The Swamp
The beauty of this was awesome.20 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
We called him Mossy Moses...-------Hahaha! That's a g-r-r-r-r-r-r-e-a-t name for a turtle, especially an old snapper, LOL. In fact, this entire sense of place story was great, and it certainly placed me there among the tall, towering cypresses and golden watercress.
Thanks for taking me along with you on this adventure. I ad a fantastic time...
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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We called him Mossy Moses...-------Hahaha! That's a g-r-r-r-r-r-r-e-a-t name for a turtle, especially an old snapper, LOL. In fact, this entire sense of place story was great, and it certainly placed me there among the tall, towering cypresses and golden watercress.
Thanks for taking me along with you on this adventure. I ad a fantastic time...
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 20-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thanks. I love the picture you sent me and am glad you enjoyed the story. Probably old Mossy is dead as they destroyed his home.
Comment from Jeffers63
thanks for this nice tale of your childhood memories and the swamp, I liked the imagery and I cared about Mossy Moss. It is a sad reality that often the place we remember the best has been taken away by development.
Regards
Jeffers63
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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thanks for this nice tale of your childhood memories and the swamp, I liked the imagery and I cared about Mossy Moss. It is a sad reality that often the place we remember the best has been taken away by development.
Regards
Jeffers63
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thanks. It is sad that so many lovely places have to be destroyed for progress.
Comment from Judy Couch
Your description allowed me to imagine what it must have been like. The price of civilization is sometimes too high. Places like that need to be preserved.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Your description allowed me to imagine what it must have been like. The price of civilization is sometimes too high. Places like that need to be preserved.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thanks. It was a beautiful place. I loved it.
Comment from johngie
What a lovely story about a place most people consider to be unclean, ugly and scary. Too bad it had to be so short as you do paint a wonderful picture with your words.
Very well written and best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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What a lovely story about a place most people consider to be unclean, ugly and scary. Too bad it had to be so short as you do paint a wonderful picture with your words.
Very well written and best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thanks, Angie. I like those short stories. It is a Thankschallenge to get all you want to say in the words allowed. Glad to see you back
Comment from Jackreese
You described a very clear picture of the woods and of the creatures that inhabit it. When you mentioned Moses it reminded me of a huge tortoise that lives at a pet store in his own room. He is of gold color and hardly ever moves. I've always heard of watercress, but never knew exactly what it was.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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You described a very clear picture of the woods and of the creatures that inhabit it. When you mentioned Moses it reminded me of a huge tortoise that lives at a pet store in his own room. He is of gold color and hardly ever moves. I've always heard of watercress, but never knew exactly what it was.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you. Watercress makes a great salad if picked at the right time. Mom also made salad from young Dandelion plants, I'm sure you have heard of Sassafrass tea. The old folks made a lot of wonderful foods and drinks from wild plants.
Comment from Marykelly
Thanks for the trip to the swamp. I am more of a city girl than a country girl so the visit to the swamp was a new experience for me and you made it seem so real I can picture Mossy Moses the turtle and the water and trees. Besides the physical description you create an awesome mood in the swamp. well done
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thanks for the trip to the swamp. I am more of a city girl than a country girl so the visit to the swamp was a new experience for me and you made it seem so real I can picture Mossy Moses the turtle and the water and trees. Besides the physical description you create an awesome mood in the swamp. well done
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thank you. The swamp was a magical place to us. We spent a lot of time there as children. It was sad to see it destroyed.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mystery Author,
I enjoyed the sense of place you imparted about the swamp and gathering watercress and morel mushrooms. This is rich with details. I especially liked hearing of old Mossy Moses. (I think I might rename this piece in tribute to Mossy Moses... 'Where Mossy Moses Lived', or something... that creates a sense of intrigue fitting for this piece.
More parts I enjoyed:
My girlfriend and I could easily imagine fairies and wood nymphs living in the hollow trees and under the rocks. It was a magical place for two little girls with vivid imaginations. We spent many a happy hour playing with our imaginary friends.
I will always remember that beautiful swamp and old Mossy Moses.
I'm sorry it was lost to progress... the same thing happened to me when I visited my Grandma's old farmhouse early in my adulthood... it had been sold and 'modernized', or in my mind, ruined.
Good luck in the contest!
Kim
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Hi Mystery Author,
I enjoyed the sense of place you imparted about the swamp and gathering watercress and morel mushrooms. This is rich with details. I especially liked hearing of old Mossy Moses. (I think I might rename this piece in tribute to Mossy Moses... 'Where Mossy Moses Lived', or something... that creates a sense of intrigue fitting for this piece.
