Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I never experienced that kind of skating so I read with interest but couldn't quite relate except for maybe "frozen hands." It sounded like a perfect family outing but now I'm curious as to why it was perhaps only a dream.
Best wishes in the contest if it's not over yet.
So glad that you decided to return to Fanstory!

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024

Thanks for reading this. I wrote it years ago so I'm not sure how it posted now. But i remember it was a good day.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This story was heart-warming and full of what we like to recall about growing up. The revelation that it is a manufactured experience is heart-breaking. It was set up well and the built to the point that the unexpected ending was very effective.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016

Thank you for your comments. I appreciate the time you took to read my story. --

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Very well done author. You have adhered to the contest guidelines as this is non-fiction even though the memory arises from how great it would've been if only.

I remember playing crack the whip on the ice. It was a lot of fun on lakes but not so much fun on the indoor rink.

Best of luck to you in the contest. It looks like a good one!

Gloria

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you very much

Comment from AJGOLD

Excellent

I wish I could say that I did not understand your story. You were far better off, if you did have visions of happiness.

I would hold on to them, they maybe better than reality.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you for reviewing

Comment from Gypsymooncat

Excellent

Naww, this brought a tear to my eye when I got to the end and it was only a dream. I love how you describe the sense of family here, and also how you painted the picture so well of the skating rink and that damnable cold! Well written, I couldn't find anything that needed correction, and it flowed beautifully too.

This'd have to be up there in the winners slot and I wish you luck!
Cheers
Chris
xoxoxoxoxoxo

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you very much for this great review

Comment from Katiesherrill

Exceptional

This is really good. I'm giving it a six stars because it was well written. You had my attention with the picture and kept it with your story. Your ending caught me off guard though and that is a great thing, but I want more. I want to know why this is only in her imagination. What happened to her? It may not be the time tell it though...

Well done.

Katie

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Wow, thanks for all the stars. I appreciate your kind review. And, there is more to the story. This is just a part of my memoirs.