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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Another lovely poem, Tom, and an interesting lesson too. I liked the shifting of styles in this poem, and I had no trouble going from one to the other, you worked it very well. I thought the theme was really good too, I could imagine a man standing at the door saying goodbye to the sleeping lady. (the coward!) It was a pleasure to read, my friend. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
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Another lovely poem, Tom, and an interesting lesson too. I liked the shifting of styles in this poem, and I had no trouble going from one to the other, you worked it very well. I thought the theme was really good too, I could imagine a man standing at the door saying goodbye to the sleeping lady. (the coward!) It was a pleasure to read, my friend. :) Sandra
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, that would be cowardly in my book too.
Comment from William Ross
Very nice and very well done and written. has a great rhythm and rhyme. A beautiful good bye poem. thanks for sharing. have a great day.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
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Very nice and very well done and written. has a great rhythm and rhyme. A beautiful good bye poem. thanks for sharing. have a great day.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
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Thank you William.
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh Tom! You romantic old bugger! I didn,t know you still had it in you. I suppose I'd better wish you better luck next time and remember you are only as old as the woman you feel. Lol.
As for the poem, it is exactly what is required of an aubade - full of tender regret. Great stuff. I loved your bird/watchman heralding the dawn. This has to be with the modern aubade sinc we can't get the staff these days and the watchmen are no more.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
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Oh Tom! You romantic old bugger! I didn,t know you still had it in you. I suppose I'd better wish you better luck next time and remember you are only as old as the woman you feel. Lol.
As for the poem, it is exactly what is required of an aubade - full of tender regret. Great stuff. I loved your bird/watchman heralding the dawn. This has to be with the modern aubade sinc we can't get the staff these days and the watchmen are no more.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt, I guess I feeling pretty old these days, she 5 years older. Lol. Yup, a modern aubade.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It is sad but still beautiful, the lover's have to part in the morning, willingly or unwillingly. A last glimpse of the loved one before the last goodbye.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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It is sad but still beautiful, the lover's have to part in the morning, willingly or unwillingly. A last glimpse of the loved one before the last goodbye.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Thank you Sandra, I am glad you caught the nuances.
Comment from busses
This I felt had a lot of emotion. It appeared you had found a love you didn't want to give up. I felt the years of happiness end as if I were with you. I was routing for a better outcome in the end.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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This I felt had a lot of emotion. It appeared you had found a love you didn't want to give up. I felt the years of happiness end as if I were with you. I was routing for a better outcome in the end.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Thank you busses. I guess they all don't have a happy ending.
Comment from linsbm
This is the first time I read about this kind of poem and find this kind interesting. My favorite part is the third two parallel lines from the conclusion of this poem.You did an excellent job in writing this poem sentiments as well as fondness in featuring this write with purpose. Thanks for sharing, ) Lin
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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This is the first time I read about this kind of poem and find this kind interesting. My favorite part is the third two parallel lines from the conclusion of this poem.You did an excellent job in writing this poem sentiments as well as fondness in featuring this write with purpose. Thanks for sharing, ) Lin
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Thank you very much linsbm. I am pleased you enjoyed the form.
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Treischel, you are most welcome.
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem certainly conveys the emotion of separation. Thank you for your notes comparing the Aubade to the serenade, which takes place at the opposite time of the day. I admired your rhymes and the man's conclusion that "Our love was just an interlude" plus his gentle approach to saying goodbye. I place this in the category of the "lost love poem". -Joan
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Your poem certainly conveys the emotion of separation. Thank you for your notes comparing the Aubade to the serenade, which takes place at the opposite time of the day. I admired your rhymes and the man's conclusion that "Our love was just an interlude" plus his gentle approach to saying goodbye. I place this in the category of the "lost love poem". -Joan
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Thank you Joan. I would too.
Comment from His Grayness
Once again, my sincere thanks for another brilliant and very enlightening work followed by author's notes that are indeed profound and very meaningful. I always appreciate the kind sharing this author always offers to poets to help us learn about the vast dimensions of the world and history of Poetry! Thanks! Vance
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Once again, my sincere thanks for another brilliant and very enlightening work followed by author's notes that are indeed profound and very meaningful. I always appreciate the kind sharing this author always offers to poets to help us learn about the vast dimensions of the world and history of Poetry! Thanks! Vance
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Stank you again Vance. Your support and encouragement is much appreciated.
Comment from royowen
A very interesting poetic format, the varied rhyme gives it a sort of colour to the reading, the well written, the theme is refreshingly different from the general run of poetic love poems abroad. I enjoyed the eloquent delivery of a descriptively connecting theme of love and the morning, excellent work, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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A very interesting poetic format, the varied rhyme gives it a sort of colour to the reading, the well written, the theme is refreshingly different from the general run of poetic love poems abroad. I enjoyed the eloquent delivery of a descriptively connecting theme of love and the morning, excellent work, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Thank you Roy, I appreciate you capture of the essence.
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Most welcome
Comment from arelby
You have conveyed the essence of the moment and have done it with both art and discipline. I love a poet who cares enough to work for perfection in rhyme and cadence.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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You have conveyed the essence of the moment and have done it with both art and discipline. I love a poet who cares enough to work for perfection in rhyme and cadence.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Sweet hank you arelby. I appreciate the compliment.
