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Senryu Provocations

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Reflection on human behavior

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Comment from Sasha
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You certainly got me laughing out loud with this one. I am, sadly, at the age where this has become a daily subject at morning coffee...no wonder I have lost my appetite. I just love the illustration you used for this...just as funny as the senryu.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
    Thanks, Sasha. Laughter is the best medicine. Hope it took the pain away for a few minutes or more. :-)
Comment from Bryana
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Very funny picture, that poor guy was probably eating
the forbidden fruit!
Perfect senryu the right number of syllables and lines
and the picture makes it perfect. It made me laugh.

This should've been in a contest.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
    I don't get enough reviews in blind contests, so I prefer to advertise and hopefully get more laughs. :-)
Comment from judiverse
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Yes, indeed. This a popular topic of concern for the elderly. (I must be different; I'm more worried about the next election.) Whatever the consistency of the stool, it seems to matter a great deal to seniors. As your last line indicates, "all matter in the end." They simply get flushed away, regardless of consistency. Bless their hearts. The probably spend a lot of money trying to rectify the problem. judi

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
    rectify LOL. Good choice of verb. :-)
reply by judiverse on 19-Feb-2016
    I thought you'd get it. judi
Comment from robyn corum
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This - I have to say - sounds like a poem that would be written by Spitfire. Hahahahaha. It's very clever, yet just a BIT tongue-in-cheek - though I hesitate to use THOSE words with THIS piece. Very funny. I enjoyed!

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
    Oh dear, now I'll never put my tongue in cheek even when imitating Monica Lewinsky. :-)
reply by robyn corum on 19-Feb-2016
    hahahaha
Comment from boxergirl
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hahaha...Shari, definitely an octogenarian topic...lol...a great senryu for AARP magazine. I have sat and pondered awhile myself...definitely relate yo the picture. Not sure I will ever look at hotdogs the same. 8-)

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
    I suspect AARP stays away from anything that reminds people they're old. :-) Sorry I spoiled your appetite for dogs.
reply by boxergirl on 19-Feb-2016
    no worry...have to watch my cholesterol. :-)
Comment from Muffins
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The image birth from the wording is more disturbing then the photo accompanying the poem!

The syllable count is on point, but the subject matter makes me giggle and gag simultaneously. What a them to choice. Your stepping in it :)

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
    Giggle and gag-- that's a good response. LOL
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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All I could say at the end was gross but I know people who would sit around and talk about their poop so I can't say gross too loud. You did a great job and I hope you get your problem taken care of...but at least you got a good poem out of it. Great job

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
    Not my problem, well maybe a little. Conversation topics do get grossly personal after fifty years of marriage!
Comment from Gloria ....
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LMAO, you always crack me up with your senryu Shari. One could indeed sit on the throne for a very long time to get any movement.

LMAO all matter in the end. It is so true, we really don't know they put in hotdogs do we?

Oh boy, this is hilarious:))

Gloria

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
    My inspiration for the second line is hubby's description of his bowel's length and width. Ugh. TMI!!!
Comment from I am Cat
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oh oh oh oh oh... oh my.
I saw your name... I expected something...
then I saw the title, and I just smiled... of course...
then... the artwork. perfect! LOL
oh but on a Thursday when I'm so bad at saving my sixes, damn
I so rarely given them for so little words, but I gotta tell you...
you had me just sitting here shaking my head...
you continually crack me up (pun intended) well done Shari...
you're amazing. LOL
A virtuoso of Tidy bowl men, coming your way!
;)
Cat

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
    Hey, the humor review is better than a six. Thanks so much.
Comment from Rosalyne
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Hi, Shari.
Funny post! You are a master of these, not an easy style of writing. The middle line is priceless. You've chosen a picture that's a perfect fit.
Bye
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
    Isn't that picture a scream (pun intended).
    Hugs,
    Shari