More parts I enjoyed:
My girlfriend and I could easily imagine fairies and wood nymphs living in the hollow trees and under the rocks. It was a magical place for two little girls with vivid imaginations. We spent many a happy hour playing with our imaginary friends.
I will always remember that beautiful swamp and old Mossy Moses.
I'm sorry it was lost to progress... the same thing happened to me when I visited my Grandma's old farmhouse early in my adulthood... it had been sold and 'modernized', or in my mind, ruined.
Good luck in the contest!
Kim
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I will consider your suggestion.
Comment from DonandVicki
I can relate to your well penned story as I was raised near a swamp/ river and what a perfect place for boys to be brought up. Plenty to inspire the imagination.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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I can relate to your well penned story as I was raised near a swamp/ river and what a perfect place for boys to be brought up. Plenty to inspire the imagination.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you. That old swamp was one of our favorite places to play. I don't think it would be safe for children to roam the countryside like we used to back in the fifties.
Comment from Lovinia
Hello Mystery Writer
What a splendid story of a childhood special place. WOW! Your descriptive imagery maintained the pleasure, as I read, I was in that swamp with you. I had my special place like this, only it was a creek surrounded by sandstone caves where we would rest in the shade and eat our picnic lunches. The creek tumbled over washed rocks and was a cool respite on a hot summer's day. No character such as Mossy Moses though, now that would have been special! We enjoyed the wildlife in the form of noisy parrots and the huge variety of lizards, especially the monitor lizards which would always fascinate us as they skimmed across the shallow waters. We thankfully avoided the snakes. No ducks.
As you can see your story brings back many memories for me, as well as enjoying the diversity of your swamp. What a shame this wondrous piece of nature and childhood has been destroyed. You have brought it back again, alive and undamaged, I feel I know this place and the part it played in many childhood adventures. I love the touches of your mother gathering the mushrooms with you and dad coming to eye Mossy Moses.
Only a typo: - " ... Morel mushrooms along the top and sides (of) the gully."
An fascinating and exciting story which I enjoyed very much. I found no spag and can find no suggestions for improvement. Now is when I long to have a six left. You have 'painted' us a picture, I can see that abundance of glowing watercress in the forest pools. I expect this entry to be a contender for highest placement. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Well done. Warm Regards - Lovinia oxoxoxo
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hello Mystery Writer
What a splendid story of a childhood special place. WOW! Your descriptive imagery maintained the pleasure, as I read, I was in that swamp with you. I had my special place like this, only it was a creek surrounded by sandstone caves where we would rest in the shade and eat our picnic lunches. The creek tumbled over washed rocks and was a cool respite on a hot summer's day. No character such as Mossy Moses though, now that would have been special! We enjoyed the wildlife in the form of noisy parrots and the huge variety of lizards, especially the monitor lizards which would always fascinate us as they skimmed across the shallow waters. We thankfully avoided the snakes. No ducks.
As you can see your story brings back many memories for me, as well as enjoying the diversity of your swamp. What a shame this wondrous piece of nature and childhood has been destroyed. You have brought it back again, alive and undamaged, I feel I know this place and the part it played in many childhood adventures. I love the touches of your mother gathering the mushrooms with you and dad coming to eye Mossy Moses.
Only a typo: - " ... Morel mushrooms along the top and sides (of) the gully."
An fascinating and exciting story which I enjoyed very much. I found no spag and can find no suggestions for improvement. Now is when I long to have a six left. You have 'painted' us a picture, I can see that abundance of glowing watercress in the forest pools. I expect this entry to be a contender for highest placement. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Well done. Warm Regards - Lovinia oxoxoxo
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your kind thoughts and great review. It sounds like you had a lovely place to play in when you were a child too.
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Hi
Yours was the first entry I read which enticed me to read all the others. Quite a competitive contest, but so wonderful to read of these special places. I can identify with yours, as your swamp is a little like my dribbling creek. :))) We are lucky to have such memories ... I feel for those brought up in the concrete jungle. I wish you the best for the contest. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a very good write you have entered for this contest. Your well chosen words really set the scene with a touch of descriptiveness and nostalgia combines to give an enjoyable reading experience.
Nicely penned piece.
GMG
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hi there,
This is a very good write you have entered for this contest. Your well chosen words really set the scene with a touch of descriptiveness and nostalgia combines to give an enjoyable reading experience.
Nicely penned piece.
GMG
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you. A good review from you means a lot to me.
