Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "The Jungle"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from 24chas
This was a pretty intense read, TPAC. The flow was great as the poem caught my attention right off and I hated when it ended. Nice job of writing and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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This was a pretty intense read, TPAC. The flow was great as the poem caught my attention right off and I hated when it ended. Nice job of writing and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Glad aspects in this write were captivating to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from TallySally
The sun sets. Shadows spread, The night brings panic. At first you believe yourself safe - above the Frey - observing/noting where/how the predators await. But you like others are vulnerable/afraid. There will be terrible assaults/killing. You and all others are prey.
Wow! What a telling you have done. It is powerful and real.
Great job.
God bless and my best.
Relda
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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The sun sets. Shadows spread, The night brings panic. At first you believe yourself safe - above the Frey - observing/noting where/how the predators await. But you like others are vulnerable/afraid. There will be terrible assaults/killing. You and all others are prey.
Wow! What a telling you have done. It is powerful and real.
Great job.
God bless and my best.
Relda
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Im more excited by your reactions, this work touching some depth within you: passing to me these encouraging yhoughts. Thanking you for too, too generous rate but welcomed comments.
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You deserve praise. :-) Relda
Comment from country ranch writer
from way up high flying as a bird, you can see so much up there and know the dangers that lurk on the ground below you the night brings many shows and screams in the night as prey is being killed for someone's supper
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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from way up high flying as a bird, you can see so much up there and know the dangers that lurk on the ground below you the night brings many shows and screams in the night as prey is being killed for someone's supper
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016
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Yeah, the jungle. Not just them we call animals. Life among others for certain. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from Ricky1024
nice piece I really enjoyed this perception of a bird it's a scary jungle the bird has a man so I can stay high above and fly away and trouble where are the animal that crawls in the tree is left to the dangers of the creatures below if it's so slips and falls 24 hour out
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2016
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nice piece I really enjoyed this perception of a bird it's a scary jungle the bird has a man so I can stay high above and fly away and trouble where are the animal that crawls in the tree is left to the dangers of the creatures below if it's so slips and falls 24 hour out
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2016
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A slight hint of suspence. Glad some features were pleasing to you. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from Joyce Long
Very well written poem. Thank you for your note as it gives meaning to your poem. It would be something to be a bird and be able to fly above your enemies. An enemy waiting in the dark would account for hell. You did a great job with this poem.
Joyce 01-29-16
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2016
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Very well written poem. Thank you for your note as it gives meaning to your poem. It would be something to be a bird and be able to fly above your enemies. An enemy waiting in the dark would account for hell. You did a great job with this poem.
Joyce 01-29-16
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2016
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Glad this piece found delight, work intent of suspense seemed to be perceived. Thanking you for your generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from foxangie123
I like the formation you have created here. It is a riddle that places one in some vibrant questions as they are read. Both clever and great. Keep it up..
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2016
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I like the formation you have created here. It is a riddle that places one in some vibrant questions as they are read. Both clever and great. Keep it up..
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2016
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I like your insights about this write. Glad aspects were found pleasing to you. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
