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Comment from Gloria ....
What an exquisite presentation, Treischel and even though know I am scolded for commenting, it is important to me.
Beautiful sonnet and congratulations on your POM nomination. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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What an exquisite presentation, Treischel and even though know I am scolded for commenting, it is important to me.
Beautiful sonnet and congratulations on your POM nomination. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much Gloria. It is an honor.
Comment from jlsavell
Treischel,
I can certainly see why thisxwas nominated. Absolutely beautiful. Exceptional execution and poetic devices employed in this work. I respect anyone who can write good sonnets.
Thank you for sharing.
Jlsavell
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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Treischel,
I can certainly see why thisxwas nominated. Absolutely beautiful. Exceptional execution and poetic devices employed in this work. I respect anyone who can write good sonnets.
Thank you for sharing.
Jlsavell
Comment Written 24-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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Stank you jlsavell
Comment from Just2Write
Wow - another new form of Sonnet - (at least to me) I liked the way it comes together. Just a comment on your author's notes. A poem or stanza of 5 lines is called a Cinquain - The word quintet is any group of five things so that works. I've seen Quintrain used on the internet - and yet, it's not in a dictionary. I couldn't Quintain is, but it's something from medieval times used for target practise.
All that aside, I just loved this contemporary style of Sonnet, and you do it real justice. The quatrain very much reminds me of an Italian Sonnet - The use of Cinquains in a sonnet is so different - and yet, I really like it.
A sonnet in iambic tetrameter is also refreshing - and the topic felt very much like the bard himself was speaking.
Rose.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Wow - another new form of Sonnet - (at least to me) I liked the way it comes together. Just a comment on your author's notes. A poem or stanza of 5 lines is called a Cinquain - The word quintet is any group of five things so that works. I've seen Quintrain used on the internet - and yet, it's not in a dictionary. I couldn't Quintain is, but it's something from medieval times used for target practise.
All that aside, I just loved this contemporary style of Sonnet, and you do it real justice. The quatrain very much reminds me of an Italian Sonnet - The use of Cinquains in a sonnet is so different - and yet, I really like it.
A sonnet in iambic tetrameter is also refreshing - and the topic felt very much like the bard himself was speaking.
Rose.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Rose. Glad you enjoyed this poem and the uniqueness of it, I agree with you that a Cinquain is a five line poem, but not all five line poems are a Cinquain. That has become a specific form now, that has a fixed syllable count of 2,4,6,8,2. So Quintrain is the most appropriate moniker. But I love the thought of, when used in a Sonnet, calling it a poetic Quintet.
Comment from Pantygynt
If I remember rightly you have used the roserian sonnet form before. I f it wasn't you then I apologize. For me the volta is the whole of the final quatrain. The first stanza looks at the innate beauty of flowers in general. The second deals with the beauty of flowers in their natural state, while the third, deals with cut flowers as being emblematic of love.
There seems to be a variety of opinions as to what a five line stanza should be called. Various sites on the net refer to quintain, quintet, quintrain, and cinquain. Clearly the first two are erroneous although it is easy to guess at how they may have come about. A quintain was a device used to train mounted knights in the art of jousting, while a quintet refers to a group of five musicians. Personally I can live with either quintrain or cinquain, the latter coming into use I believe because of the confusion around the latin rooted words.
However, on the principle of a rose by any other name smelling so sweet, I shall return to this delightful sonnet, whose complexity of form actually mirrors the complexity of the variety of flowers in a garden, and the complex beauty of the design of shape and colour that nature has bestowed upon them.
A good match of form and content here well deserving of the six stars awarded.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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If I remember rightly you have used the roserian sonnet form before. I f it wasn't you then I apologize. For me the volta is the whole of the final quatrain. The first stanza looks at the innate beauty of flowers in general. The second deals with the beauty of flowers in their natural state, while the third, deals with cut flowers as being emblematic of love.
There seems to be a variety of opinions as to what a five line stanza should be called. Various sites on the net refer to quintain, quintet, quintrain, and cinquain. Clearly the first two are erroneous although it is easy to guess at how they may have come about. A quintain was a device used to train mounted knights in the art of jousting, while a quintet refers to a group of five musicians. Personally I can live with either quintrain or cinquain, the latter coming into use I believe because of the confusion around the latin rooted words.
However, on the principle of a rose by any other name smelling so sweet, I shall return to this delightful sonnet, whose complexity of form actually mirrors the complexity of the variety of flowers in a garden, and the complex beauty of the design of shape and colour that nature has bestowed upon them.
A good match of form and content here well deserving of the six stars awarded.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes, I have written one before, so this my second Roserian. It's not my favorite form, I think that middle line linking the quintrains get a bit lost and feels out of place between the aa and cc rhymes. I think a more effective rhyme would be aabaa ccbcc deed. The Cinquain has a very specific format associated with it now, so it can't be used with just any 5 lined stanza now.
I appreciate you insights and the six star award.
