Comment from angel123

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. It flows well and good alliteration of words within, warm, cozy, cocoon. Good luck in the contest.

Angel123

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

thank you angel :-)

Comment from starkat

Excellent

A colorful, well presented stacked haiku that speaks to the mystery of metamorphosis. Within that warm cozy cocoon, lots of amazing things happen as the caterpillar sleeps and dreams of flying, and then its body dissolves into a little puddle where all the molecules and atoms move around, mix together and are rearranged and formed into a butterfly. The once-caterpillar, now- butterfly wakes and says, "Hey, dreams really do come true". Within the warm cozy cocoon, he forgets his life as a sleeping caterpillar - then goes outside for his first flight. He likes being a butterfly and sees that his caterpillar life was just a bad dream.

This is a thought-provoking stacked haiku as we witness the miraculous transformation. There might be a message that we should get more and better sleep and dream the impossible dream - then, voila - we might awake and find that all our dreams have come true. Nature does it better than we ever could - but hey, we're part of nature, too.

Enjoyed your stacked haiku. Great entry.
Wishing your luck.
Cheers ... ;-)

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

thank you kat :-)

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

As I am the worst poet on this site, I find it both amazing and impressive that you can do such a marvelous job with a Stacked Reverse Haiku Poem...I can't even do a standard one. I like this one very, very much.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

lol thank you sasha :)

Comment from William Ross

Good

Well yes and no, after butterflies awake caterpillar no more. Not sure if this really works out the way you want it. good luck in the contest with this.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

lol thank you william :)

Comment from foreverbutterfly

Excellent

Nice, simple and to the point. It's been a long time (probably since school) that I've read a haiku. Its very relevant to me at the moment butterflies mean a lot for me.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

me too! love butterflies :-)

Comment from johngie

Excellent

Nicely written stacked Haiku for the contest. These are not the easiest to write and make sense both ways. This should do very well. All the best of luck to you.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

thank you john :-)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This stacked reversed haiku poem, caterpillar sleeps, is a nice choice for the two-sided existence of the caterpillar and the butterfly.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

thank you bill :-)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your stacked haiku. Good job with the format. This format seems like a palindrome using haiku. Good job with the syllable count. Your colored font is nice. Good job and best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

thank you janny :-)

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

This is a wonderfully crafted piece you have entered in the reverse stacked haiku writing prompt. Cozily indeed, warm and pure. Best of luck in the contest.
God bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

thank you newman :)

reply by Neonewman on 06-Jan-2016

My pleasure!

reply by Anonymous Member on 08-Jan-2016

My pleasure!