Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

I loved reading your story and was drawn in. This piece paints a picture of this event in your life. The descriptive language flowed well. Thanks for sharing.
Bill--

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016

Hi Bill, Thank you so much for your great review. All the the best. Ulla

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

This is verrry well written, Ulla. I love this line: I sensed rather than heard the collective gasp.

You have a way with words. It's easy to read and tells just enough with no extra padding. I have one six left and I'm glad I can award it here. :)

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016

Phyllis, Thank you so much. It is high praise indeed. I am so pleased. It means a lot to me. All the best. Ulla :))

Comment from Sherylsart

Excellent

This is well written. It seems you did not get along with your adoptive mom. That is sad. I know what you mean with the organ. I don't mind it, but it can be really penetrating.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016

Hi Sheryl, thank you very much, and you are right my adoptive mother and I didn't get along at all. It'll all come to light why and how. As kid it the organ frightened the socks off me. All the best. Ulla

Comment from JTStone

Excellent

Interesting and starkly honest prose. It is compelling in the way you present it. It seemed the universe had conspired against you. Omens were in place whispering not to go. Yet you did...So much effort for a funeral that on the surface, despite it was the woman who raised you--you apparently didn't want to attend.
I have to see how this turns out.
Jimmy

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016

Hi Jimmy, Thank you so much and I am very pleased that you like my writing. All the best. Ulla

Comment from Wabigoon

Exceptional

Ulla --
I like this. I have lots of problems with it but I am interested in where you will take it. The writing is more...exciting and alive than the last. Maybe the pace pushes that -- I know how all these travel connections feel. And to be forced into that that while going to a funeral -- no time to feel anything, so I am not surprised you feel nothing at the end and yet the admission that you feel nothing is shocking. I'll leave it at that.

Here's the only problem I see:
the M4, jammed packed with cars, -- Jampacked.

Jeff

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016

Jeff, thank you so much for this great review and the stars. I am so pleased. I am sorry if you are disturbed by my story but that is how it was. More will be revealed as to why it was so. Thanks again and all the best. Ulla

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Oh my goodness! Is this a part of your story about finding your birth mother. Did you not get on well with your adoptive mother? It sounds like the onset of another story. Interesting Ulla. xsx Nancy

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016

It is the onset of another story. This takes place eight years prior to The Quest. A story that needs to be told. At least for me. Thank you so much, Nancy. All the best. Ulla

Comment from doggymad

Excellent

Great descriptive passages throughout Ulla. I can understand how you felt as I was a reluctant attendee at my adoptive mothers funeral also.

There are a few spelling errors which I find unusual for you

was twelve -were twelve

alivate = aleviate

week smile = weak smile

greated with a big smile- greeted

frightned = frightened

orbituary = obituary

consequenses consequences

Not deducting as you are usually spot on

hugs
Freda

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Thank you so much Freda, I have been sloppy here and don't feel too good about it. Thank you so much for sorting me out. I will be more careful in the future. Very much appreciated. I always have to work this little bit harder as English is not my first language. But that's no excuse. Thanks again, and for being lenient on me. All the best. Ulla

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

I always thought that I was the only one who got a weird feeling every time I heard organ music at a church. It's nothing bad or anything, I am a Bible believing Christian who enjoys music and singing along with the fellowship. I just don't like the sounds an organ makes in church. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016

Hi Ric, No you are not the only one. As a child I wanted to run a mile when I heard the organ. Thanks for a fine review. All the best. Ulla

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This was very interesting, I felt the anxiety and pressure you described. Is this another vein of your story? Is the other one completed? Now I'm very curious about what cause the falling -out with your adopted mother.

Typo? "costums" = (customs)

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016

Thanks so much, Seaglass. I have mad the correction. All the best. Ulla

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

A sad comment/ essay on your adoptive mothers funeral. I suppose that your Mother chose that particular church, the one she did not care for to make amends?

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016

Thanks so much. Much more will be revealed in future chapters. All the best. Ulla