A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Adrift"Assorted poems of love
34 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
A well written poem presented beautifully. The image is gorgeous, not offensive.
Content is a paradox. "Adrift" with conflicted emotions--the reality of infidelity vs her wish for renewed faith in her faithless lover.
"Replacing the dull green of jealousy
With the vibrant green of renewal ...of faith"
It appears she decided on the latter, favoring half a loaf rather than none:
"Red ...now delirious passion
Lasting long into the night
My soul now free
To paint the life of a fulfilled woman."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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A well written poem presented beautifully. The image is gorgeous, not offensive.
Content is a paradox. "Adrift" with conflicted emotions--the reality of infidelity vs her wish for renewed faith in her faithless lover.
"Replacing the dull green of jealousy
With the vibrant green of renewal ...of faith"
It appears she decided on the latter, favoring half a loaf rather than none:
"Red ...now delirious passion
Lasting long into the night
My soul now free
To paint the life of a fulfilled woman."
Marilyn
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Marilyn, I want to thank you for giving me this time and this review hon and apologize for taking so long to leave this review. Busy with doctors lately.
Missy
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Justafan,
I like your poem, it brought back memories of my first relationship where I too was plagued by the green eyed monster,and the jealousy left me mentally exhausted most of the time. But age helps to conquer your fears, we just have to learn how to trust.
Great poem,
Brenda
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Hi Justafan,
I like your poem, it brought back memories of my first relationship where I too was plagued by the green eyed monster,and the jealousy left me mentally exhausted most of the time. But age helps to conquer your fears, we just have to learn how to trust.
Great poem,
Brenda
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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I want to thank you for giving me this time and this review hon and apologize for taking so long to leave this review. Busy with doctors lately.
Missy
Comment from JTStone
Yeah, the blue is definitely having the most fun...in that picture anyway.
You hit the target with this one for me girl...You had me thinking all the way through it.
The first half was the ex-wife definitely, especially the infidelity part. The second part is my girlfriend after the divorce.
Jimmy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Yeah, the blue is definitely having the most fun...in that picture anyway.
You hit the target with this one for me girl...You had me thinking all the way through it.
The first half was the ex-wife definitely, especially the infidelity part. The second part is my girlfriend after the divorce.
Jimmy
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Jimmy, I want to thank you for giving me this time and this review hon and apologize for taking so long to leave this review. Busy with doctors lately.
Missy
Comment from Pantygynt
And what colour is the life of this fulfilled woman to be. You have not mentioned yellow but since that is the colour of fear it would be inappropriate as the colour of fulfillment. Pure gold perhaps. i liked this piece of free verse greatly, but i would have appreciated your idea foir a colour for that fulfilled female.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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And what colour is the life of this fulfilled woman to be. You have not mentioned yellow but since that is the colour of fear it would be inappropriate as the colour of fulfillment. Pure gold perhaps. i liked this piece of free verse greatly, but i would have appreciated your idea foir a colour for that fulfilled female.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Hello, Gynt. Sunshine yellow :) sings the fulfilled woman. Bright, vibrant and filled with promise. I want to thank you for giving me this time and this review hon and apologize for taking so long to leave this review. Busy with doctors lately.
Missy
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Lovely
Comment from William Ross
Very nice and well written. A great free verse on letting go so one can love again. Great job on this. Thanks for sharing the thoughts. have a great day.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Very nice and well written. A great free verse on letting go so one can love again. Great job on this. Thanks for sharing the thoughts. have a great day.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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I want to thank you for giving me this time and this review hon and apologize for taking so long to leave this review, William. Busy with doctors lately.
Missy
Comment from mfowler
This piece continues the development of that style I spoke of in my last review. What's impressive about this poem is the depth of the emotional content as expressed by the colours, firstly those that affect you negatively, and in turn those hues which are turned into positive responses. The experience of love can then be experienced in a positive way. Loved your stanza formatting. Very sleek, very effective.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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This piece continues the development of that style I spoke of in my last review. What's impressive about this poem is the depth of the emotional content as expressed by the colours, firstly those that affect you negatively, and in turn those hues which are turned into positive responses. The experience of love can then be experienced in a positive way. Loved your stanza formatting. Very sleek, very effective.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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Hi, Mark. I have changed a couple of things and i would like to ask you to just look over it again, please. Thank you so much for all you do in a review :) I am learning. I am going to send you a private message and ask you something.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Dean Kuch
There's absolutely nothing wrong with the artwork in the slightest, Missy. In fact, it's rather stunning.
Stunning too (nice segue, right?) is this poem you have written around it.
As long as we harbor hatred in our hearts for an ex lover or cheating spouse, we are only hurting ourselves. It is essential that we forgive, for our own well being. But absolutely no one can tell us we have to forget. How can we expect others to love us if were are incapable of love ourselves?
It simply doesn't work that way.
Wonderfully written, Missy, and beautifully presented, as always.
~Dean ;}
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
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There's absolutely nothing wrong with the artwork in the slightest, Missy. In fact, it's rather stunning.
Stunning too (nice segue, right?) is this poem you have written around it.
As long as we harbor hatred in our hearts for an ex lover or cheating spouse, we are only hurting ourselves. It is essential that we forgive, for our own well being. But absolutely no one can tell us we have to forget. How can we expect others to love us if were are incapable of love ourselves?
It simply doesn't work that way.
Wonderfully written, Missy, and beautifully presented, as always.
~Dean ;}
Comment Written 23-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
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Smiling here :)
Thank you for sharing your time with me this evening.
This review is spot on for what I was going for.
Hugs
Missy
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It's always a pleasure to review your work, Missy. You're more than welcome.
~Dean :}
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It's always a pleasure to review your work, Missy. You're more than welcome.
~Dean :}
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Missy,
Letting go is so hard to do. I know. The presentation is outstanding. The picture is fine, some people will complain but don't pay them attention. I really like your poem and I can relate.
So many racing through me/Whirling, dancing along my skin=this is beautiful
The blueness of a soul/Lost without its other half=it's funny that you mention this, in Spain we say- finding your other half.
The redness of rage/Blinds my eyes/At your infidelity =I can relate.
Good job!
-gypsy
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
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Hello, Missy,
Letting go is so hard to do. I know. The presentation is outstanding. The picture is fine, some people will complain but don't pay them attention. I really like your poem and I can relate.
So many racing through me/Whirling, dancing along my skin=this is beautiful
The blueness of a soul/Lost without its other half=it's funny that you mention this, in Spain we say- finding your other half.
The redness of rage/Blinds my eyes/At your infidelity =I can relate.
Good job!
-gypsy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
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Hugs, Gypsy!!
Thanks hon!
Eyes closing... Night night
Missy
Comment from JarodMcLeay1
This is a very good poem. It is very interesting and creative. I'm wondering if you could look at my Poem, Life through a year, and see how it is and if it needs any editing.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
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This is a very good poem. It is very interesting and creative. I'm wondering if you could look at my Poem, Life through a year, and see how it is and if it needs any editing.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
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I already did sweetie... :)
Thanks for this review, Jarod.
Check your work... You even sent me a reply.
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great presentation. Your words flow well, and the message is great. I like the 'switch' in the meanings of the colors. The warning probably was not needed but better to play it safe. Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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This is a great presentation. Your words flow well, and the message is great. I like the 'switch' in the meanings of the colors. The warning probably was not needed but better to play it safe. Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Hi, JP, I want to thank you for giving me this time and this review hon and apologize for taking so long to leave this review. Busy with doctors lately.
Missy
