Blue Shades Shaded
Drunken Irish Sonnet14 total reviews
Comment from Quire's Gal
Hello Mike,
I had to read this several times during the voting process and I must agree with the comment given in the results..."Insane genius!!" I haven't laughed that hard in such a long time. You have managed to accomplish some thing not mentioned in your other reviews. Fist, you got some internal rhymes going in some of you lines which is most impressive....
bread/dead, u nourishing/flourishing, Forlorn/with scorn (my favorite)
The real genius is your drunken lament "To do, oh what to do, oh what to do." And fitting into such a smooth iambic pentameter line, you don't even notice it...brilliant!!
As for some of the meaning of some of your lines, I'ill have to bookcase this one to read over. I'm a bit ignorant when it comes to history. As for your philosophical lines, I care not to understand or debate at this time. My rating reflects the style, rhyme, structure and inventive way you put together a sonnet.
On a personal note; Dude, you need to get off the vodka and Valium and drink some good hearty Guinness this upcoming St. Patty's Day.
Thanks for the guffaws and I look forward to reading more of your work. Now go get yourself a blue sucker that will turn your mouth blue and cheer the hell up!
QG
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Hello Mike,
I had to read this several times during the voting process and I must agree with the comment given in the results..."Insane genius!!" I haven't laughed that hard in such a long time. You have managed to accomplish some thing not mentioned in your other reviews. Fist, you got some internal rhymes going in some of you lines which is most impressive....
bread/dead, u nourishing/flourishing, Forlorn/with scorn (my favorite)
The real genius is your drunken lament "To do, oh what to do, oh what to do." And fitting into such a smooth iambic pentameter line, you don't even notice it...brilliant!!
As for some of the meaning of some of your lines, I'ill have to bookcase this one to read over. I'm a bit ignorant when it comes to history. As for your philosophical lines, I care not to understand or debate at this time. My rating reflects the style, rhyme, structure and inventive way you put together a sonnet.
On a personal note; Dude, you need to get off the vodka and Valium and drink some good hearty Guinness this upcoming St. Patty's Day.
Thanks for the guffaws and I look forward to reading more of your work. Now go get yourself a blue sucker that will turn your mouth blue and cheer the hell up!
QG
Comment Written 03-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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I've eliminated the Valium per your suggestion and it's made a huge difference. I even recall my home address now. I once drank a beer when I was fifteen. I didn't like the taste and never drank one again. Yep, the only male in the world who doesn't like beer. I'm so totally thrilled you enjoyed this. It's really out there and difficult to understand. I'm beyond impressed you even attempted and astonished you're successful. It was almost a dare. I'm pretty happy now that I've read your review. I'll be good now and write more understandable things and leave the Valium alone. :)) Seriously, thanks so very much. mikey
Comment from Deborah Marie
Good luck in the contest. Your writing represents the contest well. Shades of blue stand out the most in your writing... And, I'm impressed with that and your wording as well. Thanks for sharing and keep 'em coming, Deb
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Good luck in the contest. Your writing represents the contest well. Shades of blue stand out the most in your writing... And, I'm impressed with that and your wording as well. Thanks for sharing and keep 'em coming, Deb
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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I'll cross my fingers, but the competition is daunting. mike
Comment from Eternal Muse
Mike, this is a very different concept of the topic. Frankly, this is not what I envisioned for love's bittersweet memories, but it had me laughing. As usual, your artistic presentation, rhyme, meter, the humor and your appeal with a reader are up to your usual very high standards. The picture of his lady love had me in stitches.
This should do very well and may even win the contest, knowing your appeal with the voters, but know, this is not exactly what I envisioned for this contest.
Hugs and love, Yelena
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Mike, this is a very different concept of the topic. Frankly, this is not what I envisioned for love's bittersweet memories, but it had me laughing. As usual, your artistic presentation, rhyme, meter, the humor and your appeal with a reader are up to your usual very high standards. The picture of his lady love had me in stitches.
This should do very well and may even win the contest, knowing your appeal with the voters, but know, this is not exactly what I envisioned for this contest.
Hugs and love, Yelena
Comment Written 14-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2016
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Well, Yelena, I'm not nearly so prominent this year, so no expectations for votes. I see a couple pieces that should battle it out for top honors. This is for fun and I expect to end up in last place. HA! But that's okay if it got some laughs. I had fun writing it and I hope it was appreciated as something fun and different. Thanks for reviewing and reading. Oh yeah, and for pointing out the background again. mike
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Mikey, you are wrong. You underestimate the power of your piece and its appeal with the voters. I think it's going to win. It is knowing that it might win which made me say that I wanted you to know [notwithstanding] that I had a different concept of the contest piece. Your only possible rival is Dean, you know how he is on presentations (lol).
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Well, my dear. I know this, if I ever need an agent, YOU are number one on my list!! LOL
Whatever happens, it will be fun. :)) mike
Comment from Sasha
I made the mistake of watching the video first then read the poem. Couldn't top laughing long enough to write a review other than to say you are definitely insane an need to go back on your meds...Valium should do the trick.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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I made the mistake of watching the video first then read the poem. Couldn't top laughing long enough to write a review other than to say you are definitely insane an need to go back on your meds...Valium should do the trick.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Ah yes, Valiuim. Yeah, I feel a sonnet coming on.
This was great fun. Making sense gets tedious and it usually doesn't come across any better than this anyway!! mike
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh man, Buddy's head is waaaaaaaaay too big for his hat. LMFAO.
