
I'm surprised she wasn't right in there with the silly string and strap on just having a blast with you. Clearly she had no sense of decorum OR humour. Not having neither makes her no good for you. You're lucky you got out of there alive.
Haaaaaa. Got a big charge out of the baby making sequence, especially her cries of orgasmic ecstasy. Those sounds like the words all men want to hear while pleasuring their woman. Chicca bow wow!
Very fun chapter Mikey even though I'm still wondering about the dragon. ;-)
Great job.
One wee nit:
bring peels (peals) of orgasmic yucks.
I'm still laughing over here. I hope that was the intended response. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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I did have to stop by the emergency room, but the nurse was a doll. Or ... maybe that was a mannequin at Macys, I forget.
I usually get HUGE laughs during sex, I mean they're rolling on the floor, pointing and howling. So, I don't know what her problem was.
Baby making is the best. Performing on command is every man's dream. Funny how some men can't do that.
Yes, laughter was the idea and I was worried I wouldn't get any. Laughter that is, well, I am worried I won't ...
Anyway. The one-eyed dragon is a good thing. mikey
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mikey
= LOL! LOL! LOL!
= One can't possibly top that.
= Wouldn't want to put a kink in the bowchickbowbow!
* Cheers & Blessings *
Keep Smilin'... Jackie <> Jax (*<*)
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Hi, Mikey
= LOL! LOL! LOL!
= One can't possibly top that.
= Wouldn't want to put a kink in the bowchickbowbow!
* Cheers & Blessings *
Keep Smilin'... Jackie <> Jax (*<*)
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Oh YAY, how cool. I'm so thrilled you found it funny. Whoo HOOOO. Thanks a million. I was hoping it would get a few laughs. mikey
Comment from DonandVicki
Hey Mike, If they can't take a fuck then joke em' Sometimes it's better if they leave than to suffer the teeth marks of the She dragoon.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Hey Mike, If they can't take a fuck then joke em' Sometimes it's better if they leave than to suffer the teeth marks of the She dragoon.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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I've heard of the She Dragon. A few marks I can handle, I wouldn't want to overly anger her though. :)) mikey
