Christine's Poems
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Comment from Kaydoe
Amazing how your poetry lives in you and you can write when inspired by the moment as you looked at the people in the airport. You described things so
accurately, I could feel as if I was observing this with you. Well done!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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Amazing how your poetry lives in you and you can write when inspired by the moment as you looked at the people in the airport. You described things so
accurately, I could feel as if I was observing this with you. Well done!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016
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Hi Kaydoe. I thank you very much for your review and comments. I am glad you shared my quiet observations. I now always have a notebook and pen handy for any opportunity I may find. Cheers for your support Christine😃
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job writing what you were seeing as you were waiting. I felt as if I were right there with you. Your words flow well and describe the scene perfectly. Good job and thanks for sharing. [I see to many glued to their devices at restaurants instead of talking to one another].
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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You did a great job writing what you were seeing as you were waiting. I felt as if I were right there with you. Your words flow well and describe the scene perfectly. Good job and thanks for sharing. [I see to many glued to their devices at restaurants instead of talking to one another].
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Hi Jannypan, Thanks for your review and lovely comments. I am glad you thought you were with me ,and yes sadly it seems to be everywhere.,Enjoy your support. Cheers Christine😃
Comment from DonandVicki
A delayed flight is truly annoying but you put your time to good use writing poetry. A fun write and has a good flow to the words.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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A delayed flight is truly annoying but you put your time to good use writing poetry. A fun write and has a good flow to the words.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Hi DonandVicki, thanks for your reciew amd rating much appreciated and yes I tried to be 'productive' during my wait. Cheers for your commemts Christine😃
Comment from Ogden
I was just finishing a review of this terrific poem. I noticed a sentence (of my review) that would have worked better in an earlier paragraph, and, as writers do, I decided to cut it and paste it where it belonged. Apparently, my decision offended all of the other things I had written that were satisfied with the positions they held, and all disappeared in a kind of revenge for my disturbing them. All that remained was the sentence I pasted, apparently satisfied with his uncrowded new space.
So now I will try to re-create the.glowing review that got away.
That sedom works, but I'll be sure to do give "Flight Reflections" the praise it deserves anyhow.
I didn't expect to enjoy a poem about a flight very much, even if it was an exciting one. If I had known it would mostly be about waiting for a delayed plane, I might not have read it at all. (None or the above was in the original review.) I'm glad I had to find that out after I began reading, brcause you transformed what most people would think of as an uninteresting, mundane scene
into a free verse joy ride. It takes a heck of a writer to do that, especially when I'm the passenger.
You have an exceptional eye and ear (pronably two of each) for capturing details that, I believe, most ot us writers would not notice, even if we saw or heard them. And if we did notice them, we woudn't know what to do with them.
They are precisely what makes "Flight Reflections" the six star read that it is. Well, let me amend that. The poetry has a lot to do with it, too. It doesn't read like many a free verse poem that seems like the writer is concentrating on flavoring his free verse with bells and whistles and, perhaps, veering off his intended course as a result. There is none of that in your poem. Nothing that would have called itself to my attention that the poerty I'm reading is free verse.
Needless to say, but I'll say the needless nevertheless, "Flight Reflections," in my estimation, on the unfortunate scale of one to six stars, deserves seven stars.n(Lest I find a misplaced sentence, I think I'll leave that sleeping dog alone, and hope for the best).
Good luck in the voting. I have read all of the other poems in this contest, and it's no contest. Yours easily is the best entry.
Ogden
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016
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I was just finishing a review of this terrific poem. I noticed a sentence (of my review) that would have worked better in an earlier paragraph, and, as writers do, I decided to cut it and paste it where it belonged. Apparently, my decision offended all of the other things I had written that were satisfied with the positions they held, and all disappeared in a kind of revenge for my disturbing them. All that remained was the sentence I pasted, apparently satisfied with his uncrowded new space.
So now I will try to re-create the.glowing review that got away.
That sedom works, but I'll be sure to do give "Flight Reflections" the praise it deserves anyhow.
I didn't expect to enjoy a poem about a flight very much, even if it was an exciting one. If I had known it would mostly be about waiting for a delayed plane, I might not have read it at all. (None or the above was in the original review.) I'm glad I had to find that out after I began reading, brcause you transformed what most people would think of as an uninteresting, mundane scene
into a free verse joy ride. It takes a heck of a writer to do that, especially when I'm the passenger.
You have an exceptional eye and ear (pronably two of each) for capturing details that, I believe, most ot us writers would not notice, even if we saw or heard them. And if we did notice them, we woudn't know what to do with them.
They are precisely what makes "Flight Reflections" the six star read that it is. Well, let me amend that. The poetry has a lot to do with it, too. It doesn't read like many a free verse poem that seems like the writer is concentrating on flavoring his free verse with bells and whistles and, perhaps, veering off his intended course as a result. There is none of that in your poem. Nothing that would have called itself to my attention that the poerty I'm reading is free verse.
Needless to say, but I'll say the needless nevertheless, "Flight Reflections," in my estimation, on the unfortunate scale of one to six stars, deserves seven stars.n(Lest I find a misplaced sentence, I think I'll leave that sleeping dog alone, and hope for the best).