Having said that, this drunken Irish sonnet is bang on hilarious. I love the way you've stick-handled some incredibly overblown language, and with occasional allusion to Shakespeare.
I also enjoy that you've written a disclaimer in your author notes that you'd get plastered and write a completely illiterate and incomprehensible piece of Blarney. Yeeesh speaking of which that reminds me, Saint Patrick's Day is on the horizon.
But yes, your sonnet is written in perfect meter and rhyme and a totally bogus excellent journey that would like blow Bill and Ted's minds right off.
All the best to you in the contest, my dear. That's my line and I'm sticking to it. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Oh man, Buddy's head is waaaaaaaaay too big for his hat. LMFAO.
Having said that, this drunken Irish sonnet is bang on hilarious. I love the way you've stick-handled some incredibly overblown language, and with occasional allusion to Shakespeare.
I also enjoy that you've written a disclaimer in your author notes that you'd get plastered and write a completely illiterate and incomprehensible piece of Blarney. Yeeesh speaking of which that reminds me, Saint Patrick's Day is on the horizon.
But yes, your sonnet is written in perfect meter and rhyme and a totally bogus excellent journey that would like blow Bill and Ted's minds right off.
All the best to you in the contest, my dear. That's my line and I'm sticking to it. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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That's what I thought. Everyone else kept saying the hat was too small, like it was the hat's fault or something.
I often forget how beautifully I write when I'm shit faced drunk. I sing especially well too. Oh, the emotions well up inside and they just pour out. It's a crowd pleaser,
I can see you don't want to be rude to the other entrants, but this should be a slam dunk don't you think.
Yeah, Saint Patrick's Day. I may imbibe in a wee libation that day. Care to imbible with? mike
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm sure many of us can relate to this poem from one time or another, and many more times than we care to admit. I remember a joint in New Orleans called the Silver Dollar out in Fat City. I was stumbling around the parking lot when a big ol' cop walked up and asked what I was doing. I answered him with can't you see the keys in my hand, I'm looking for my car. He said, well, can you explain why your privates are hanging out of your trousers. I said, huh . . . thinking about it for a minute and carried on with, looks like I lost my girl friend, too. Thanks for another fine poem. :-)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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I'm sure many of us can relate to this poem from one time or another, and many more times than we care to admit. I remember a joint in New Orleans called the Silver Dollar out in Fat City. I was stumbling around the parking lot when a big ol' cop walked up and asked what I was doing. I answered him with can't you see the keys in my hand, I'm looking for my car. He said, well, can you explain why your privates are hanging out of your trousers. I said, huh . . . thinking about it for a minute and carried on with, looks like I lost my girl friend, too. Thanks for another fine poem. :-)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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I've found that the privates out of the trousers trick can be quite effective in the right lighting and circumstances. An even better one is to follow a dude around whos employing the technique and play the knight in shining armour who rescues the girl. It can be a team play too. Ah, the nuances of courting, eh?
One problem I had was the damn pavement burns. Geesh, those can be painful!! mike
Comment from Pantygynt
Well, if she looks like that bottom photo you are well out of it. Lol. The meter is fine and I believe there are sonnets made out of rhyming couplets. But this is the first one I've seen with a quatrain of mono rhyme. But since you were feeling blue. I will forgive.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Well, if she looks like that bottom photo you are well out of it. Lol. The meter is fine and I believe there are sonnets made out of rhyming couplets. But this is the first one I've seen with a quatrain of mono rhyme. But since you were feeling blue. I will forgive.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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She looked a LOT better the night before. I kinda got stuck on that verse. It happens with the vodka. Hahaha. Thanks a bunch, mike
Comment from Joyce Long
Thanks for sharing your nonsense poem. I look at my arm and I see shades of blue, but if my arm were to be cut, my red blood would drain out. So life is shades of blue and when the red is gone, there is not life. Even if you didn't mean it to be, this poem is very deep and says a lot. Well done. I enjoyed it.
Joyce 02-10-16
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Thanks for sharing your nonsense poem. I look at my arm and I see shades of blue, but if my arm were to be cut, my red blood would drain out. So life is shades of blue and when the red is gone, there is not life. Even if you didn't mean it to be, this poem is very deep and says a lot. Well done. I enjoyed it.
Joyce 02-10-16
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Joyce, so very true. As I was writing this I started to make connections. Even though I intended it to be nonsense I couldn't help but try and put some sense in there too. Wow, very perceptive. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
LOL and I hope you win...I truly do.
What a different piece to write and since I have no experience I will rely on you to know.
You need your meds again. Just saying...lol
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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LOL and I hope you win...I truly do.
What a different piece to write and since I have no experience I will rely on you to know.
You need your meds again. Just saying...lol
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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I had to stop taking the meds just so I could write this. I'm back on them now and as okay as I get. HA!
I am hoping for a resounding victory or last place, it's all good. mike
Comment from KarlSlevin
Not too bad for drunken ramblings, sometimes they are more honest than we would have liked. Quite right not to be ashamed, it is raw say it as it is poetry. I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks.
Karl
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Not too bad for drunken ramblings, sometimes they are more honest than we would have liked. Quite right not to be ashamed, it is raw say it as it is poetry. I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks.
Karl
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Yep, sometimes we say way more than we should and other times we let the cat out of the bag and it turns out great!! Thanks. mike
