History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "To Golgotha"Poems that tell stories of long ago
32 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow!
An excellent and proficient capture of a complicated poetic form.
The words and image add depth and meaning to the sad telling of the death of Jesus.
As a person of deep faith I found the reality of His sacrifice yet again touch my heart and strengthen my faith and resolve.
Blessings
Shirley
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Wow!
An excellent and proficient capture of a complicated poetic form.
The words and image add depth and meaning to the sad telling of the death of Jesus.
As a person of deep faith I found the reality of His sacrifice yet again touch my heart and strengthen my faith and resolve.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from patcelaw
It is hard for me to even imagine the difficulty that Jesus must've felt in his life as he carried his cross to Gotha, knowing that he was going to die on that very cross. It breaks my heart to know that someone could love me so much that he was willing to lay his life down for mine. This is a beautiful poem, and I enjoyed it very much Patricia .
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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It is hard for me to even imagine the difficulty that Jesus must've felt in his life as he carried his cross to Gotha, knowing that he was going to die on that very cross. It breaks my heart to know that someone could love me so much that he was willing to lay his life down for mine. This is a beautiful poem, and I enjoyed it very much Patricia .
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much Patricia for your heartfelt conmments.Itis enough to make one weep. Much appreciated review.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
The poem is so sad. How Jesus was treated by the Roman's and the Jews. The poem is written well. I think of the pain and suffering he went through; he was innocent. Very good job on this poem.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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The poem is so sad. How Jesus was treated by the Roman's and the Jews. The poem is written well. I think of the pain and suffering he went through; he was innocent. Very good job on this poem.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thank you Brenda. I appreciate that you took the time to review and respond on this poem about the crucifixion on this Good Friday. May your day be blessed.
Comment from bob cullen
Gee I wish I had a six left. This is the most brilliant. Over the past four weeks we've heard all four Gospel accounts of the Crucifixion at Sunday Mass. As I see it, this version tells the same story and almost as well. A great write Pantygynt.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Gee I wish I had a six left. This is the most brilliant. Over the past four weeks we've heard all four Gospel accounts of the Crucifixion at Sunday Mass. As I see it, this version tells the same story and almost as well. A great write Pantygynt.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thank you Bob, I really appreciate the review and comments. Your suppor makes my day. I am humbled by your comparison.
Comment from Sanku
You have succeeded in capturing the essence of crucifixion (as I know which is not much since I am not a Christian)the form sounds very complicated but you have stuck to it faithfully .It is well crafted...
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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You have succeeded in capturing the essence of crucifixion (as I know which is not much since I am not a Christian)the form sounds very complicated but you have stuck to it faithfully .It is well crafted...
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thank you Sanku. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment .
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Treischel - this is a tremendous poem in Pantygynt form. This form lends itself to telling a story which is what you did here. From Jesus being condemned to death by Pilot to the crucifixion - written with great detail. Dramatic picture adds to the poem. 'This man condemned, the soldiers knew was innocent of sin.It mattered not, he was a Jew, and Fate's commands were in.' I never thought he was condemned because he was a Jew but because he was called King of the Jews. He was a threat. No matter you have written a great story amazingly well with perfect rhyme and meter. Quite a tour de force and I feel you should be given at least a 6. I do not have one but give a virtual and thank you for posting. Warm rgards Dorothy
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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Hi Treischel - this is a tremendous poem in Pantygynt form. This form lends itself to telling a story which is what you did here. From Jesus being condemned to death by Pilot to the crucifixion - written with great detail. Dramatic picture adds to the poem. 'This man condemned, the soldiers knew was innocent of sin.It mattered not, he was a Jew, and Fate's commands were in.' I never thought he was condemned because he was a Jew but because he was called King of the Jews. He was a threat. No matter you have written a great story amazingly well with perfect rhyme and meter. Quite a tour de force and I feel you should be given at least a 6. I do not have one but give a virtual and thank you for posting. Warm rgards Dorothy
Comment Written 12-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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Thank you very much for this detailed and warm review. My comment about him being a Jew was meant as a comment from the Roman's indifferent perspective. The Jewish perspective would that He blasphemed and deserved to die for claiming He was the Messiah.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a long poem and not your usual theme. I enjoyed the story about the cross and think this would be an excellent easter contest entry. I enjoyed the poem and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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This is a long poem and not your usual theme. I enjoyed the story about the cross and think this would be an excellent easter contest entry. I enjoyed the poem and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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Thank you dmt.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
I enjoyed poem. The descriptive language flowed well. The artwork works great with the theme of the poem.
Thanks for sharing.
Bill
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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I enjoyed poem. The descriptive language flowed well. The artwork works great with the theme of the poem.
Thanks for sharing.
Bill
Comment Written 12-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016
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Thank you Bill
Comment from ciliverde
Tom, this is a fantastic poem, an amazing piece of work that describes the crucifixion in more detail than I had ever imagined it. Even for someone just a man, this process would be spellbinding - but Jesus? It becomes elevated to another level in your verse.
You use this form to perfection, with the alternate rhyme quatrains used to describe from Centurion's perspective, and the rhyming tercet from Jesus' - to great effect.
This is an astounding piece of work, which I will read again at least once, if not more times. I feel this form will be enduring, as seems to be the perfect vehicle to tell a tale, from one or more perspectives - the variations within each cycle keep things fresh, and the final line of each cycle is done with force and grabs the reader.
Well done! One of the more amazing works I've seen here :)
Carol
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Tom, this is a fantastic poem, an amazing piece of work that describes the crucifixion in more detail than I had ever imagined it. Even for someone just a man, this process would be spellbinding - but Jesus? It becomes elevated to another level in your verse.
You use this form to perfection, with the alternate rhyme quatrains used to describe from Centurion's perspective, and the rhyming tercet from Jesus' - to great effect.
This is an astounding piece of work, which I will read again at least once, if not more times. I feel this form will be enduring, as seems to be the perfect vehicle to tell a tale, from one or more perspectives - the variations within each cycle keep things fresh, and the final line of each cycle is done with force and grabs the reader.
Well done! One of the more amazing works I've seen here :)
Carol
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Thank you Carol for a very encouraging and detailed review.
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You have to be proud of this one... :)
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Thank you Carol for a very encouraging and detailed review.
Comment from writeapoem
A very good poem on the crcifiction of our Lord. The style is educational the rhyme sublime. A very fine and unique descriptive story in verse.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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A very good poem on the crcifiction of our Lord. The style is educational the rhyme sublime. A very fine and unique descriptive story in verse.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Thank you writeapoem.
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Thank you writeapoem.