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I guess it will have to be quintrain then.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Tom,
You seem to enjoy and excel in these more complex forms of rhyme/metre and this is no exception. In this case, also, you add some really charming phraseology to create quite vivid pictures. A classic, which any Old Master would be proud of. Thoroughly enjoyable and well deserving of six.
Regards,
Reg
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Dear Tom,
You seem to enjoy and excel in these more complex forms of rhyme/metre and this is no exception. In this case, also, you add some really charming phraseology to create quite vivid pictures. A classic, which any Old Master would be proud of. Thoroughly enjoyable and well deserving of six.
Regards,
Reg
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much Reg. I am pleased you enjoyed the form and I loved receiving the six.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A true pleasure to read.
Written with clarity and meaning and a complex style is accomplished
with aplomb.
As a nature lover I appreciate the description of the words and colour of the image.
A perfect combination.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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A true pleasure to read.
Written with clarity and meaning and a complex style is accomplished
with aplomb.
As a nature lover I appreciate the description of the words and colour of the image.
A perfect combination.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Thank you very much Shirley, it is great we two nature lovers can connect from afar. Glad you liked it. I really appreciate those stars.
Comment from I am Cat
I must say, the photo is lovely, and I WAS enjoying the poem immensely but the rhyme scheme in the last 'enveloping' couplets... ugh. LOL
It just went against my grain. And I KNOW that's how the form is... it just didn't sit well with the rhythm I already had in my head... I liked the lilt of it, and the word choices are great, even with that part, but the inside out thing... just threw me off. Sorry. Not your fault, it's the form. Love the first two parts... but yeah. ;(
lol
ah well... some forms don't fit with all, right? But I tell you, you are the man with the plan,
Happy Valentine's Day Tom... lovely flowers, lovely words
Cat
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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I must say, the photo is lovely, and I WAS enjoying the poem immensely but the rhyme scheme in the last 'enveloping' couplets... ugh. LOL
It just went against my grain. And I KNOW that's how the form is... it just didn't sit well with the rhythm I already had in my head... I liked the lilt of it, and the word choices are great, even with that part, but the inside out thing... just threw me off. Sorry. Not your fault, it's the form. Love the first two parts... but yeah. ;(
lol
ah well... some forms don't fit with all, right? But I tell you, you are the man with the plan,
Happy Valentine's Day Tom... lovely flowers, lovely words
Cat
Comment Written 14-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Thank you Cat. You know, I wasn't pleased with the format either. It just doesn't flow like a Sonnet. On the other hand, maybe it was a poor rhyme choice on my part. Like maybe "galore" would have been better rhyme than "store". I'll ponder that, my muse mate.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
My son and daughter brought me a single yellow Rose Bud this morning and I have been watching it slowly open all day. It still has a way to go but it is beautiful at any stage. This is a nice poem. I love sonnets. Well done Tom. Happy Valentines Day to you as well. Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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My son and daughter brought me a single yellow Rose Bud this morning and I have been watching it slowly open all day. It still has a way to go but it is beautiful at any stage. This is a nice poem. I love sonnets. Well done Tom. Happy Valentines Day to you as well. Nancy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Thank you Nancy. I hope you enjoyed your day and flower.
Comment from Joan E.
Thanks for introducing me to the Roserian Sonnet. I enjoyed your love theme along with your treatise on flowers. Your rhythmic and rhymed stanzas are quite appealing. What a lovely Valentine! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Thanks for introducing me to the Roserian Sonnet. I enjoyed your love theme along with your treatise on flowers. Your rhythmic and rhymed stanzas are quite appealing. What a lovely Valentine! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 14-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Thank you Joan.
Comment from RGstar
Lovely gesture, my friend.
What a nice thing to offer on this very day, may all enjoy this lovely gesture...especially those that the valentine man forgot. :)... lovely rhythm, once again.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Lovely gesture, my friend.
What a nice thing to offer on this very day, may all enjoy this lovely gesture...especially those that the valentine man forgot. :)... lovely rhythm, once again.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 14-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Thank you RG for the warm review.
BTW, someone told me you're looking for a publisher. I use Outskirts Press. I find them a bit expensive and very commercialized, but easy to work with and they put out a beautiful hardcover product for me. But if you are looking for a cheap paperback or on-line promoter, I wouldn't go there. I used them because I wanted a lovely color layout in an expensive Coffee table format. I'd use them again for that.
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Well, you have just priced me out...ha,ha. i guess I will have to do the lottery or just hope miracles happen....but I'll make it somehow, for that is one thing I always do...make it somehow. The importance is that my word is read...and I don't know how to do, for if it is expesive with just word, I can't imagine with audio :)
Thank you so much, my friend.
RG
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I'd suggest to set up webcast readings of you work and get popular on line. As you gather a following there you can market your book.
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Good idea. I shall start enquiring about this as I know little of this way of marketing. Is this normal for authors? Will it expose work so publishers not interested or better to hold some back? Ii think I will put up atopic on our general forum, Treischel, and maybe we can speak there as will have some more input of some who have used this. I'll be glad if you can check in with me there for your knowledge is needed.
Thanks, my friend.
RG