Good luck in the voting. I have read all of the other poems in this contest, and it's no contest. Yours easily is the best entry.
Ogden
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016
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Oh Ogden, I don't know what to say but wow what a fabulous review and I am humbled by your praise and so thank you so much for your most detailed and explained review and your 6 stars, for my Flight Reflections. You have made my day and I am feeling so pleased that you liked this so much. I don't generally write ' free verse' a bit of an old fashioned rhymer ,but as I was sitting at the airport, I began to write down my observations, and this is exactly as my wait transpired. Win lose or draw you have given me such a surprise and I truly thank you. Most sincerely And many Cheers to you . I am smiling
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Oh Ogden, I don't know what to say but wow what a fabulous review and I am humbled by your praise and so thank you so much for your most detailed and explained review and your 6 stars, for my Flight Reflections. You have made my day and I am feeling so pleased that you liked this so much. I don't generally write ' free verse' a bit of an old fashioned rhymer ,but as I was sitting at the airport, I began to write down my observations, and this is exactly as my wait transpired. Win lose or draw you have given me such a surprise and I truly thank you. Most sincerely And many Cheers to you . I am smiling
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Oh Ogden, I don't know what to say but wow what a fabulous review and I am humbled by your praise and so thank you so much for your most detailed and explained review and your 6 stars, for my Flight Reflections. You have made my day and I am feeling so pleased that you liked this so much. I don't generally write ' free verse' a bit of an old fashioned rhymer ,but as I was sitting at the airport, I began to write down my observations, and this is exactly as my wait transpired. Win lose or draw you have given me such a surprise and I truly thank you. Most sincerely And many Cheers to you . I am smiling
Comment from kathleenspalding
Enjoyable poem flows well and makes a good point. Paints an excellent verbal picture. One question - did you mean Times a ticking or Time's a ....? That's it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016
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Enjoyable poem flows well and makes a good point. Paints an excellent verbal picture. One question - did you mean Times a ticking or Time's a ....? That's it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016
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Hi Kathleen, Many thanks for your review and generous rating for my poem and I think I meant time's I will correct this Cheers
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Hi Kathleen, Many thanks for your review and generous rating for my poem and I think I meant time's I will correct this Cheers
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Hi Kathleen, Many thanks for your review and generous rating for my poem and I think I meant time's I will correct this Cheers
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You're welcome.
Comment from patcelaw
The experience in an airport waiting for a flight is not like it used to be. No longer are our family able to wait with in the boarding area so everyone are strangers and not will to strike up a conversation with others. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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The experience in an airport waiting for a flight is not like it used to be. No longer are our family able to wait with in the boarding area so everyone are strangers and not will to strike up a conversation with others. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi patcelaw, Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem, I think this happens in many places now ,phones and social media rule the conversations and behavior of many. I just noticed it to be very prevalent this day, and couldn't help but write it down. Cheers and thanks for your good luck wishes
Comment from frogbook
Well written and great observation. Made the reader feel as though they were there. Smooth and easy reading. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Well written and great observation. Made the reader feel as though they were there. Smooth and easy reading. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi frogbook .Many Chhers for your time to read and give this a review . I am glad it made you feel like you were there it was an interesting couple of hours. But made it home safely.I like flying. Thanks for you good luck wishes
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi - An excellent free verse covering everything you see and hear in an airport from arrival, until finally boarding the plane. A really good observational piece of writing as you waited for your flight. Finally your end your poem with words of relief. A good read. Good Luck in the contest. Warm rgards Dorothy
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi - An excellent free verse covering everything you see and hear in an airport from arrival, until finally boarding the plane. A really good observational piece of writing as you waited for your flight. Finally your end your poem with words of relief. A good read. Good Luck in the contest. Warm rgards Dorothy
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi Dorothy, Yes it was a relief to finally board, but my 'watch' was fun and I tried to reflect what I saw to create this piece. thanks for reading and reviewing and also for your good luck message.
Comment from William Ross
I like this this is good remember the days of when and how easy it use to be to fly. Good job on the writing. good luck on this and have a great day.
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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I like this this is good remember the days of when and how easy it use to be to fly. Good job on the writing. good luck on this and have a great day.
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi william, Thanks for reading and giving me your feedback, I enjoyed the flight too. Cheers for your rime and good luck message
Comment from Sambangi
This is a very well written free verse poem with free flow. You captured almost every thing that happens at airport when the flight gets delayed. I too had several experiences like this
I'm little confused about this prompt. It says "competition" writing prompt. No specific information about the topic requirements other than prompt
Wish you all the best
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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This is a very well written free verse poem with free flow. You captured almost every thing that happens at airport when the flight gets delayed. I too had several experiences like this
I'm little confused about this prompt. It says "competition" writing prompt. No specific information about the topic requirements other than prompt
Wish you all the best
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hello Sambangi, Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem for this comprtition contest ( yes a little strange the prompt, all it said was free style anything and I thought this would fit the bill. ( hope so) Many Cheers to you
